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suxieUID: 136748

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing competition, a debate over whether competition is ultimately beneficial or detrimental to society draws people’s attention. In my view the advantages of competition based on justice are much more than the disadvantages on the whole. My view can be greatly substantiated by the following discussions.

First, competition forces the progress of human society by the means of improving efficiency. When we retrospect the development history of human society, we easily find the rule that the best races or groups always control the limited resources of nature. And the rule was mainly carried out by competition, which ensured the resources could be fully utilized to develop society at the furthest. Such rule exists in our modern world as well and plays a more and more important role for the rapid increase population and more and more meager resources. Only through the way of competition can society have a resource optimization and develop as rapidly as possible. We can learn the importance of competition in our experience. For instance, the government plans to build a bridge and certainly wants to have the project completed in the lowest cost and highest quality. Through the competition, a company can utilize wealth efficiently will be selected. Therefore the wealth saved can be used in other ways to develop our living condition and environment. The advantage of competition plays not only in the field of business, but also in education, in management and so on, almost every aspect of our daily life.

In another sense, competition stimulates the improvement of individuals, which is also drive up the process of society. People call for pressure to drive them to self-improve because of indolence sometimes. The competition inspires people to overcome the indolence by arousing the combative instincts. When one feels that he/her will be disgraced if he loses, he will do his utmost to improve himself and avoid lagging behind others. During the process of his effort he makes more contribute to the society. Once the environment filled with competition is generated, more and more wealth and value are created, therefore a more hopeful and flourishing society follows.

If there were no competition, what would our society be like? We would face series problems which blocked the development of society. The distribution of resource was determined by certain class who hold the power instead of fair play. As a result, people have no motility to do their work better for the lack of encourage. The individual effort was replaced by the birth, and the equality became meaningless in such kind of society.

Admittedly, competition brings some disadvantage to society. Firstly, a society completely depending on competition might ignore the troops make up of the old and weak that has no ability to compete and enjoy the interest brought by competition. Thus, it can not make sure every citizen in the society share the advantage of process. Secondly, overlade competition brings too much pressure to people which debase the quality of people’s life. However, with the improvement of social system(社会制度怎么说？)these problems can be solved in the future.

To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, we may be comfortable to say that the competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society and we can except to have a better society by encourage competition.(结尾写的很潦草，还不得法)

suxieUID: 136748

忘了贴题目和提纲了

Competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society.

同意：总体来说利大于弊
1．        竞争提高效率和资源利用率
2．        竞争提高个人的动力从而提高生产率
3．        竞争会带来弱肉强食，那些先天不足的人无法享受到的社会进步带来的好处不正当的竞争也会给社会带来危害，这些都可以通过改善社会制度来避免。此外，过度竞争带来的压力需要人们调节

screwUID: 135321

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing competition, a debate over whether competition is ultimately beneficial or detrimental to society draws people’s attention. In my view the advantages of competition based on justice are much more than the disadvantages on the whole. My view can be greatly substantiated by the following discussions.

First, competition forces the progress of human society by the means of improving efficiency. When we retrospect the development history of human society, we easily find the rule that the best races or groups always control the limited resources of nature（是指自然资源吗？the limited natural resources）. And the rule was mainly carried out by competition, which ensured the resources could be fully utilized to develop society at the furthest. Such rule exists in our modern world as well and plays a more and more important role for the rapid increase population and more and more meager resources（and plays a more important role for a society whose population is rapidly increasing ,while its resources continually decreasing我可能会这样表达，只是也不知对不对） . Only through the way of competition can society have a resource optimization and develop as rapidly as possible. We can learn the importance of competition in our experience. For instance, the government plans to build a bridge and certainly wants to have the project completed in the lowest cost and highest quality. Through the competition, a company can utilize wealth efficiently will be selected. Therefore the wealth saved can be used in other ways to develop our living condition and environment. The advantage of competition plays not only in the field of business, but also in education, in management and so on, almost every aspect of our daily life.

In another sense, competition stimulates the improvement of individuals, which is also drive up the process of society ( which also drives up…). People call for pressure to drive them to self-improve because of indolence sometimes. The competition inspires people to overcome the indolence by arousing the combative instincts. When one feels that he/her (he/she) will be disgraced if he loses, he will do his utmost to improve himself and avoid lagging behind others. During the process of his effort he makes more contribute to the society. Once the environment filled with competition is generated, more and more wealth and value are created, therefore a more hopeful and flourishing society follows.

