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914作文
I agree that having a job with high secure and lowing paying salary is better than jobs with high salary but being easy to lost. A man will feel pressed and be worried about tomorrow when his job is unsteady. Although he may become rich, he can never be truly successful.
First of all, high salary will bring heavy pressure, and worrying about losing the job will strengthen the pressure. A survey shows that 70% people who have a job with high salary but easy to be lost are over pressed. They try their best to not lose the job, they are neverous all day long.  they have no part time to improve themselves. Several years later, they will be replaced by those who are younger and more skilled.
Secondly, people can never be successful without a safe job. You should have your own career, then you can see the way to success. How can we succeed if we even do not know whether we will lose our job tomorrow or not? A job with low salary but has high secure gives us time to work out our plan, we will know what to do five years, or even ten years later. In this way, we can build our brilliant future step by step. Money do not equal to success. We are not slavers of money.
To be frank, the most important difference between these jobs is the happiness. What is our aim of work? My answer is to be happy. What do we earn money for? My answer is happy too. People will feel unsafe and worried if their job is unsteady. A man who is worried about his job can never be happy no matter how rich he is. With a safe job, people can do things they are interested in.
To sum up, people can hardly be happy if their jobs have low secure. Also they will face great problems if they want to be successful. So, a job with low salary but high secure is the best choice.

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916作文
Most audience prefer to see that good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished. But I have a different idea. I think, the movies and televisions should not yield to audience’s need, they must have their own style and principle. They are required to tell the truth.

What do the audience, especially the young people watch television or movie for? They want to get extra experience from the image. They want to understand the world and the society more deeply. In the true world, gentlemen are not always be rewarded and a huge number of bad people are out of the prison. If we give them a ultraben in the screen, they will trust it, and fall in their daily life.

In the same time, movies and televisions also play a important role in teenagers’ growth. We need to let the teenagers know that being a good man is not a way to get reward but a principle to yield. If the movies and televisions are full of the boring story that good men are being rewarded and bad men are being punished, a reflection circle will develop in teenager’s pure soul: behaviors which are supposed to be rewarded are good, I need to do it to get the praise. Other behaviors with suspected reward are useless. This is awful. It is clear that in the contemporary society, most good behaviors will not get reward or even will be ignored, such as helping the old to go across the road, picking up the paper in the ground.

Although the movies and televisions should tell the truth that not all good men will be rewarded, the story that good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished can encourage people to be good. These stories hide in people’s mind are remind them to be a good man.

To sum up, the most important principle of movies and television is always telling the truth. Only based on these principle, the stories can be seen in the screen

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语言有点乏力，论证不是很让人信服。。。
加油吧，刚上来写成这样很不错了
总体来说还是比较好

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918 作文
Sports have been the world’s most popular activity for thousands of years. Why do sports play a important role in people’s daily life? Because sports can not only make people stronger and healthier, but also help people understand life.
The first lesson that we learn from sports is “practice makes the perfect”. If we want to do sports well, we should do enough practice. Take Kobe Bryant for example, although he is the most famous star in NBA, he practice much more than others. In the hot summer, others are having vacation on the beach, but he is still working on basketball. In this way, he becomes the best. It is same in our daily life. A student needs to do enough assignment to get a high score, a scientist needs to do a lot of experiments to develop the final conclusion. If we want to be successful, we must be hard-working.
The second lesson is that “teamwork brings success”. In some kinds of sports, such as soccer, football, baseball, teamwork plays a important role in it. We can find that a team with famous stars is beaten by a common team. The power of teamwork can be seen in the match. In the modern society, corporation and teamwork are becoming more and more important. A successful company must do well in teamwork, the employees must be united. The breakthrough in science is done by a team.
Sports also show us the most significant secret of life, that is “be strong and never give up”. In sports matches, we can never know the result before the end. In the true life, we can not predict our future too. To achieve success, we should not be beaten by failure, we need to keep going. Edison falls hundreds of times before he finally invented the light.
To sum up, sports is a perfect tutor in our life, we can learn a lot form sports. I do agree that sports teach people lessons about life.

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Sports have been the world’s most popular activity for thousands of years. Why do sports play an important role in people’s daily life? Because sports can not only make people stronger and healthier, but also help people understand life.$ m- z& Y4 D! Q- Y# R& J
The first lesson that we learn from sports is “practice makes the perfect”. If we want to do sports well, we should do enough practice. Take Kobe Bryant for example, although he is the most famous star in NBA, he practice much more than others. In the hot summer, others are having vacation on the beach, but he is still working on basketball. In this way, he becomes the best. It is same in our daily life. A student needs to do enough assignment to get a high score, a scientist needs to do a lot of experiments to develop the final conclusion. If we want to be successful, we must be hard-working.
The second lesson is that “teamwork brings success”. In some kinds of sports, such as soccer, football, baseball, teamwork plays an important role in it. We can find that a team with famous stars is beaten by a common team. The power of teamwork can be seen in the match. In the modern society, corporation and teamwork are becoming more and more important. A successful company must do well in teamwork, the employees must be united. The breakthrough in science is done by a team.
Sports also show us the most significant secret of life, that is “be strong and never give up”. In sports matches, we can never know the result before the end. In the true life, we can not predict our future too. To achieve success, we should not be beaten by failure, we need to keep going. Edison falls hundreds of times before he finally invented the light.
To sum up, sports is a perfect tutor in our life, we can learn a lot form sports. I do agree that sports teach people lessons about life.
1、        语言、句式都较为简单，望继续积累，特别是复杂句方面；
2、        基本语法错误请竭力避免，如a important；
3、        三个分论点的论证似乎不够充分，建议在列举实例的同时也从理论上多分析分析；
4、        言语直接，还请见谅，祝楼主成功。

