issue70 斑竹没时间，不看也罢，损害眼球，呵呵

feier521UID: 109747

70"In any profession—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership."

我已改过一次，用了一个多小时，每段首句主体句，斑竹，提提意见吧。

Leaders are pivots or spiritual backbones of an enterprise, whether their leadership are good or not will directly decide the fate of their departments. Therefore, the regulations of selecting, appointing or renewing leaders are of significant importance. However, whether changing leaders at certain intervals depends on organizations' concrete situations.

[B]In some political fields, this way that the speaker recommends above may be justified. [/B]  Staying in a high position in a long period, politicians or heads of some parties easily degenerate into autocrats. A sense of "I am the most powerful" grows in their minds which greatly harms those who are led and stifles the development of a political organization, and thereby they can not tolerate those who betray their will while put forward some creative thoughts, they cannot permit those who violate their power and attempt to make a reformation. Numerous reformers are oppressed and even persecuted in autocrats’ tenure, yet more and more rebels or revolutionists stood up to revolt them, and at last their authority will be toppled over. Many autocratic emperors in old China serve as typical examples. In order for preventing this sense from spreading in potentates' minds, the best way is to limit their tenure, say 5 years or even less. The outstanding achievements made by American government are the results of this regulation to some extent.

[B][I]However, in some areas such as private companies or small enterprises, leaders are seldom replaced by others. [/I]  [/B]  This situation may be due to two reasons: in the first place, the companies are invested by themselves or their forefathers and all property belongs to them, of course, it is impossible for them to submit their companies to others; Otherwise, this method is the most fitted one for their existence and development in today's competitive society. Because leaders have particular expertise and abundant experience about their own fields, and they are even familiar with every detail of companies like structure, staff, customers and market, so they can ensure their enterprises to survive and thrive in the market.

[B][U]In most of professions such as education and larger business, the combination of the two ways is beneficial for their developing. [/U]  [/B]  Some of old leaders are so traditional and conservative that they can not catch up with modern pace and accept reforms or creations, and undoubtedly they should step down and make room for new ones, yet others who possess rich education or business experience should continuously perform their function in their areas. Otherwise, not only do new leaders definitely bring fresh blood, ample energy and new thoughts into their organizations but sometimes they are conceited, impertinent, presumptuous, immature and unskillful. So as I think, the effective combination of these two types of leaders, with their mutual complement or improvement, will bring huge merits to these professions.

In conclusion, what kind of tenure regulations should be applied depends on the characteristic of the enterprise. Proper leadership will contribute to enterprise, or else, it will result in inefficiency, bankruptcy, or even autocracy.

tomatoeggsUID: 82073

怎能如此客气？搞得我怪不好意思！看ing……

feier521UID: 109747

怎么斑竹们不帮我改了啊？555
嫌偶写的烂，还是嫌偶只知道索取，不知道奉献（帮别人改文章）啊？
我以后改还不行吗？

feier521UID: 109747

可能我的标题起的不好。呵呵...

00foxUID: 112731

说到眼球，真的看痛了~~~~明天看

caichongbaobaoUID: 136935

Leaders are pivots or spiritual backbones of an enterprise, whether their leadership are good （leadership不和good搭配吧）or not will directly decide the fate of their departments（我觉得decide 不如用influence准确，个人观点。department 改为profession会不会好些？）. Therefore, the regulations of selecting, appointing or renewing leaders are of significant importance（重复？）. However, whether changing leaders at certain intervals depends on organizations' concrete situations.（是不是再加上not on...扣题比较好？）
我觉得这种论证似乎不是很好但是我不知道怎么改再等牛人吧。不好意思。
还有这个题目和issue87In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."的异同是什么？

brilliant77UID: 11224

语法方面偶没有把握就不说了。
“In some political fields, this way that the speaker recommends above may be justified. ” justified 我觉得用applicable 更好一些。
另外，政治领域里的另外的部分好像没有提到，是不是不够完整？

caichongbaobaoUID: 136935

In most of professions such as education and larger business, the combination of the two ways is beneficial for their developing. Some of old leaders are so traditional and conservative that they can not catch up with modern pace and accept reforms or creations, and undoubtedly they should step down and make room for new ones, yet others who possess rich education or business experience should continuously perform their function in their areas. Otherwise, not only do new leaders definitely bring fresh blood, ample energy and new thoughts into their organizations but sometimes they are conceited, impertinent, presumptuous, immature and unskillful.(这里不能用not only.. but,可改为...at the same time...,或干脆直接转折) So as I think（这种说法没见过，去掉as吧或者直接说therefore）, the effective combination of these two types of leaders, with their mutual complement or improvement, will bring huge merits to these professions. （我觉得对于新老leadership 都先说优点再说缺点比较好）个人意见.......
对了，怎么改变字体的颜色啊？？

feier521UID: 109747

谢谢，brilliant77和宝宝，受益匪浅。
还有这个题目和issue87In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."的异同是什么？
我觉得还真差不多，新人及老家伙的优缺点两个题目都可以用，但70要说 当各领域“领导”的作用，87是说搞科研“发现”的作用，而且70 还要说是否要让老的下台，让新的当头。不知对否？

