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Issue153.
"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."

Words:561
Time:45min



For students, there are numerous new things flourishing their world, should students need to skeptic whatever they studied or accepted now and whatever they will be taught in future? Two options in front of students, accepting knowledge a sponge or question it in a critic way. It is hard to distinguish which way is better, the two ways can make complementarily to the other, and balance two will benefit students more than just choose one side.


First, as people know, students should learn certain amount of knowledge before considering these opinions. It is the sponge-like thinking way which can supply students enough basic knowledge, as providing foundation for skyscraper. Therefore, the skeptical thinking way cannot disturb learning process, because accepting some information is prerequisite for student to question some statements. In both skeptical thinking way and accepting thinking way, to receive and accept some fact is first step. If people don’t believe anything, they will reach a paranoia state. Thus, students need to learn general sense from book, then to consider its trueness.





Second, While skeptical thinking is a test to assist student generating discretion. Though there are dozens of possible approaches, the progress can be boiled down to concrete steps. Comment sense indicates that students will gain a conclusion contains numbers of information or even wrong factors. So it is meaningful for students to practice the ability- discretion, through asking themselves two questions: I do not really know and I am not sure. For example, William Harvey, English physician, who discovered the circulation of the blood and the role of the heart in propelling it, thus refuting the theories of Galen and laying the foundation for modern physiology. Moreover, Galileo, who is a student of Aristotle, used a experiment to point out his teacher’s theory, the heaver one will reach the grand when two object falling down from the same height, to be a fallacy one. The scientific method, to some extent, can be said to be entirely motivated by doubt. As a result, to skeptical general sense, to question school book is first step for student to learn discriminative power.



Third, skeptical and accept think method need to be balanced by students. For skeptical often motivate an elaborate adversarial process to sort through all the evidence to come to a decision. As Evolution Theory written by Darwin, this theory appears to be logicality and persuasion. The evolution theory has been accepted by the whole world. But now, after thousands times of researching and surveying, biologists and physical scientists, critic this classical theory. They pointed out that Evolution Theory is only a theory includes inexplicable errors, and cannot explain the complexity of biology and life. However, on the other hand, people who accept some knowledge without doubt will reach right conclusion much frankly and directly than people who skeptical. Especially, in our times, time is money. People need to deal thousands of staffs in one hour, if people skeptical anything and not resolute business in time, company will suffer disastrous lost. And if student learn to skeptical in spear time and handling problem decidedly will reach a better results. Therefore, to correctly using skeptical and accept thinking is a skill need student to practice.


In conclusion, the two consider way is twins, they cannot be separate from each other. Accept-thinking supply student with general knowledge, skeptical-thinking lead them develop discriminative power. And only student who can balance both sides will…

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Issue153【酒香作文组】xihaiweiwei 第2次作业
issue153."Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
Words:561  Time:45min
For students, there are numerous new things flourishing their world, should students need to skeptic (skeptic是名词, should students question) whatever they studied or accepted now(时态有点问题吧) and whatever they will be taught in future? Two options in front of students, accepting knowledge a sponge(是想说像sponge那样吗，as sponge) or questioning it in a critic(critical) way. It is hard to distinguish which way is better, the two ways can make complementarily(complementarity) to the other, and balance two will benefit students more than just choose one side.

First, as people know, students should learn certain amount of knowledge before considering these opinions. It is the sponge-like thinking way which can supply students enough basic knowledge, as providing foundation for skyscraper. Therefore, the skeptical thinking way cannot disturb learning process, because accepting some information is prerequisite for student to question some statements. In both skeptical thinking way and accepting thinking way, to receive and accept some fact is the first step. If people don’t believe anything, they will reach a paranoia state. Thus, students need to learn general sense from book, then to consider its trueness.

Second, while skeptical thinking is a test to assist student generating discretion.(为什么以while开头这句就直接结尾了呢？) Though there are dozens of possible approaches, the progress can be boiled down to concrete steps. Comment(commen) sense indicates that students will gain a conclusion contains numbers of information or even wrong factors. So it is meaningful for students to practice the ability- discretion, through asking themselves two questions: I do not really know and I am not sure. For example, William Harvey, English physician, who discovered the circulation of the blood and the role of the heart in propelling it, thus refuting(refuted) the theories of Galen and laying the foundation for modern physiology. Moreover, Galileo, who is a student of Aristotle, used an experiment to point out his teacher’s theory, the heaver(heavier) one will reach the grand faster when two objects falling down from the same height, to be a fallacy one. The scientific method, to some extent, can be said to be entirely motivated by doubt. As a result, to skeptical general sense, to question school book is the first step for students to learn discriminative power.

