FannieHsu的再战作文贴

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加油哈！~

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写得挺好的，请继续加油~~

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11.24 综合一篇

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TPO18

The professor claims that the three ways stated in the reading passage are unsatisfactory for reducing the decline of Torreya taxifoha. She presents three aspects to contradict to these three ways.

Initially, the professor argues that it it unlikely to get success through reestablishing Torreya in Florida. (For/because) Torreya taxifoha is affected strongly by changes and climates, and the cooler(我记得不是warmer嘛) and dryer(drier) climate in the Florida will cause the decline of this kind of tree. On the contrary, the reading passage holds it will be effective to reestablish Torreya in the microclimate location. (记得文章中说全球变暖等原因影响了当地环境从而也使湿冷的microclimate变得更干燥...不适合生长)

In additional, the professor uses black locuts tree as an example. After it was moved to a different location, it spread so fast that other kinds of trees and plants were killed by it. The professor shows that it might be happened again on Torreya. This is opposite to the point in the reading passage.（教授局的例子是为了驳斥reading中人工辅助迁徙的建议,所以我觉得最好先把阅读中的建议点明后再写反面例子）
Furthermore, the professor demonstrates that the population of Torreya will not resist diseases through a research centers.  The research center cannot control the diverse and large in the diseases. While in the reading passage, it says that to preserve Torreya in the research centers will successfully reduce the decline.（是教授反驳阅读，所以最好将阅读的观点先摆出来，另外听力的内容记忆中大概是说research center没法大量栽培Torreya，由于Torreya的population不足，从而不能survive the diseases)

当然，个人看法

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1122 revised by ttuuttuu
不好意思遲到了~~我有點問題所以這幾天沒改
還忘見諒~

整個文章OK
但舉的例子要想到更有說服力一點  更detail  讓思序更清楚表現
讓考官能明白你舉的例子說要論述的點

kaolaliangUID: 2758807

cckkll1994给你提的意见已经差不多了， 对于听力考点没有什么提的了。 其他的对于楼主论述段最后的总结对比原文这个写法很认同。学习了。