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发表于 2010-8-21 22:11:52 |只看该作者

8月21综合写作

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发表于 2010-8-21 22:12:27 |只看该作者

8月21，独立写作

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发表于 2010-8-21 22:13:05 |只看该作者

31# jjooyy
好的，好的，不好意思，昨天出去玩了，改了几篇作文就跑了，回来就忘了给

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发表于 2010-8-21 22:27:04 |只看该作者

本帖最后由 serena-blue 于 2010-8-21 22:42 编辑

louisa 同学，不好意思，我好像发觉，我是不是作文给你改错了，应该改独立的改成综合的了，还是哪天忘了改了？因为综合和独立的没有在一个小组，我搞的有点头昏，呵呵，如果你发现了，给我留个言~~我一定改正！

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发表于 2010-8-21 23:21:57 |只看该作者

louisa 同学，不好意思，我好像发觉，我是不是作文给你改错了，应该改独立的改成综合的了，还是哪天忘了改了？因为综合和独立的没有在一个小组，我搞的有点头昏，呵呵，如果你发现了，给我留个言~~我一定改正！
serena-blue 发表于 2010-8-21 22:27

没事，没事，我也不知道啊，过去了就过去了

820 intergrate lousia.doc

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发表于 2010-8-21 23:55:53 |只看该作者

文档名字打错了不好意思

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发表于 2010-8-22 13:46:33 |只看该作者

修改好啦。。。

8月21，综合写作lousia.doc

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不放弃，不灰心

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发表于 2010-8-22 15:35:54 |只看该作者

8月21，独立写作.doc

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发表于 2010-8-22 23:03:44 |只看该作者

The professor in the lecture casts doubts on the three points which are made to narrate the use of the Chaco houses in New Mexico.

First of all, the professor indicates that though the outside of the houses resemble the later American apartments, however, inside of those houses there are not enough fire places for people who ever lived here for cooking. The fire place in one of the house rendered the evidence that it could only used by ten families at most. In addition, there are not enough rooms for over one hundred people live in them. Therefore, the author’s statement about the Chaco house is the residence which could be filled with hundreds of people is not convincing.

Also, in the reading passage, the author believes that the Chaco houses were used to store grain maize is not accurate语法错误. For the reasons that there is not that much room for storage and the floor was not found covered by maize or any of the maze container was left in the houses三个句子并列？晕.

What’s more, the professor argues that mound could be used in construction other than in ceremony （other than? Rather than吧？）. Since there are other construction materials such as sand, stone and other construction tools have been excavated already found. 一句话两谓语When it comes to the pots, which are believed to be used in ceremony, with the left-over has been found may belong to the construction workers.单复数？

不好意思，我刚刚接触综合写作，在答题上给不了什么意见，所以只能看看语法。楼主的写作功力应该是不错的，但觉得写这篇文章的时候，有点随意了