muyitong的作文本

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Every child is the most treasure (这个词如果是名词，就不该加most，若果是形容词，就缺一个被修饰的名词，否则that引导的从句做谁的同位语？) that is loved by his or her parents. Every parents hope their children will have a bright future. I firmly believe that parents pay all attention and love on their children, so what they do is enriched with their heart(???).

Sometimes children could make some determination about their future, but they should discuss with parents first. In any case, parents know more than us, just like(这里用such as好一点吧) social knowledges(不加s), experiences, various people, accidental events, and so on. If we encountered some problems which we have(前面不是过去式吗？) not meet before, our parents would have something talk to us. Perhaps, you would not follow their words, but their mind will concern you. For example, my older brother Jim, who was just graduated 2 years ago, but he haven't find(用分词形式) a good job, even he has already stay at home with his parents for 2 years(???). It is because that he never according to(这个用法不对吧。。。用obey是不是会好一点) his parents, and do anything(everything) by(by) himself. 6 years ago, he choose(chose) a university which is academic of art as his interest(???). His parents had told to(划掉) him that the art（少一个动词）only his interest not his career, but he did not defer to his parents. Then, when he learn the basic knowledge about art history and other boring theories, he realized that it was not colorful as he thought. As a result, he did not pass the examination, and graduated late. As he learned little in his college, he could do little in his life(???). Obviously, this kind of determine which he made by himself was not fit to him. In fact, in some respects, we should ask for parents' opinion.

However, there is something to the opposing point of view. Some parents do not know the really(real) considering ideas of their children, led to a reduction which is the communication between children and parents. I do not think it is a good new(???) that there is a parents-and-child talk nothing to each other. So, parents should try to know more about their children, do not wait for the children make some decision but do not let you know, it was dangerous!

In conclusion，I tend to think that parents allow children to make the choices depends mainly on what is the choice is and the(???) his or her own qualities. Parents have much more experiences in the society than that of(that of) children, but they should hear from(???) their children, inspire them but not be a law onto parents themselves.

by: lengningji

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9-1 综合+独立 改楼主进步很大，继续加油！

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7# muyitong
The female professor points out that it is unsuccessful to stop the spread of the cane toad with those three ways which the reading passage says. There are three points she makes to oppose the main idea of reading passage, as presented below.  P% z6 i+ P% w8 I$ z0 e

First of all, she points out there will be some rivers and streams which is flowing from one side to other side. It will take some young toads and eggs to the other side. So it can not prevent the population of cane toad increasing. It comes into conflict with what the reading passage argues最好讲一下阅读讲了什么.- h! l" X( s9 f+ A8 p
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Secondly, the volunteers could destroy the toads, but the untrained volunteers would destroy many Australia native frogs which is unharmful. It is difficult to tell the cane toad apart from native frogs especially when it's young. It is another part where a theory in the reading is dubious.* ?8 {- U8 L3 i( \7 N3 h
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Thirdly, using virus is a bad idea. The cane toad is a large amphibian species native to Central and South America, and it play an important role in the ecosystem. if they are destroyed, the whole ecosystem will suffer. 这段有个转运到那里的过程，没听出来！It contradicts what the reading passage says.

阅读的内容太泛泛了 应该再具体一些 说阅读讲了些什么 有点套话的感觉
我的作文写好了  让你久等了
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1119900-10-1.html
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9.3 改

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11# muyitong

改好了 独立的

longxue26UID: 2687755

12# muyitong 改好了 还是有些和录音里不太符合 感觉 文章用词 句式都有些偏简单.

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9.4 独立 改