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With the fast social development, people appear to have more and more differences in their social or political views. In my opinion, people do have the right to choose their own social or political religion, but they should not try to lead children to make the same choice. So I agree with the statement that teachers should not show their social or political views in the classroom.  s- u9 D% S( ~( C4 u4 c& J  i3 a
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First of all, a teacher’s mission is to teach students knowledge of a certain subject and let them understand how to learn. Showing social or political views has nothing to do with such behavior (觉得是和mission无关，而非“行为”。可改为demand). It is definitely useless. What’s more, such kind of behavior may have negative effects on children. Sometimes the class may be boring, but a story of a political event maybe fresh and attractive. Students may concentrate on the fresh view and instance rather than listen to the teacher carefully.4 s6 m, M3 ^: o: h
Secondly, students are too young and too native (naive) to have a political view. In children’s eyes, politic has no difference with a new funny game. Then do not understand the true meaning of holding a social or political view. When they become older, they will make their own choice independently. And also, in most cases, teacher is a role model, students trust teacher a lot. If teachers show their social or political view to the students, there can be a misleading. The students may never have the chance to have him/her own choice on social or political views.
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Finally, teachers are real people, they have desires which maybe “I need to do something to help（support好点） my party.” Such ideas（phenomenon好点） will not be observed directly, but they really exist and influence people’s behavior. For example, teacher may hint the students that one certain party is better. This is unfair to other party(parties). & r2 N  p# O% M9 h2 o

( M. g% I+ j' M; }0 c4 QTo sum up, show social or political views in class will cause(换成is，unfair是形容词) unfair，which would cause low concentration on main knowledge. It can also destroy the students’ chance to have their own choice. So it is wise to forbidden (forbid) teachers to show their own social or political views in class.

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观点清晰，值得学习^^
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有点小词的词性多注意，写完最好检查（我也是），很容易发现笔误之类的
加油~~^^

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10月12日交
09.03.29 do you agree or disagree, students will not use printed books anymore.

As an important medium that preserves information for thousands years, printed books are facing a strong and powerful challenge in modern society. In the manufacture of pages, poisonous gases, polluted water, and other waste bring bad effects on the environment. In my opinion, printed book will disappear in the school, and new medium based on electric technology will play an important role in education.

First of all, printed books can cause a lot of waste. As a student, he/she may use hundreds of books before he graduates. Most of the books can be use for just one semester. A survey from the government indicates that, thousands tons of timbers will be used in the manufacture of students’ books. In nowdays, the “green house effect” has become a serious problem, we can make great contribution to the environment if we students never use printed book anymore.

What’s worse, there is a big different between the modern society and the old times. Information changes so fast that no printed books can follow the step of the information. A strange phenomenon can be seen in the university that the professors and the students do not use any book when they are having a class although they do have a book. An powerful explanation to the phenomenon is that the knowledge on the printed books is out. New data and information from the internet make the printed book as a ornament

Finally, the new electric technology makes the “no-page” course possible. Ten years ago, we can not imagine a course that students and teachers are far away from each other, which is now called on-line courses. As the same, we can store a whole library in a electric book. The “book can connect to the internet to download the new data and knowledge, so we do not need to worry about whether the information is out. And also, the book is as light as several grams, which is a distinctive comparison to the heavy printed books. What’s more, such a book is unexpensive, in fact, it is usually cheaper than a dictionary. It can replace the printed books in the education.

To sum up, printed books are heavy and have negative effects on the environment. With the development of technology and people’s desire to protect the earth, printed books will be replaced by electric-based “book”.

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In nowadays, with the fast development in the world, learning about foreign has become more and more significant. To get to know a foreign country, we have various ways, we can search in the Internet, watch TV, read newspapers and magazines. In my perspective, the optimal way is reading newspapers and magazines. This is a convenient, effective way

In nowadays——Nowadays
感觉最后两简单句叠加在一起有些单调

First and foremost, information is abundant in newspapers and magazines. We can easily find different kinds of newspapers and magazines ranging from policy to science and society. We can get whatever we want. Taking myself as an example（题外话：我这里写的是Taking the Us as an example…）, I want to go to America to further my study, so I want to(两个want to有些重复，第一个改为be going 句型，或第二个写成it is rather necessary for me…可能会好些) know this nation as much as I can.To achieve this goal, I would like to buy “American Daily”,a newspaper about the society and the academy in the US. With the help of this newspaper, I learned a lot about the US.