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928
From stone age, science always plays an important role in people’s life and the whole humanity. In nowdays, science is becoming more and more significant. To live better, all the university students should take science courses.

First of all, science is very helpful in our daily lives. Someone may hold the view that science is hard and far away from us, but the objects around us are informing us continuously that science is just here, in your mp3 or computer. We can fix our things all by ourselves if we know how they work. In this way, we can save a sum of money. Take a radio for example. Sometimes boring noise can be heard from the radio, it informs us that the radio is broken. In fact, if we change a diode in the radio, beautiful sound is back. Also, science can give us great help in finace. With enough mathematic knowledge, we can by the more things with less money. Science can be found useful in many other domains such as sports, eating and so on.

Second, learning science also offer us a unusual but efficient way to solve problems and judge things. Science teaches us to be serious. In science, a theory is good because it correspond to the data very well. It is the same to us. When we judge things, we should try to get enough data rather than only think in the brain. We can also learn how to solve problems from science courses. Science courses tell us When we face a serious problem, we should imagine a solution first, then do some experiment to prove it, after that, we need to correct the errors in the idea, in this way, we can get a satisfactory solution.

Finally, no matter what subject we concentrate in, learning some science can be useful. If a student who learns medicine can take some organic chemistry, he will understand his major better. Learning optics can help the painter use light better in his work. A musician will understand his melody deeper if he/she does well in math.

To sum up, science is the most important part of our society, by taking some basic science courses, we can live better, work better. Now that science is so helpful, why do not we take some basic science courses?

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Traveling is a beneficial thing to people. With the fast development in modern transportation, travelling is becoming more and more convenient and attractive. In my opnion, compared with travelling in people’s own country, travelling in a foreign country is more beneficial to people.

First, we can see various beautiful views in different areas. These differences among countries bring people fresh feeling and exciting experience. People will appear quite exciting when he/she sees things which he/she never sees before. Because the countries are located in different area of the earth, there will be a distinct difference. In the Africa, such as south Africa, the desert and the wind will amaze you directly. In Russia, the forest with snow shocks you both in your eyes and soul. During the travel people will feel the charm of the nature, they will feel relaxed in the quiet environment.

Secondly, the different history and culture in different country also make us cozy and happy. It will be a unforgettable memory that having a very special lunch which contained snakes, insects, and many other wired food in the rainforest. Going to a totally different culture brings us a fantastic emotional experience. Doing things we never do, eating unknown food, sleeping in a special bed, all these behavior release our heavy pressure in a secret way. Acting as another man in a strange place brings us happiness.

Although travelling abroad is attractive and exciting, a in-country travel is also beneficial to us. While travelling in our own country, it is much more conviniet, we do not need to deal with the passport, we can understand the local people easily. Usually, such kind of travel is unexpensive.

To sum up, travelling abroad really benefits us more in our body and soul, it is worthy spending a sun of money to have a fantastic abroad travel.

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9.30号 改的作文

Traveling is a beneficial thing to people. With the fast development in（of） modern transportation, travelling is becoming more and more convenient and attractive. In my opnion, compared with travelling in people’s own country, travelling in a foreign country is more beneficial to people.   h. D2 T7 v! d8 b1 J% n  a
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First, we can see various beautiful views in different areas. These differences among countries bring people fresh feeling and exciting experience. People will appear quite exciting when he/she sees things which he/she has never seen before. Because the countries are located in different area of the earth, there will be a distinct difference(复数更好吧). In the（不用the）Africa, such as south Africa, the desert and the wind will amaze you directly. In Russia, the forest with snow shocks you both in your eyes and soul. During the travel people will feel the charm of the nature, they will feel relaxed in the quiet environment.(能再多称述一点国外旅游的various的理由就更好地贴近主题了)

Secondly, the different history and culture in different country also make us cozy and happy. It will be a unforgettable memory that having a very special lunch which contained snakes, insects, and many other wired food in the rainforest. Going to a totally different culture brings us a fantastic emotional experience. Doing things we never do, eating unknown food, sleeping in a special bed, all these behavior release our heavy pressure in a secret way. Acting as another man in a strange place brings us happiness.9  _0 J1 \. P! X( H- R

Although travelling abroad is attractive and exciting, a in-country travel is also beneficial to us. While travelling in our own country, it is much more conviniet(convenient), we do not need to deal with the passport, and we can understand the local people easily. Usually, such kind of travel is unexpensive.
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To sum up, travelling abroad really benefits us more in our body and soul, it is worthy spending a sun of money(不是很懂) to have a fantastic abroad travel.       