If there were no competition, what would our society be like? We would face series problems which blocked (a series of problems that will block…) the development of society. The distribution of resource was determined by certain class who hold the power instead of fair play. (Without competition, certain powerful class will constantly control the domination of resources and thus the ordinary people do not have the fair chance to emerge from the crowd. 我的写法，不见的对与好)  As a result, people have no motility (motive) to do their work better for the lack of encourage (encouragement). The individual effort was replaced by the birth, and the equality became meaningless in such kind of society.
（这段你原本要讨论的是社会上若 “没有竞争会怎样？”来反证竞争可以提高个人的动力… ，但是到最后好象变成在讨论社会若没有 ”公平” 的竞争会怎样？ 个人感觉有些偏离Topic sentence，个人意见…:P）

Admittedly, competition brings some disadvantage to society. Firstly, a society completely depending on competition might ignore the troops make up of the old and weak that has no ability to compete and enjoy the interest brought by competition. Thus, it can not make sure every citizen in the society share the advantage of process. Secondly, overlade competition brings too much pressure to people which debase(people, which debases… which修饰全句时应要加逗点吧…) the quality of people’s life. However, with the improvement of social system(社会制度怎么说？ 应就是social system)these problems can be solved in the future.

To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, we may be comfortable to say that the competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society and we can except to have a better society by encourage competition. (by advocating equitable competition)


我不是高手，若有错还请指正，大家一起学习啰…^_^

happyman2000UID: 136936

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing competition,(这句太熟了) a debate over whether competition is ultimately beneficial or detrimental to society draws people’s attention. In my view the advantages of competition based on justice（你要说公平，最好用equity, justice主要是正义的意思） are much more than the disadvantages on the whole. My view can be greatly substantiated by the following discussions.

First, competition forces the progress of human society by the means of improving efficiency. When we retrospect the development history of human society, we easily find the rule that the best races or groups always control the limited resources of nature.(最好的种族总是掌握着有限的资源，这是什么规则？？)  And the rule was mainly carried out by competition, which ensured the resources could be fully utilized to develop society at the furthest. Such rule exists in our modern world as well and plays a more and more important role for the rapid increase population and more and more meager resources. （感觉这里有些空，竞争怎么导致资源的有效利用，你并没有说清楚。）Only through the way of competition can society have a resource optimization and develop as rapidly as possible. We can learn the importance of competition in our experience. For instance, the government plans to build a bridge and certainly wants to have the project completed in the lowest cost and highest quality.（这个例子能说明竞争的作用吗？ 政府是垄断的。） Through the competition, a company can utilize wealth efficiently will be selected. Therefore the wealth saved can be used in other ways to develop our living condition and environment. The advantage of competition plays not only in the field of business, but also in education, in management and so on, almost every aspect of our daily life.
意思是好的，语言是流畅的，但说得不够具体，并没有解释清楚竞争如何产生效率。
In another sense, competition stimulates the improvement of individuals, which is also drive up the process of society. People call for pressure to drive them to self-improve because of indolence sometimes. The competition inspires people to overcome the indolence by arousing the combative instincts. When one feels that he/her will be disgraced if he loses, he will do his utmost to improve himself and avoid lagging behind others. During the process of his effort he makes more contribute（contributes more） to the society. Once the environment filled with competition is generated, more and more wealth and value are created, therefore a more hopeful and flourishing society follows. 这一段挺好的！

If there were no competition, what would our society be like? We would face series problems which blocked the development of society. The distribution of resource was （would be）determined by certain class who hold the power instead of fair play. As a result, people (would have ) have no motility to do their work better for the lack of encourage. The individual effort was(would be) replaced by the birth, and the equality (would became) became meaningless in such kind of society. 这一段也说得太一般化了，不够具体。你可以拿中国电信或微软的例子说明，没有竞争，服务态度差，产品价格高，技术改进速度慢，消费者福利受损失等等。

Admittedly, competition brings some disadvantage to society. Firstly, a society completely depending on competition might ignore the troops make up of the old and weak that has no ability to compete and enjoy the interest brought by competition. Thus, it can not make sure every citizen in the society share the advantage of process. Secondly, overlade competition brings too much pressure to people which debase the quality of people’s life. However, with the improvement of social system(社会制度怎么说？social institutions)these problems can be solved in the future.
这一段可以不要，好像你立场不够坚定似的。题目也没有说竞争没有害处，只不过是说害处小于益处。
To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, we may be comfortable to say that the competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society and we can except to have a better society by encourage )competition.(结尾写的很潦草，还不得法
竞争的主要作用是， 它会促使企业、个人或政治组织想尽一切办法用最小的代价去获取最大的收益，不这么做，他们就会被竞争对手淘汰或吞并。而这会带来两种主要结果；一是节约成本，产品的价格会更低（也就是你说的资源利用更有效率）；二是消费者、选民可以获得质量更好、品种更多的产品和服务。（体现在技术进步上）
垄断是相对于竞争的，垄断的最大害处是厂商利用消费者对他的依赖，故意提供更少的产品供应量（包括更差的服务质量），从而抬高价格，获取垄断利润。 垄断也会妨碍技术进步。