（I want to…I want to…I would like to只是感觉这一段的“I…..”有些多，试着变化一下
例如
With the help of this newspaper, I learned a lot about the US.
换一下
Have I not take the Newspaper as my main resource of information concerning America,I would not have learnt so much about this alien land.)

What is more, these two media are fairly convenient. They are portable, inexpensive, we can read them whenever they like. Under the heavy pressure of study and work, people can seldom （这里可以用倒装Seldom could people.....) have a long period to do some study about a foreign country. When they want to do some study,（"want to do..."有些重复了，是否能换成Even when people raise their intention) they may just find some leisure time after lunch or during their breakfast(我觉得这里用Prefer好一些）. In such situation(s), newspapers and magazines are more suitable than any other media.Everyday, my friend Jojo will(删去，或换成would like to）read newspapers during lunch time, he feels that he gets to know the outside and makes his life more meaningful.(Everyday, my friend Jojo would like to read newspapers during the lunch time ,for he always believes that knowing the outside will certainly make his life more meaningful)

Finally, reading newspapers and magazines are extraordinary（这个词形容似乎有点过了） effective. With the help of the title, we can know exactly which essay suit(s) us most. In this way, we can leave the useless information behind and absorb the useful knowledge quite efficiently. For instance, if I want to know something about the ranking of the universities in the US in a certain magazine, I can find the page in the category readily.

Taking all these features into consideration, newspapers and magazines are the most convenient and effective media.When we need to know something about a foreign country, newspapers and magazines are invariably the best choice.

嗯...第一次评，似乎砖拍得有点多了，可能因为高中对语法比较重视，自然养成了挑刺的毛病...
不过结构还是挺清晰的，继续努力

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不好意思，改晚了

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  a3 f0 q: c* t' r) K6 F7 bIn nowadays(本身就是副词), with the fast development in the world, learning about foreign（形容词） has become more and more significant. To get to know a foreign country, we have various ways, （连词）we can search in（去掉） the Internet, watch TV, read newspapers and magazines（etc.）. In my perspective, the optimal way is reading newspapers and magazines. This is a convenient, effective way./ Y6 U7 z' p, D) [
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First and foremost, information is abundant in newspapers and magazines. We can easily find different kinds of newspapers and magazines ranging from policy to science and society. We can（两个we can, 英语好像不喜欢排比句） get whatever we want. Taking myself as an example, I want to go to America to further my study, so I want to know this nation as much as I can,（句号） to achieve this goal, I would like to buy “American Daily”, a newspaper about the society and the academy in the US. With the help of this newspaper, I learned a lot about the US.（最好详细解释一下a lot）' r* _, [4 G$ O; v; P) z( H

# n+ o1 ?# \0 g- p% J  [% T4 ]What is more, these two media are fairly convenient. They are portable, inexpensive, we can read them whenever they like. Under the heavy pressure of study and work, people can seldom have a long period（不知道这个词是不是恰当） to do some study about a foreign country. When they want to do some study（重复）, they may just find some leisure time after lunch or during their breakfast. In such situation, newspapers and magazines are more suitable than any other media. Everyday, my friend Jojo will（一般时） read newspapers during his lunch time, he feels that he gets to know the outside and（which） makes his life more meaningful（这里有点逻辑问题）.6 ]1 q% ]$ _& g7 C
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Finally, reading newspapers and magazines are extraordinary（形容词） effective. With the help of the title, we can know exactly which essay suit（s） us most. In this way, we can leave the useless information behind and absorb the useful knowledge quite efficient（ly）. For instance, if I want to know something about the ranking of the universities in the US（，） in a certain magazine, （去掉逗号）I can find the page in the category readily.: q% T9 K) U- J1 p* o* P$ a& i
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Taking all these features into consideration, newspapers and magazines are the most convenient and effective media. When we need to know something about a foreign country, newspapers and magazines are invariably the best choice.（结尾有点不给力，中间论述不够充分，第一次给别人改，收获很大！！）