writing. 剑5test4 task2-求拍按 同时问一下关于字数的问题

李智墨尔本UID: 2872792

Writing task2

Write about the following topic:

Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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It is notable, under no circumstance can individuals deny the fact that, not only the era an individual lives in, but also the surrounding environment contribute to the situation that the social influence, instead of the genetic feature, is referred to as the major influence in terms of individual development.

The first point to note is that, the era a certain individual lives in, in most cases, exerts a massive influence on the individual development. Rather, the decisive factor, which determines whether a social member will finally get development and achieve success, is the magnitude of extent, to which the era’s level of technology is compatible with the certain individual’s ideas. To put it in another way, each single individual’s development and achievements are associated with the support sustained by the society, especially form the technology which is believed to be the major impetus to drive the world forward. Hardly can people image that, without the assistance of fascinating standard of science in the 20 century, either pure or applied, Armstrong, the American spaceman, is able to demonstrate the significant first step on the moon, even if he has the genetic talent. To this point, the living era is essential for an individual to achieve development.

Another aspect to illustrate the point is the surrounding environment. To be specific, on no account can people ignore the fundamental fact that, nothing can exceed the relatively peaceful and harmonious environment in providing social members an unparalleled opportunity to get development and success, despite how talented an individual internally is. There is no dearth of telling relevant examples. One salient one is that, it is reported by the World Bank that, in the extreme indigenous regions of the world, especially the Third World countries, most people there, struggling against the poverty, sickness, and the disorder of the society, are poorly educated resulting from no access to school, which contributes to the alarmingly high rate of illiteracy, further sabotaging individual’s development and success. As such, a helpful environment is monumentally beneficial to individuals.

As what is shown from above statement, the appropriate era a certain social member lives in, together with a relatively helpful surrounding environment, substantiates a marvelous consequence that a individual is believed to be more competent to get development and success.



还有一个问题希望大家指点
大作文字数要求是２５０字，但是我常常在电脑上打出３５０多字，还没有去考过试，不知道３５０字在考场上手写的时候答题纸够用么？

KinsimonUID: 2846953

你的文章实在费解啊~~

你有两个论点：era+surrounding environment > generic

有必要用两个吗？

2.
你用了很多倒装，而且很长的句子，不看到结尾都不知道你想说什么。。。个别有毛病。。。

3.
用的词有几个挺好的 unparalleled（不过你手写的时候要保证能拼对）

4.
文章的亮点在你会举例子。不过还是简洁第一

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抱歉我负面评论太多- - 加油~

KinsimonUID: 2846953

关于字数 我觉得270就够了。最多300。 写多错多，这是真理。

而且到时候你可能根本没那么多时间~

李智墨尔本UID: 2872792

谢谢