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11.16 ， 喝醉了，迟了2天交

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12.1 综合  独立下午交。 麻烦组员稍等

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CALVIN, 昨天不是QQ讨论过了吗，你怎么还写得是支持啊？？

The lecture is mainly discussing the communal online encyclopedias would never complete perfect,supporting what are （以你前半句来看，应该用is）stated in the reading passage.(听力跟文本不是相互支持的！~)

First and foremost,the speaker thinks that the online encyclopedias are not totally wrong. Traditional encyclopedias have never been close to perfectly accurate.（有点copy听力的感觉，最好能改写一下） At the same time,the reading passage believes that the online encyclopedia often lack of official credentials.

Secondly, the speaker discusses that online encyclopedias have recognize the significance of protecting their article from hackers. It is the best way that employ a man whose job is supervise the article. Sustaining what is stated in the reading.(这句就不对了。感觉你还是没有理解文章和听力，最好再好好把两篇对比着看一下)
Finally, the speaker raises the issues that the problem for traditional encyclopedias is that they have limited zone. This point challenge the reading.（可以加一些原文观点啊，这样写太简单了）

So,the content in the reading passage are totally support the speaker has totally comment ideas on the topic made in the reading.

p.s. 提一个细节意见哈，LZ标点过后不习惯打空格，要注意一下:)

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其实是因为昨天看了范文是写支持所以改写支持了。 其实这种既不反对又不支持的我 不太会写了。

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12.2 综合，同组请狠拍。

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改好啦～～你也要帮我狠拍啊  
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改好了