13号的独立作文 求拍砖

mylittlejojoUID: 2897102

12月考T 都没有试过作文，第一篇，写了n久，心灰意冷。。。。
求拍砖。。。
觉得不怎么写的出来。。越写越觉得逻辑有问题。。

Do you agree or disagree that increasing the salaries of the professor can improve the quality of the education?

No where in the world has the quality of education been so much discussed as in our society. Since we’ve attached great importance to the role professors play in the education, it might be tempting to draw the conclusion that the quality of education will be improved as the consequence of the rise in salary of scholars, merely because all human being are invariably attracted by material wealth. However, I believe that it is the capability and willingness of teachers that guarantee the quality of education rather than money, otherwise people will have no inclination to respect the teacher, the most decent career in the world.

The first plain truth to support my point of view is that it is the dedication that makes a good professor. Those who choose teaching as their lifelong career are all have great interest in imparting knowledge and willing to help others. Accordingly, so great is their passion for teaching that they will make every effort to improve the quality of education. For instance, working in the rural areas of China, some teachers even can not get salary monthly, but they insist in providing the children with the best education and improving the learning facility to make sure that every students can study. For them teaching is not so much to earn money as to contribute to the society and help the people to get rid of poverty. On the other hand those who are driven by money and are not dedicated in their work can never get respect of public and they are not qualified to be called teachers.

In addition, behind my perspective, lies another equally important fact that the improvement of the education quality is attributed to the capability of professors. It is difficult to find an area in education that can not trace in some way to their skill and knowledge. Due to the development of the world and the advent of now technology, professors have no alternative but to update their knowledge and keep pace with the time. Otherwise the students can only receive the information of hardly any use.

Admittedly, the increase of salaries may have some influences to the attitude of professors. It, however, will never help to improve the quality of education. Even if some scholars will sometimes pretend to work hard in order to get higher salaries, it is impossible for them to insist in working with heart and soul. The chasing for material wealth and the irresponsibility will eventually lead to the ruin of teaching quality.

In conclusion, the quality of education is guaranteed by the dedication and capability of professors. Only those teachers who are willing to impart knowledge to students and experienced in teaching can take the responsibility of educating the next generation.

mylittlejojoUID: 2897102

求问逻辑有没有问题。。
题目问涨工资对于教育水平的提高有促进作用吗？

我认为没有 然后说教育水平是由于教师的忠诚度和教师本身素质决定 这样写符合逻辑么？