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linlinUID: 137589

以下是我的一篇Issue，希望各为不吝赐教。语言方面的问题是我的致命伤，希望大家多提意见。
[B]Issue 3:”In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in profession relevant to the courses they teach.”……（教育类）[/B]

Recently people are more aware of the importance of the cooperation between education and profession. And spending some time in the profession relevant to educators' courses is a suitable and economical way of improving their performance and college's quality.
There are lots of factors that may lead to the improvement of education such as the amelioration of experimental instruments, the purcharse of new useful books for school library, and even the changing of the surrounding environment and so forth. But the most crucial factor, which cannot be disregarded in all of the factors above, is the quality of educators. That is because the educators are the immediate ones who communicate with the students, and who give the students the skills of operating these kinds of implements, and who provide students the methods of seeking useful information from piles of books. Hence the quality of educators is the foundation on which the other positive developments settled on.

It is true that the quality of educators is influenced by both the academic know ledges and the practical experience. Most of the professors in college and university, who are selected from the well-performed students, are qualified for their expense and master of basic knowledge, so there is no need to further improve their knowledge. But few of them have the experience working outside since their graduation from college or university. And practical experience is usually in low-level contrast to teacher's well-qualified knowledge. Hence while these educators have enough knowledge to teach their student, they often lack practical experience, which is also requested by most students and development of our civilized society. Consequently the colleges or universities which seek to improve their quality should send their teachers working outside corresponding to their course.

Of course, because any knowledge came from practice, corresponding working experience may improve the understanding of the academic knowledge. For example, my professor teaching basic chemistry is well qualified because of his 5 years working experience in a big chemical industry. He is one of the few basic chemistry teachers in our school, who can be in charge of the improving and inspection of student's designs in their final college year. In the fields of nature science, the working experience provide teachers chances to operate machines and confront problems which they have got merely from the abstruse words and some stasis graphics of textbooks. After touching by their own hand and inspecting by their own eyes, the teachers can be more familiar with the process and more aware of the nature of cooperation of knowledge and practice. And in the fields of social science the situation is the same concerning some attendee’s satisfaction and progress after accomplishment of address. So in that case we cannot neglect teacher's experience of work in response to their courses.

In addition, working experience can extend educators' insight and provide them necessary skill of communication. Unlike college or university, the company or corporation is more complicated concerning the corporation among different groups. So working in this company can improve teacher's awareness of corporation and communication and provide them better communicative skill, which is neglected in colleges and universities. With better communicative skill the teachers can improve the relationships with their students. And based on this compatible constitution, student can get better performance and increased awareness of corporations.

Generally, Granted that educators should be concentrated on the instruction itself, and spending so much time working outside may decrease the educational time, working experience is necessary as far as its contribution is concerned.

feier521UID: 109747

Issue 3:
”In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in profession relevant to the courses they teach.”……（教育类）

Recently people are more aware of the importance of the cooperation between education and profession. And spending some time in the profession relevant to educators' courses is a suitable and economical way of improving their performance and college's quality. （感觉这两句过渡的不大好“人们重视…and 有用）

There are lots of factors that may lead to the improvement of education such as the amelioration of experimental instruments, the purcharse（purchase） of new useful books for school library, and even the changing of the surrounding environment and so forth. But the most crucial factor, which cannot be disregarded in all of the factors above, is the quality of educators. That is because the educators are the immediate ones who communicate with the students, and who give the students the skills of operating these kinds of implements, and who provide students the methods of seeking useful information from piles of books. Hence the quality of educators is the foundation on which the other positive developments settled on（去掉on）.

It is true that the quality of educators is influenced by both the academic know ledges and the practical experience. Most of the professors in college and university, who are selected from the well-performed students, are qualified for their expense（？experience） and master of basic knowledge, so there is no need to further improve their knowledge（比较武断）. But few of them have the experience working outside since their graduation from college or university. And practical experience is usually in low-level contrast to teacher's well-qualified knowledge. Hence while these educators have enough knowledge to teach their student, they often lack practical experience, which is also requested by most students and development of our civilized society. Consequently the colleges or universities which seek to improve their quality should send their teachers working outside corresponding to their course.

Of course, because any knowledge came（comes）from practice, corresponding working experience may improve the understanding of the academic knowledge. For example, my professor teaching basic chemistry is well qualified because of his 5 years working experience in a big chemical industry. He is one of the few basic chemistry teachers in our school, who can be in charge of the improving and inspection of student's designs in their final college year. In the fields of nature science（有点别扭，在自然科学领域那里来得工作经验？而是自然科学领域的老师）, the working experience provide（s） teachers chances to operate machines and confront problems which they have got merely from the abstruse words and some stasis graphics of textbooks. After touching by their own hand and inspecting by their own eyes, the teachers can be more familiar with the process and more aware of the nature of cooperation of knowledge and practice. And in the fields of social science，the situation is the same concerning some attendee’s satisfaction and progress after accomplishment of address（什么意思？演讲？好像没有说工作经验对提高理解专业知识的作用）. So in that case we cannot neglect teacher's experience of work（ing） in response to their courses. （感觉还是不要分自然科学和社会科学的好）

In addition, working experience can extend educators' insight and provide them necessary skill of communication. Unlike college or university, the company or corporation is more complicated concerning the corporation among different groups. So working in this company can improve teacher's awareness of corporation and communication and provide them better communicative skill, which is neglected in colleges and universities. With better communicative skill the teachers can improve the relationships with their students. And based on this compatible constitution, student can get better performance and increased awareness of corporation（cooperation）. （工作经验提供交流技巧so促进和同学的关系？学校里的交流机会也不少啊？是不是说些其他方面的，比如，给课堂带来新鲜的思路，观点；帮助同学把所学的知识应用于实践，教给学生处理实际情况的能力，等等）

Generally, Granted that educators should be concentrated （用主动concentrate）on the instruction itself, and spending so much time working outside may decrease the educational time, working experience is necessary as far as its contribution is concerned.

个人意见，可能有不对的地方。互相修改，共同提高！

linlinUID: 137589

多谢牛人feier521！！我是一个决决对对的菜菜鸟，几乎刚开始接触GRE---Issue，以前也没写过这么难的文章，这些从我的文章应该可以看的出来。我觉得即使用中文写这样的文章也是很难的。希望各位大虾给俺支几着儿，祝我早日攻克作文关。

paisleyUID: 64183

建议你先去GRE精华区看看好吗？

有不少对新人非常有用的资料！

feier521UID: 109747

牛人的称呼，实在不敢当.............只是说了一些我的看法
第一次听这个称呼，无地自容啊...呵呵

linlinUID: 137589

feier521告诉我一些作文的方法吧，我9月靠文，我现在正看280片，看结构挑里面的有用词来总结，然后被概念4，不知有没有用啊！

paisleyUID: 64183

新手，精华区是我们费了很多心血整理出来的，不仅可以解答你问到的，你没有问到的东西也有不少。希望你能先看那边，再向斑竹求助。