Superchaos的作文贴……

superchaosUID: 2863434

TPO8 25th AUG Integrated Writing

The reading passage explores three suspect points about the accuracy of the memoir of Chevalier. And accordingly, the professor in the listening passage refutes each of them by offering clear explanations.

First, Chevalier is doubted to be a rich one in the reading passage since he seemed to have borrowed amount of money from a Swiss merchant. However, the professor contends that the event of borrowing money did occur only because Chevalier was exchanging his wealth from stuff to circulating money, which might consume time for the process.

Second, to clarify the doubt that there could not be a possibility of recording the precise conversations between Chevalier and Voltaire as stated in the reading passage, the professor asserts that Chevalier had written down all the talks later after he met Voltaire. And it is these regular records that helped Chevalier to finish her memoir. This was also testified by a witness.

Third, the reading passage believes that Chevalier escaped from a notorious prison by bribing the jailers rather than by making a hole in the ceiling to flee, like Chevalier had claimed in her memoir. In the professor’s defense, the fact that the ceiling of the prison was immediately repaired right after the escape of Chevalier clearly implied he successfully escaped through the broken ceiling.
At the same time, the professor points out that some people who were more politically powerful than Chevalier could not be set free by bribing, therefore, this was not a reasonable way for Chevalier to run away from the prison in Venice.

louisa427UID: 2458920

About the phenomenon of adopting new practices to receive eco-certification, the reading passage explores three aspects: citizens’ attitude, price and market to prove that companies in the United States will not do the same as foreign counterpart do. However, the professor in the lecture reputes all the points accordingly by offering convincing reasons.& Q! f, U: p5 ^0 X2 s0 X) |$ u

First, the professor contends that regardless of the fact that consumers do not concern about the advertisement, American people tend to treat them differently, that is to say, consumers’ attitude reverses if the advertisement is conducted by some prestige organization.这段也太简单了，听力的部分应该再多描述一点。

Second, the professor claims that based on the price consideration, American consumers is likely to swing much only if the price difference differs a lot. Since the prices of wood products are all about the same level, other factors like some certifications will be taken into account. Therefore those wood products who have obtained the eco-certification would benefit from the competition.) _, T/ ^7 X) x9 d
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Third, rather than focusing to the domestic market exclusively as stated in the reading passage, the professor asserts that these wood companies should be aware the threatens imposed from abroad since the competition has become global. Many foreign wood corporations would hit into American market, and consequently without necessary competitive qualification like eco-certification, domestic wood companies will definitely lose their share in the market.
楼主的语言功底是相当的强悍啊，只是就这篇文章而言，第一二点的听力内容描述的过于概括，再展开点就非常棒了，学习了！

小飞瞎UID: 2865496

30# superchaos

Amongst(among) various kinds of vocations, it tends to be hard for people to locate their desire one(desire 是名词啊，后面为甚么还加一个one呢) by trying merely once. Before they take a long term career, young man will benefit from experiencing several different jobs.

The biggest advantages of trying several different jobs are that it can help young people broaden their sights, as well as approach（作者是想表达接近人群的意思么？后面加人好像是有比较的含义） all kinds of people which are involved in different fields. Nowadays the competition in society is such a severe one that people can hardly adjust to it if they are constrained by their specific majors. The drawback（这里直接接，与上一句相连不上，最好要注明是什么的缺点） is that the options are really narrowed down by focusing on certain kind of occupation.（The drawback of focusing on the certain kind of occupation is that the options are really narrowed down ） To be more competitive, young people should have the capacity to accommodate (of accommodating)different job requirements, under which the young can attempt to(to去掉) several different career selections, which will help them extend their understanding（是否可以这样搭配？？） of work, broaden their sights of job. Moreover, doing different jobs brings more opportunities to approach different kinds of people, who will be helpful and directive（指令？？？） for young people to diminish the chances of becoming lost.