我也觉得那一段写的一把糊似的，好处坏处一起写，呵呵。以后一起讨论！
1 可直接在页面右上（下）角的“回复主题”中改。
2 如果你回复完以后，下面的那个“编辑”里可以改颜色，不过我都没有用过。
不知道在“快速回复”可不可以改。

angeikimUID: 4857

最初由 caichongbaobao 发布
[B]对了，怎么改变字体的颜色啊？？[/B]

用这个格式：
[ＣＯＬＯＲ=你想变成的颜色]   [/ＣＯＬＯＲ]

feier521UID: 109747

[ＣＯＬＯＲ=你想变成的颜色] [/ＣＯＬＯＲ]
真的？ 我自己可以变？
有错误，我试了一下，怎么还是黄色，没变！呵呵。

feier521UID: 109747

蛋蛋，不是说在看ing   吗？
怎么没把对偶的意见贴出来啊？

韩庐山UID: 137393

我觉得这三个领域的事情有它的同通性, 结合起来分析可能会更好。
不换的原因有：1。经验 2。对职业的熟悉 3。人际关系的广泛
换的原因有：1。独断 2。不愿接受行业中新的变化，守旧 3。稳固的地位会使人失去奋斗的动力
换与不换要按照个人的不同表现而决定，好的留下，不行的换掉。不能机械的决定。

在讲小企业的时候，因为财产的私有而造成没法换人的情形可以省略。因为我觉得题目说的是该不该定期换人，论述没法换人的原因稍稍有些偏题。

Leaders are pivots or spiritual backbones of an enterprise, whether their leadership are good or not will directly decide the fate of their departments. Therefore, the regulations of selecting, appointing or renewing leaders are of significant importance（significant 和 important 重复）. However, whether changing leaders at certain intervals (at certain intervals好象有些不通) depends on organizations' concrete situations.

纯属个人观点。

tomatoeggsUID: 82073

谢谢楼上的，观点很好啊。

feier，sorry啊，现在才帖上来，希望不会迟。

70"In any profession—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership."

Leaders are pivots or spiritual backbones of an enterprise, whether their leadership are good or not（参考evil） will directly decide (直接用determine就可)the fate （参考future）of their departments. Therefore, the regulations of selecting, appointing or renewing leaders are of significant importance. However, whether changing leaders at certain intervals depends on organizations' concrete situations. 我觉得你还是立场鲜明一点为好。用套话：I strongly agree that …,

In some political fields, this way that the speaker recommends above may be justified. Staying in a high position in a long period, politicians or heads of some parties easily degenerate into autocrats. A sense of "I am the most powerful" grows in their minds which greatly harms those who are led and stifles the development of a political organization, and thereby they can not tolerate those who betray their will while put forward some creative thoughts, they cannot permit those who violate their power and attempt to make a reformation. Numerous reformers are oppressed and even persecuted in autocrats’ tenure, yet more and more rebels or revolutionists stood up to revolt them, and at last their authority will be toppled over. Many autocratic emperors in old China serve as typical examples. In order for preventing this sense from spreading in potentates' minds, the best way is to limit their tenure, say 5 years or even less. The outstanding achievements made by American government are the results of this regulation to some extent. 说实话，你这些例子好是好，但总觉得有点露骨的感觉，特别是最后一句。另外我建议你查查有关政治类的历史文献，这样你就可以找出一些鲜活的例子：有名有姓。比如非洲大陆的政权更迭，或者一些中欧国家等。

However, in some areas such as private companies or small enterprises, leaders are seldom replaced by others. This situation may be due to two reasons: in the first place, the companies are invested by themselves or their forefathers and all property belongs to them, of course, it is impossible for them to submit their companies to others; Otherwise, this method is the most fitted one for their existence and development in today's competitive society. Because leaders have particular expertise and abundant experience about their own fields, and they are even familiar with every detail of companies like structure, staff, customers and market, so they can ensure their enterprises to survive and thrive in the market.

In most of professions such as education and larger business, the combination of the two ways is beneficial for their developing. Some of old leaders are so traditional and conservative that they can not catch up with modern pace and accept reforms or creations, and undoubtedly they should step down and make room for new ones, yet others who possess rich education or business experience should continuously perform their function in their areas. Otherwise, not only do new leaders definitely bring fresh blood, ample energy and new thoughts into their organizations but sometimes they are conceited, impertinent, presumptuous, immature and unskillful. So as I think, the effective combination of these two types of leaders, with their mutual complement or improvement, will bring huge merits to these professions. 你这一段说理是有了，但是关于new leaders方面的complimentary好处还是欠缺。另外典型例子还是缺乏。比如说coca-cola这些大公司的高层变动，你可以在管理学找到一些灵感的。

In conclusion, what kind of tenure regulations should be applied depends on the characteristic of the enterprise. Proper leadership will contribute to enterprise, or else, it will result in inefficiency, bankruptcy, or even autocracy.

总得来说，你的语言功底不错的，但是第二段略显chinglish啊。你再改改吧，我会继续跟进的。这篇文章不同于其他体裁，我觉得应该得到重视。

feier521UID: 109747

蛋蛋，想煞偶了。：D
我也觉得肚子没货，每次写作都没有具体例子或者名人名言可举，例子都是太笼统，
说理时不断重复自己的理由，凑字数....
现在充电来得及吗？唉。怪自己阅读面窄、留在脑子中的例子太少。
佩服蛋蛋，有那么渊博的知识面，随手可举那么多的例子。my icon耶！