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At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
With the development of higher education, there has been a heated debate on whether or not school
authorities should equally support sports,social activites, classes and libraries so that students can advance in a well-rounded manner . Some believe that sports and social acitvities are just as important and should be a crucial part of education. However, contrary to the opinion of many peole is my heart-felt agreement with the idea that classes and libraries are more important than sports and social acitivites and should be given top priority.
Sports and social activites are vital in a student’s bring-up.the problem of higher education is that we focus heavily on academic perfomance. As a result, college students are turned out massively by the educational system which resembles an assembly line. They have been taught to use a number of methods to solve math problems without team work or to pile up knowledge in their mind while not concious of their social responsibility.. Therefore, it is evident that students should take part in sports and social acitivities with a view to reshaping them to meet social expectations.
Although students should learn to cooperate with others and shoulder their responsibilties, it is of greater significance that they should be educated adademically , first and formost, in order to take on job responsibilities. Our universities and colleges abounds with the examples of students who idle away their college life with computer games and sports games. The results are two-fold. For one thing, they are not able to find jobs due to lack of professional knowledge. For the other, they are in need of practical experience to fullfil their job responsibility. When they fails in their jobs, isn’t it nessary that students shold excell in classes and libraries? Their situation best illustrates the point that academic studies should be taken most seriously and supported most heavily so that students can meet the requirments of the job market.
And also, College students are those who are responsible for acquiring knowledge to carry forward human civilization. Therefore they should have the necessary tool to accomplish human endeavors. It is those top tier univerisites across the world that all assume great responsibilities in academic research, which will lead to great discoveries and inventions. The more they invest in classes and libraries, the more successful they are in researches. They do not have a stake in sports games though they may accasionally participate in them and they are also not social groups in emergency or at parites. Only those who perform well in researches and who are adequately financed will have the capability to push forward the boundaries of human civilization.
In sum, it is my belief that we should put classes and libraries on top of the ageda because students are expected to handle jobs in the long run and make contributions to human civilization in the future. I also suggest that students do some social work or take on some sports after class in the condition that such activities do not interfere with their academic training. In this way, they might be built up both mentally and physically to overcome future challenges.
语言方面,分别采用了倒装,插入,修辞问句,强调结构,the more,the more 结构,平行结构，虚拟语气,等句型,使得文章句式富于表达效果.同时注意避免词的重复.注意语意的接续和粘连。注意在满足表达的情况下，句子长短的变化。
结构方面采用了五段式和2-1的论证模式，中间三段一段让步，两段展开。段落内部开头是主题句，接着进行扩展，举例。用连接词使得段与段之间相互构成整体。
采用驳论,主体第一段采用因果推理论证展开。第二段例证展开。第三段比较论证展开。整体采用让步论证。开头段用背景法展开。尾句先表明立场，结尾段先总结，后提出建议，以此解决在主体第一段提出的问题。
内容方面,主要是使用几个例子,同时注意理由的并列,理由对于中心思想的支持.