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发表于 2011-1-25 14:37:43 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
From my own perspective, after mydeliberation, I will side with the statement that one will be more exhilaratedwhen they succeed at a challenging things than an easier one. The reasons formy preference involve three factors. First of all, it will strongly fulfill one’ssense of satisfactory. Additionally, the great achievement of a challengingthing will acquire best compliments which always make people happy. The icingon the cake is that bigger achievement stimulates the growth of confidencewhich bring us into happiness.

The main reason for my propensity for thisstatement is that according to the Need-hierarchy theory, the satisfactory of senseof achievement is proportional to the level of toughness. A particular exampleof this is that I was both qualified to the positions of executive person andgroup member of two volunteer activities. As an organizer, I was burden with somuch responsibility and expectation. When I succeeded in handling an emergency situation,I felt I was standing on the top of a mountain, overseeing the progress flowingfluently because of me, I felt I was important, whereas I didn’t get anyspecial inspiration on the position of group member. I just did the workassigned to me. Therefore, sense of satisfactory and achievement was proved tobe defensible by all the fact.

A more essential reason why I advocate mypoint of view is that when a huge work is done, you can receive bettercompliments. It a common knowledge that compliment makes people happy. Thesaying goes that flattering goes to everywhere. For the case in this writing,the sentiment I obtained as an executive person was amazing. The admiring glances,though a little pompous, made my heart full.

Similarly, two factors mentioned above arealso valid when we consider that big achievement help construct one’sconfidence which makes people look glory and pleasing. It is obvious that smalljobs are far from enough for us to get growth in confidence.

In nutshell, via three points mentionedabove we could draw a safe conclusion that a challenging job does cheer peopleup more than an easy one.
















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The reading passageexplores the issue of preventing the cane toad fromspreading. The professor’s lecture deals with the sameobjects. However, she thinks that all three ways the reading suggestsare likely to fail in the reality. And in the lecture,she uses specific points to support her idea.

Firstly, even though thereading passage suggests that building a national fencecould lead to the end of cane toad disaster. Theprofessor argues in the lecture that this way won’t be effective becauseyoung toads and eggs exist actually in the streams. The national fence isn’table to intercept the waterways so that the toads could easily pass through thefence by flowing in the river. Obviously, the professor’sargument disproves its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, despite the statement in thereading that a volunteer team built by young people could catch the cane toadsin order to eliminate the amount of cane toads, the professor holds the ideathat the volunteer team with little biology knowledge background will ruin theecology balance by mistaking the regular toads with the cane ones. Then shesupports this point with the fact that normal people without special training arehard to tell difference between native and cane toads. Once the native toadswas killed on large amount, it will turn out to be another nature disaster.

Finally, the professor asserts that theidea of virus will affect not only Australia but also other continents, whereasthe author of the reading claims that the virus could have effect only on canetoads in Australia. In other words, the reading doesn’t consider that danger ofthis virus will spread to other continent to form a larger destruction. Theprofessor proves that this clam is indefensible by pointing out that the virusthough put into practice in Australia, there is a chance that it will bebrought into America where the cane toads are main animals.

In conclusion, the contents in the readingpassage are completely refuted by the lecture and the lecture advocates totallydifferent ideas on the topic made in the reading passage.
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发表于 2011-1-25 20:38:45 |只看该作者
1.24作业我写的周一的(斑竹弄错了,把1月23日写成周一了)

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From my own perspective, after mydeliberation, I will side with the statement that one will be more exhilaratedwhen they succeed at a challenging things than an easier one. The reasons formy preference involve three factors. First of all, it will strongly fulfill one’ssense of satisfactory. Additionally, the great achievement of a challengingthing will acquire best compliments which always make people happy. The icing on the cake(哇,好高级的说。。。PS:icing让我回忆起我悲催的11G类反。。。) is that bigger achievement stimulates the growth of confidencewhich bring us into happiness.
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The main reason for my propensity for thisstatement is that according to the Need-hierarchy theory, the satisfactory of senseof achievement is proportional to the level of toughness. A particular exampleof this is that I was both qualified to the positions of executive person andgroup member of two volunteer activities. As an organizer, I was burden with somuch responsibility and expectation. When I succeeded in handling an emergency situation,I felt I was standing on the top of a mountain, overseeing the progress flowingfluently because of me, I felt I was important, whereas I didn’t get anyspecial inspiration on the position of group member. I just did the workassigned to me. Therefore, sense of satisfactory and achievement was proved tobe defensible by all the fact.
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A more essential reason why I advocate mypoint of view is that when a huge work is done, you can receive bettercompliments. It a common knowledge that compliment makes people happy. Thesaying goes that flattering goes to everywhere. For the case in this writing,the sentiment I obtained as an executive person was amazing. The admiring glances,though a little pompous, made my heart full.
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4 N. H3 O% Y$ H3 p2 E/ U  l. n( _3 f! QSimilarly, two factors mentioned above arealso valid when we consider that big achievement help construct one’sconfidence which makes people look glory and pleasing. It is obvious that smalljobs are far from enough for us to get growth in confidence.
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* v' w: @; Z2 B; x3 |( M7 cIn nutshell, via three points mentionedabove we could draw a safe conclusion that a challenging job does cheer peopleup more than an easy one.
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嗯嗯,相当不错呢!语言和结构都很好~像你学习