Asides from these effects, taking several different jobs can guide young people to find their real interest more easily and practically. It is acknowledged that interests play a significant role in people’s life career. If not interested in what he/she is doing, people will lose enthusiasm shortly after doing years of work. However, by participating diverse kinds of jobs, young people gradually discover and develop their interest, and consequently, these empirical practices help them realize the desirable sort of vocation they are pursuing, which will influences young man’s future job decisions positively.
A long term career is what you do for years or even decades,(换成句号。另起一句话) to（To） be fully prepared for such a decision, young people should better involve several different jobs to establish their better understanding of word(world) and to clarify(表示疑惑？) their interests from within. 搂主很牛的阿！用词造句很棒，好话不多说了。我也就是找了些小毛病，要是那些是错的，你可一定要告诉我！还有你可以再添加些例子，要不全是论述，不够说服力啊！共同进步哈！

superchaosUID: 2863434

谢谢小飞瞎跟Colin_h的修改..结合你们的修改我回去改了改原文,至于你提出的这几点疑问:
1.Amongst=Among,二者没什么本质区别,只是用Among的人太多了我尝试换了一个……
2.approach我想用来表示"完成任务的方法、手段",但是这是approach作名词时候的意思,我这里是用作动词,的确不妥……
3.The drawback前面有hardly/constrained,衔接上应该没问题……
4.attempt本身就能作及物动词,后面的to去掉最好,Asides from应该改为Aside from,capacity of doing/to do均可,after后面加不加doing都可以,不加的话可以简洁些……
5.locate,extand their understanding, directive, clarify,empirical都可以,不要局限其literally意思啦……
6.恩...例子...marked,想想我经历也挺丰富的,例子什么的没问题啦,而且字数也能多些……
Thank you all!~:D

bearseuUID: 2873933

楼主功力很剽悍。。。学习之，稍微修改了一些。。。

superchaosUID: 2863434

8月26日交
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign country?

When it comes to topic of learning about a foreign country, people tend to believe that travelling or living abroad personally are the best ways to appreciate other country’s cultures and customs. These direct experiences are bound to have their advantages, however, I would like to state that by reading newspapers and magazines people can truly understand a different country best.

First, it is newspapers and magazines that provide the most utterly systematic and comprehensive knowledge about a country people has never been. Hardly can one person learn about a unfamiliar country fully since whether big or small, a country is always a compound conception that contains various aspects about itself, from traditional conservations that inherited hundreds of years ago to the famous characters who deeply influenced the country. Under this circumstance, the privilege of systematic and comprehensive reports and records that newspapers and magazines provide guarantee people a better chance to learn about a foreign country. Amount of enthusiastic readers and expert editors compose lively works based on their own unique experiences, vividly revealing lots of interesting and meaningful foreign local cultures. Through reading these well organized reports and articles, people become familiar with these exotic customs effortlessly and thoroughly. Besides, if only interested in particular certain part of a foreign country, people can easily index the printed and find what they want. The convenient accessibility saves people lots of time to concentrate on the special part of country they like.

Moreover, the cost of learning about a foreign country through newspapers and magazines is far less than that of other ways. It is acknowledges that the expenditure of either travelling or living abroad is strikingly high and not any of us could afford this. Contrarily, buying newspapers or magazines is practical for majority of people, and most importantly it does not hinder us to undertake the amazing sceneries of foreign countries. Take me as an example, I am merely a student and I have no money to spend for travelling. Nevertheless, I can afford the cost of weekly magazine called “National Geography”. By reading these books, I learn a lot about American cultures and customs, and I seem to have become an expert about America since each time we talk about USA, I am always the one who talk the most.

Despite that other ways of learning about different counties have their advantages, reading newspapers and magazines is definitely a practical and systematic way to better understand a foreign country.

superchaosUID: 2863434

TPO9 26th AUG

The reading passage points out several problems of using petroleum as the main source of power, such as the limited quantity or pollution problems, etc. And it claims the unstoppable trend of replacement of hydrogen-based fuel. Even though the professor in the listening passage concedes the drawbacks the traditional energies, she refutes the impending replacement of new fuel.

First, the professor contends that both the abstract process and the storage technology are difficult to accomplish. Unlike what have stated in the reading passage, hydrogen cannot be directly used for fuel unless it is transformed into pure liquid status, which requires extreme advanced technology, not to mention the restrict storage condition needed for liquid hydrogen: negative 253 degrees!

Second, contrary to the clean utilization of hydrogen fuel as claimed in the reading passage, the professor asserts that though the combustion of hydrogen itself does not generate toxic gas, it is the process of producing hydrogen source that pollutes the environment because of the consumption of oil or coals, which brings a lot of pollution.

Third, the professor contradicts that the relatively high cost of using hydrogen fuel since a special metal is an inevitable element of manufacturing the engine, which ensures the safe chemical reactions of the new energy. Unfortunately, this metal is so rare and so difficult to produce that the cost of such a device is strikingly expensive.


