FannieHsu的再战作文贴

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改好

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11.11综合，改完了

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比较晚不好意思

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11.13 综合 TPO9

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11.13  独立写作小组作文

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to FannieHsu, revised by fletch 11.13

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不好意思，改的有点晚了哈。

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11.16作业

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11.18 TPO13 综合写作

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The professor claims that the private fossil collectors can benefit the disadvantage of scientific research, which is opposite to the reading passage on three aspects.

Initially, the professor demonstrates that the commercial trades on fossils can improve to (encourage people to) purchase the fossil through this kind of business. And it will be very good for scientists to do further reviews (review), as well as great(great 删掉) for public schools and libraries. On the contrary, the reading passage holds that it may result in a decline in public's interest in the fossils.

Most importantly, the professor shows the only kind of people who can identify whether fossils are real or not is（are） scientists. They are the person（persons） who need to pass through their hands（此句不通） before selling to the private collectors. Thus, it won't be missing those fossils which states in the reading passage.

Furthermore, the professor says that those commercial fossils are simply undiscovered by those collectors and their data are run by those scientific people in the university. While in the reading passage, it thinks those private collectors will destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils.

最后一个论点，我听到的是，如果没有这些collectors，就没有这么多的化石被发现。相比于人们失去化石发现地点以及周围环境这些信息外，发现更多的化石不是更好吗？

以上是我的个人意见，如有疑问，欢迎讨论

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11.22 独立一篇

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life.
With the high technology develops in this era, people prefer living in fitness to being rich. Many governments in the world cost（spend） a lot on building physical equipments for inhabitant in order to establish （a）much healthier country. This action is really controversial among some people. Some people argue that sports
is（are）not important like other elements, such as happiness, studies, career, in people’s lives. In my opinion, playing sports is necessary for us because we can learn a lot from it.

Initially, we can learn how to be healthy and reduce pressure. People’s lives become better and better nowadays, especially on food. Many popular and delicious food are made of fatty, oil, hard-digested composition. Also, the reason why people will get disease easily is （the）lack of practicing. As pressure is a big burden for modern people, subhealthy problem is very serious. Playing sports can solve these problems. It don’t （doesn’t）need to people（people to） spend a lot of time, or take much concentration on it. There is a professional physician who says that, sports will not only flourish kinds of practice to people（people’s） bodies, but also teach （us）the ways to reduce pressure.

Moreover, playing sports can teach us how to cooperate with others. Many kinds of sports need to play with at least two people, such as badminton, tennis ball, even soccer and basketball. These kinds of games require people to adjust themselves with other people to get achievement. For instance, I love watching diving very much. The coordination between Guo Jingjing and Wu minxia impressed me significantly on the Olympics in Beijing, 2008. When they won the championship in the last(in the last是在过去的意思，用in the final), I understand（understood） both of them appeared not only the spirit of sports but also some tacit things.

Last but not least, playing sports can teach us how to be in a good mood. Modern people always complain that they suffer（from） a lot through their career and lives, and those would not happen on the athletes. While in my opinion, athletes suffer more pressure than normal person. For example, in Beijing Olympics, Liu Xiang faced a lot of pressure which came from our whole country. When he quitted before the beginning of the games, people expressed disappointment clearly. But the athlete said, he would be attend next Olympics and practice more and more hard （harder and harder）to make sure（that） he could win. This is a commitment for （the）whole country. And he is a very good example for us to learn how to manage our mind through difficulties. In additional, sports teaches us to be more strong（stronger） to confront hard conditions.

To sum up, playing sports does not mean to be only health. We can learn a lot through it and to have better lives.
写的挺好的，条理观点很清楚，小细节需要注意，比如hard的过去式是harder，

结尾比较平凡

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谢谢你给我改作文。。
加油加油喽~~

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11.23 独立+综合