Third, skeptical and accept(动词，换成accepting?) think method need to be balanced by students. For skeptical(skepticism) often motivates an elaborate adversarial process to sort through all the evidence to come to a decision(没明白). As Evolution Theory written by Darwin, this theory appears to be logicality and persuasion. The evolution theory has been accepted by the whole world. But now, after thousands times of researching and surveying, biologists and physical scientists critic this classical theory. They pointed(point) out that Evolution Theory is only a theory includes inexplicable errors, and cannot explain the complexity of biology and life. However, on the other hand, people who accept some knowledge without doubt will reach right conclusion much frankly and directly than(前面没看见比较词啊) people who are skeptical. Especially, in our times, time is money. People need to deal thousands of staffs in one hour, if people skeptical(形容词，question) anything and not resolute(?) business in time, company will suffer disastrous lost.(前面这个假设，都扯到上班族啦，还是围绕students吧) And if student learn to be skeptical in spear(spare) time and handling problem decidedly will reach a better results. Therefore, to correctly using skeptical and accept thinking is a skill need student to practice.

In conclusion, the two consider way is twins, they cannot be separated from each other. Accept-thinking supplies student with general knowledge, skeptical-thinking lead them to develop discriminative power. And only student who can balance both sides will…(?)

很赞你限时写作能写到这个程度。另外你用的个别词是亮点（反正我觉得挺高级的）
如果写完后你再自己改一遍，那文中那些很浅的错误就会消灭的。以后多改改吧~

kennyqunUID: 2898660

首先膜拜之~给我45分钟肯定写不出那么长而且用词高级并且蛮有逻辑的文章的。。。
基本上我觉得ice已经把很多语法上的小问题都指出了，我想说一点自己对这个题目的理解。
作为没有正式开始训练AW的菜鸟，我对AW的理解停留在官方的GUIDE之上。所以说得不对的地方希望多多包涵啊~
我觉得AW的精髓应该还是critical thinking,GRE的要求其实是学生必须具有更有逻辑性和更全面的思维模式。
因为作者采用了first,second,third的基本模式，而且照每段的中心句来看作者的思路大致是：海绵式思维可以帮助学生吸收知识，质疑式思维使学生严谨，两种模式不可分割。这样的话，那是不是可以再逻辑上更深入一点呢？
不知道是不是我受高考作文毒害比较深，我觉得如果按照：海绵式思维是质疑式思维的基础，质疑式思维是海绵式思维的提高，两者相辅相成。这样更符合AW的要求？因为这样的写作手法更有critical thinking的感觉，把二者有机结合，并且每段都提到这两者的关系，相对有点题的含义。
此外，因为我在First那段里没看到首句是中心句，后面几段都是首句直接点题的，所以是不是把那段的论点也直接提出会更有逻辑性？
以上是我对xihaiweiwei3这篇文章的一些读后感，说得不好的地方，希望各位指正啊~

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:) :)

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3# kennyqun


刚开始准备就有这见解很不错啊！恩，看官方guide是正路…多看几次跟着它走没问题！加油！

gongyuxiang1990UID: 2697832

文章还真是垃圾…恩！
你们互改这是走过场，进行个形式吧？
态度不端正用时间紧来做借口…唯有自改与互改才是提高之王道。你们啊，等着悲剧吧…

kennyqunUID: 2898660

5# gongyuxiang1990 [/b

恩恩，我知道我这种菜鸟肯定还要磨练很久才能有收获的，但是听了你的夸奖还是很开心啊。太谢谢了！！！
另外我看到了你其他回复的帖子，冒昧问下你也是准备考1106G吗？

紫陌纤尘o0UID: 2745492

文章还真是垃圾…恩！
你们互改这是走过场，进行个形式吧？
态度不端正用时间紧来做借口…唯有自改与互改才是提高之王道。你们啊，等着悲剧吧…
gongyuxiang1990 发表于 2010-10-12 00:44

你说话也太毒了点儿吧，好久不见一点儿也没变你的风格~
不过，恩，也说得在理，由他们去吧~