感觉自己越来越啰嗦了……

伶女UID: 2797207

已修改～

belinda_777UID: 2669901

改好了

superchaosUID: 2863434

“嗯。”脸庞干涩的点了点头，望着那娇笑打闹着逐渐远去的一群女子背影，罗布无奈的摇了摇头，萧玉没邀请他们。他们自然也没脸强行跟上去，所以，没有了美人相陪地一众男生，都只得萎靡的收拾好东西，旋即全身无力的 ...
曹仆 发表于 2010-8-27 15:25

What the hell is this?

FannieHsuUID: 2861996

抱歉楼主，改好了一直没有放上来。。。。以为都已经给你了，sorry!!!

yeyelovenimoUID: 2774843

36# superchaos
When it comes to topic of learning about a foreign country, people tend to believe that travelling or living abroad personally are the best ways to appreciate other country’s cultures and customs. These direct experiences are bound to have their advantages, however, I would like to state that by reading newspapers and magazines people can truly understand a different country best.
  First, it is newspapers and magazines that provide the most utterly systematic and comprehensive knowledge about a country people has never been. Hardly can one person learn about a (an) unfamiliar country fully since whether big or small, a country is always a compound conception that contains various aspects about itself, from traditional conservations that inherited hundreds of years ago to the famous characters who deeply influenced the country.（建议把定语whether big or small 放到a country 后面）Under this circumstance, the privilege of systematic and comprehensive reports and records that newspapers and magazines provide guarantee(s) people a better chance to learn about a foreign country. Amount of enthusiastic readers and expert editors compose lively works based on their own unique experiences, vividly revealing lots of interesting and meaningful foreign local cultures. Through reading these well organized reports and articles, people become familiar with these exotic customs effortlessly and thoroughly. Besides, if only interested in particular certain part of a foreign country, people can easily index the printed and find what they want. The convenient accessibility saves people lots of time to concentrate on the special part of country they like.
  Moreover, the cost of learning about a foreign country through newspapers and magazines is far less than that of other ways. It is acknowledges(acknowledged) that the expenditure of either travelling or living abroad is strikingly high and not any of us could afford this. Contrarily, buying newspapers or magazines is practical for majority of people, and most importantly it does not hinder us to undertake the amazing sceneries of foreign countries. Take me as an example, I am merely a student and I have no money to spend for travelling. Nevertheless, I can afford the cost of weekly magazine called “National Geography”. By reading these books, I learn a lot about American cultures and customs, and I seem to have become an expert about America since each time we talk about USA, I am always the one who talk the most.
  Despite that other ways of learning about different counties have their advantages, reading newspapers and magazines is definitely a practical and systematic way to better understand a foreign country.

句式多样和复杂，英语功底可见一斑哦，呵呵
内容写得很丰满，话题展开的很不错，值得学习~~~~~
有个别的语法错误，注意数的一致，个别句子有点长，不太利于理解

superchaosUID: 2863434

27TH AUG Independent Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
University students should take part-time jobs.

The purpose of education in university is not single, for it not only teaches students advanced knowledge, but it also facilitates them a platform where they could learn how to better equip themselves to face the coming competition when step into society. As one of the most practical ways, by taking part-time jobs, students could gain valuable experiences for future job application, as well as necessary maturity for their lives.

Before fitting into social system, part-time jobs experiences guarantee students more competitive situation than those who haven’t. It is acknowledged that majority of university students choose to work after graduation, and the most concerned issues is that they always lack basic understanding or skills for work. To reverse this phenomenon, taking part-time jobs provides students more opportunities to accomplish their changes from schools to society ahead. By doing this, university students are able to learn useful skills and understand the essence of get along with different people. Employers tend to prefer those who possess part-time experience since this will reduce the cost of training new employees. Students nowadays clearly have this awareness and that is why they are more likely to prepare themselves for this consideration. Besides, doing part-time jobs means more chances to associate what they have learnt in schools with the real problems, which is significant for students to improve their abilities of applying theories to realistic issues.

What is more, the process of part-time jobs helps students cultivate a strong sense of responsibility. As adults, university students are supposed to live independently, and taking part-time jobs is an ideal means for them to establish their independence. People begin to be self-reliance and mature as soon as they learn how tough the actual life would be. Once I received a part-time job in my second summer vocation: deliver 200 newspapers every morning. These days were quite hard and I attempted quitting for several times. But when I finally made it through I suddenly found myself more mature than ever before, these valuable experience have taught me the meaning of life.

There are always more than only studying in colleges. University students should utilize every chance to take a part-time job, which will definitely benefit them from the positive effect the experience would bring.

layla1989UID: 2832481

改好啦~

bearseuUID: 2873933

28日的替你改好了