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The reading passageexplores the issue of preventing the cane toad fromspreading. The professor’s lecture deals with the sameobjects. However, she thinks that all three ways the reading suggestsare likely to fail in the reality. And in the lecture,she uses specific points to support her idea.
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Firstly, even though thereading passage suggests that building a national fencecould lead to the end of cane toad disaster. (even though开头的这个句子没完呐,后面那句是一句里的,应该是逗号,下一句开头小写~)Theprofessor argues in the lecture that this way won’t be effective becauseyoung toads and eggs exist actually in the streams. The national fence isn’table to intercept the waterways so that the toads could easily pass through thefence by flowing in the river. Obviously, the professor’sargument disproves its counterpart in the reading.0 `6 |+ s* Q% i  T, f

" z$ A' J7 f- s" ~; K: xMoreover, despite the statement in thereading that a volunteer team built by young people could catch the cane toadsin order to eliminate the amount of cane toads, the professor holds the ideathat the volunteer team with little biology knowledge background will ruin theecology balance by mistaking the regular toads with the cane ones. Then shesupports this point with the fact that normal people without special training arehard to tell difference between native and cane toads. Once the native toadswas killed on large amount, it will turn out to be another nature disaster.
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Finally, the professor asserts that theidea of virus will affect not only Australia but also other continents, whereasthe author of the reading claims that the virus could have effect only on canetoads in Australia. In other words, the reading doesn’t consider that danger ofthis virus will spread to other continent to form a larger destruction. Theprofessor proves that this clam is indefensible by pointing out that the virusthough put into practice in Australia, there is a chance that it will bebrought into America where the cane toads are main animals.
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In conclusion, the contents in the readingpassage are completely refuted by the lecture and the lecture advocates totallydifferent ideas on the topic made in the reading passage.(

很流畅,不过我没写过这一篇,不知道有没有漏掉什么内容。话说,读起来真有种读argument的感觉。。。。

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发表于 2011-1-26 11:27:58 |只看该作者
建议开头加一个背景,因为这样子有个前提再抒发自己观点会不会更好?

From my own perspective, after my deliberation, I will side with the statement that one will be more exhilarated when they succeed at a challenging things than an easier one. The reasons for my preference involve three factors. First of all, it will strongly fulfill one’s sense of satisfactory. Additionally, the great achievement of a challenging things will acquire best compliments which always make people happy. The icing on the cake is that bigger achievement stimulates the growth of confidence which bring us into happiness.. m/ B5 i/ w5 |, u

The main reason for my propensity for this statement is that according to the Need-hierarchy theory, the satisfactory of sense of achievement is proportional to the level of toughness. A particular example of this is that I was both qualified to the positions of executive person and group member of two volunteer activities. As an organizer, I was burden with so much responsibility and expectation. When I succeeded in handling an emergency situation, I felt I was standing on the top(用peak会不会好点?) of a mountain, overseeing the progress flowing fluently because of me, I felt I was important, whereas I didn’t get any special inspiration on the position of group member. I just did the work assigned to me. Therefore, sense of satisfactory and achievement was proved to be defensible by all the fact.
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A more essential reason why I advocate my point of view is that when a huge work is done, you can receive better compliments. It a common knowledge that compliment makes people happy. The saying goes that flattering goes to everywhere. For the case in this writing, the sentiment I obtained as an executive person was amazing. The admiring glances, though a little pompous, made my heart full.这里最好举个例子说明一下吧 8 G1 ?# m4 h# e

Similarly, two factors mentioned above are also valid when we consider that big achievement help construct one’s confidence which makes people look glory and pleasing. It is obvious that small jobs are far from enough for us to get growth in confidence. 9 ^; a: T( C. U6 c! e; ^' f* V' y3 X

In nutshell, via three points mentioned above we could draw a safe conclusion that a challenging job does cheer people up more than an easy one.
总体上楼主写的不错,但是论述是不是单薄了点?如果能加多2个例子说明一下是否会更具说服力

如有改的不好的地方请原谅

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1.24综合(sun3may修改)
The reading passage explores the issue of preventing the cane toad from spreading. The professor’s lecture deals with the same objects. However, she thinks(建议换词) that all three ways the reading suggests are likely to fail in the reality. And in the lecture, she uses specific points to support her idea.

Firstly, even though the reading passage(用reading应该就可以了,或者用别的词,如article) suggests that building a national fence could lead to the end of cane toad disaster.(句号应该改成逗号,一句话没完) The professor argues in the lecture that this way won’t be effective(感觉还有内容没写上,对什么是有效率的呢?) because young toads and eggs exist actually in the streams. The national fence isn’t able to intercept the waterways so that the toads could easily pass through the fence by flowing in the river. Obviously(这个词用的好), the professor’s argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that a volunteer team built by young people could catch the cane toads in order to eliminate the amount of cane toads, the professor holds the idea that the volunteer team with little biology knowledge background will ruin the ecology balance by mistaking the regular toads with the cane ones. Then she supports this point with (建议在这里加个动名词,例如demonstrating)the fact that normal people without special training are hard(建议换词) to tell difference between native and cane toads. Once the native toads was(改为Were) killed on large amount, it will turn out to be another nature disaster.

Finally, the professor asserts that the idea of virus will affect not only Australia but also other continents, whereas the author of the reading claims that the virus could have effect only on cane toads in Australia. In other words, the reading doesn’t consider that danger of this virus will spread to other continent to form a larger destruction. The professor proves that this clam(改为claim) is indefensible by pointing out that the virus though(将though放在that比较好吧) put into practice in Australia, there is a chance that it will be brought into America where the cane toads are main animals.

In conclusion, the contents in the reading passage are completely refuted by the lecture and the lecture advocates totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading passage.(最后一个分句感觉意思不是很通顺)

文章的结构清楚,只是感觉在在语法上有些小问题,用词也比较单一,不过有的长句写的还是可以的。我米有做这道题,如果有什么看法不同的地方多多交流哈~
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