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ISSUE17
Agnes 改 谦行天下

Red-语法词法问题
Blue-好词好句
Pink-不理解的地方
Green-小结

Law which is（这里语法有误，which is换做“，”，后面的a system of rules做同位语即可） a system of rules, is the primary social mediator of relationships between people because it shapes the economics, politics and society in numerous ways. Laws can be divided into two categories—— just and unjust ones, but since law can only represent the interest or stake of a certain group of people, the just and unjust is relative. It is an undeniable truth that every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws, and take serious action to unjust laws.
作者观点：
认为法律可以分为公平与不公平两种，这种界定是相对的。我们应该遵守公平的法律，但也要对不公平的法律作出相关的行动。

The standard of just and unjust laws is not a straightforward issue. We have no clear definition of just and unjust law. Different people hold different view, for example, Dr. Martin Luther King said that “Any law that degrades human personality is unjust.” From my point of view, laws always benefit a certain group, the majority or the minority, and harm the others. The just law needs to be debated by people and finally people agree to a conclusion. Consider, for example, although tax could cut down the personal income of citizens, we could not catalog the tax law as unjust when someone evade the tax. Another example some laws allow the abortion of mothers. While some regions forbid abortion, it is ex parte to classify the law as unjust law. Thus, we cannot judge laws by personal interests or ethnic bias.
法律的公正与否不能被简单界定，不同人有不同的观点：距离马丁和作者的个人观点。
有些法律对一部分人是有利的，对另一部分人是不利的。所以不能仅凭个人好恶和背景判定法律的公正与否。

Legal systems elaborate right and responsibilities. Every individual has responsibility to obey just laws, even when the law is opposite to personal interests, and enjoy their right, which preconditions（这个词放在这里词性不对吧~我对这句话理解不来） a stable and orderly society. Nations always strictly enforce the law with the help of army. It is people’s right and responsibility to obey the rules.
个人无论如何评判法律，都应该遵守法律，确保社会和谐。(我觉得这一段的观点和首段的主观点有点偏差，首段说是要遵守公正的法律，把范围缩小了)

However, to change the unjust law also is（also这样用有些中式英语的感觉~）
the responsibility of citizens, for doing so will help improve the legal system of a nation. The reforming of unjust law always takes a long time. Laws could be unjust due to wrong conventions or misjudgment of justices. In the famous movie The Shawshank Redemption, the two heroes are victims of unjust laws which elude the existential unjust law（不理解这一句~望解释）. In real world, reason people use non-violence movement to resist unjust law to avoid innocent death. For instance, in the civil war, Dr King emancipated the blacks without guns. Nowadays, it is common （to see that）officials collect the opinion from people, discuss in small scale conference and submit to the advanced parliaments to discuss. The reformation of unjust law passes when most people support.
然而，个人应帮助改革不公的法律，用非暴力的首段来促进改革。

In conclusion, just law ensures the stable（stablity） of a society and every citizen need（s） to obey just laws. People also have responsibility to help reform unjust law by non-violent ways. The justice of law is relative to a certain group of people, and when people judge the law, numerous of debate need to be progressed to reach a reasonable conclusion of the law.


我觉得谦的总体思路是：法律公正与否不能根据人的主观想法判断，是相对的概念——不管公正与否都应遵守维护社会安定——即使有不公平之处，应用非暴力的手段促进改革。
和我的想法类似~
感觉行文蛮流畅的，词句丰富，也有例子的支撑~是我所欠缺的地方。学习！
本身对这个题目就不太懂…所以也不知道改的是否恰当~

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这是你们小组贴吗？注意在题目中加上你们小组的名字并注明“小组活动”，否则有点让人摸不着头脑。

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这只是我们的示例帖，我们要28好才正式开始~~

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