结构很完整，但是各个分论点的展开似乎还欠缺一点多样化，感觉是车轱辘话来回说. 另外两者的比较没有能出现，没感觉到国外旅行比国内好到那儿去，只感觉两者都很好。

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Traveling is a beneficial thing to people. With the fast development in modern transportation, travelling is becoming more and more convenient and attractive. In my opinion, compared with travelling in people’s own country, travelling in a foreign country is more beneficial to people.
First, we can see various beautiful views in different areas. These differences among countries bring people fresh feeling and exciting experience. People will appear quite exciting when he/she sees things which he/she never sees before. Because the countries are located in different area of the earth, there will be a distinct difference. In the Africa, such as South Africa, the desert and the wind will amaze you directly. （南非主要还是热带草原吧！）In Russia, the forest with snow shocks you both in your eyes and soul. During the travel people will feel the charm of the nature, they will feel relaxed in the quiet environment.( W( i) Y6 Z. \
Secondly, the different history and culture in different country also make us cozy and happy. It will be an unforgettable memory that having a very special lunch which contained snakes, insects, and many other wired food in the rainforest. Going to a totally different culture brings us a fantastic emotional experience. Doing things we never do, eating unknown food, sleeping in a special bed, all these behavior release our heavy pressure in a secret way. Acting as another man in a strange place brings us happiness.(
Although travelling abroad is attractive and exciting, a in-country travel is also beneficial to us. While travelling in our own country, it is much more convenient, we do not need to deal with the passport, we can understand the local people easily. Usually, such kind of travel is inexpensive.
To sum up, travelling abroad really benefits us more in our body and soul, it is worthy spending a sun of money to have a fantastic abroad travel.
1、        基本的语法错误仍然存在；
2、        倒数第二段应该增加“虽然国内游很好，但是国外油。。。”；
3、        最后一段还是别用一句话结尾；
4、        你给我改的太少了。

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10.7 作文
When we fail in our work, study, or even family, the most important thing is to keep happy and be optimistic and hopeful. In my opnion, having a big heart and keeping cool is more helpful than achieving success.
First of all, be happy and optimistic when we fail is better for our health rather than try our best to achieve success immediately. Some medical experiments tell us that when people feel happy, special chemical signals which relax people will be released from our brain. In this way, people will cool down, feel relaxed and solve problems more efficient. But when we feel angry and stressed, another kind of signals which have a negative effect on us will be released. From the experiment, we can find that being positive and happy not only have positive effects on people’s body, but also help people a lot in problem solving.
Secondly, to remain happy and optimistic really influences people in various ways. A survey done by the UN shows that those who have a right manner in their daily life are easier to achieve success again than those who are easy to get nervous and over pressured.
To be frank, in my dictionary, happiness is more valuable than success. Why achieving success is so attracting? Because success can bring us money and power. What do we have money and power for? The answer is simple, to be happy. Being happy is the ultra aim of the whole humanity. Only happiness can remain immortal, so I would like to keep happy and optimistic when I fail rather than achieving success.
To sum up, when people fail, to remain happy and optimistic is helpful for both people’s body and soul, and also, a happy and positive man is easier to be successful, so remaining happy and optimistic is more important than achieving success.

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文章语句上没什么特别要改的，结构也很清楚。但个人觉得第一个理由和第二个理由似乎在讲同一个道理，区别不是很大。可以多花点字数在更丰富的内容上。加油哈

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10.9作文
With the fast social development, people appear more and more difference in their social or political views. In my opinion, people do have the right to choose their own social or political religion, but they should not try to lead children to make the same choice. So I agree with the statement that teachers should not show their social or political views in the classroom.

First of all, teacher’s mission is to teach students knowledge of a certain subject and let them understand how to learn. Showing social or political views has nothing to do with such behavior. It is definitely useless. What’s more, such kind of behavior may have negative effects on children. Sometimes the class may be boring, but a story of a political event maybe fresh and attractive. Students may concentrate on the fresh view and instance rather than listen to the teacher carefully.

Secondly, students are too young and too native to have a political view. In children’s eyes, politic has no difference with a new funny game. Then do not understand the true meaning of holding a social or political view. When they become older, they will make their own choice independently. And also, in most cases, teacher is a role model, students trust teacher a lot. If teachers show their social or political view to the students, there can be a misleading. The students may never have the chance to have him/her own choice on social or political views.

Finally, teachers are real people, they have desires which maybe “I need to do something to help my party.” Such ideas will not be observed directly, but they really exist and influence people’s behavior. For example, teacher may hint the students that one certain party is better. This is un fair to other party.

To sum up, show social or political views in class will cause unfair; low concentration on main knowledge; destroy the students’ chance to have their own choice. So it is wise to forbidden teachers to show their own social or political views in class.