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candis712UID：2824089

3.1 独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? the government should spend more money on education of very young children than the education of universities

There is a public debate about the different priorities of higher level education and the lower ones. Whether the education of universities deserves more money and attention from government than education of young children? I can hardly agree with it considering the following reasons.

First, spending more money on education of young children could improve young people's academic developments more effectively than focusing entirely on education of universities. Scientist researches show that the interest for academic study usually forms between 5 to 12 years old. So government needs to pay more attention on this period time of education from a long term perspective. Only with sufficient financial support, could elementary schools provide diversity of interesting programs to attract children’s attentions, and employ enough teachers to look after every student’s special requirements. Otherwise, if the government did not offer proper support to guarantee the quality of this level education, education of colleges, which provides more professional knowledge, could not perform its function well.

Secondly, education of young children covers a much broader scope throughout the population than advanced education, therefore, it is reasonable and essential for it to require more public financial support. Nowadays the significance of literacy is high valued, every child is supposed to receive at least basic education. While a comparatively lower number of people want to attend university. As in China, the number of people who has taken elementary education is nearly four times than those who finally go to college. Consequently, with so many children need to be taken care, the total amount of expenditure for young children' education is undoubtedly higher.

Last but not least, the financial system of universities provides many alternative methods for them to sustain their function by themselves. For instance, many professors could gain economic aids from scientific programs or private organizations. Meanwhile, they could also apply their patents or scientific discoveries into implement, which enables them to make profits and cover the cost of universities. On the contrary, fundamental education of young children is lack of such advantage, and more reliable on government's support.

In conclusion, I posit that it is wise for government to spend more money on education for young children, rather than education of universities according to the three statements discussed above.

keaishuUID：2213233

才意识到综合和独立是分开分组的。。。

把你们的放一起了。。第二篇是你的

beangtUID：2691375

In this reading passage, the writer assumes that as an alternative source of energy for cars, the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines will replace the internal-combustion. However, the lecture disagrees with this optimize (optimal) statement and disputes the three main reasons in the text.# ~! p! w4 s1 [, G, x2 s

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Secondly, the speaker refutes the idea that hydrogen-based fuel cells could save many pollution problems. Although the byproduct of fuel-cell engines is harmless water, it is unreasonable to ignore its other negative influences on the environment. In fact, the process of making pure hydrogen requires lots of energy, including burning oil which would definitely harm the environment.
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Furthermore, the speaker also mentions that fuel-cell engines lack powerful financial competition compared with internal-combustion engine. In the text, the writer cites an evidence that fuel-cell powered car could save half of energy than internal-combustion powered car. But the speaker notes another perspective that weakens this advantage. The cost of making a fuel-cell engine is pretty expensive since it needs a special dear metal which cannot be effectively replaced by cheaper metal so far.
语言流畅，听力的基本要点也都有了~

sun3mayUID：2574771

改TPO-9综合：

In this reading passage, the writer assumes that as an alternative source of energy for cars, the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines（engine应该不能算是一种source吧） will replace the internal-combustion. However, the lecture disagrees with this optimize statement and disputes the three main reason in the text., b  

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To begin with, the speaker argues that the hydrogen needed for fuel-cell engines is not as available as described in the reading passage. Though the hydrogen could be generated from common objects, it demands a difficult process to produce it. One problem during such process is that the temperature should be very cold in order to generate pure liquid hydrogen. Therefore, using this artificial resource to power cars is very unpractical.

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Secondly, the speaker refutes the idea that hydrogen-based fuel cells could save many pollution problems. Although the byproduct of fuel-cell engines is harmless water, it is unreasonable to ignore its other negative influences on the environment. In fact, the process of making pure hydrogen requires lots of energy（貌似不只是“耗费能量”，还有“释放污染”，如果把这点加在including前就更好了）, including burning oil which would definitely harm the environment.

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Furthermore, the speaker also mentions that fuel-cell engines lack powerful financial competition（这个归纳的好！） compared with internal-combustion engine. In the text, the writer cites an evidence that fuel-cell powered car could save half of energy than internal-combustion powered car. But the speaker notes another perspective that weakens this advantage. The cost of making a fuel-cell engine is pretty expensive since it needs a special dear metal which cannot be effectively replaced by cheaper metal so far.

主要的点都归纳进来了，语言不错的，没有什么大问题。
绿色的地方是觉得写的比较好的，学习了。

sEven_zhUID：3007258

3.1独立修改！
写得很好

candis712UID：2824089

3.3 TPO11
In the reading passage, the writer claims that people tend to read less literature nowadays which has negative influences on reading public, culture in general, as well as the future of literature. However, in the lecture, the professor refutes those so-called negative effects with sufficient supports.

To begin with, the professor points that reading less literature won't lead a decline in book reading. The text seems to worry about the quality of other reading materials except the literature. But the truth is there are many other books, evolving with science, history or politic, which are also worth to read. These books could also evoke readers' imaginations as the literature does.

Secondly, the professor argues that reading less literature won't lower the level of culture, too. The definition of valuable culture in the reading passage doesn't fit the development of modern culture any more. Many other forms of culture, such as music, movies, have appeared, which are all great alternative choices for literature, even more impressive and direct than literature. So it is no a waste of time enjoying these new forms of culture.

Finally, the professor disagrees with the statement in the reading passage that it is the readers' fault which causes the less support for literature. In fact, one important reason that why fewer people prefer to read literature is because modern literature is too difficult to understand for common readers.

In conclusion, the professor states a totally different attitude toward the situation of reading less literature with the text. And she confirms her ideas through powerful and reasonable analyzing.

sEven_zhUID：3007258

3.3综合修改~

candis712UID：2824089

3.4  TPO12
In this reading passage, the writer claims that Jane Austen is the subject in a portrait of a
teenage girl owned by Austen family, and cites three evidences to support this idea. However, the professor in the lecture disputes the writer’s statements with sufficient information.

To begin with, the professor argues that Austen's family member's recognition is not convincing. Austen had died for over seventy years by 1882, therefore, it is impossible that her family member who asserted this recognition had seen her before. Then, even though they endorsed Jane was the girl in the portrait as describes in the text, their words could not be used as grounded evidences.

Furthermore, the professor mentions that it is unreasonable to link Jane with the girl in the portrait due to the similarity with Cassandra's sketch. Austen had many relatives who were also teenage during that time, perhaps the portrait depicted just one of her cousins who looked like similar with her.

Thirdly, the professor points that this portrait was not painted when Austen was a teenager. The reading suggests that the style of portrait looks like the style of Ozias Humphrey, who was capable to draw this picture during Jane was a teenager. However, the lecturer uses another factor to refute this statement. The records showed that the canvass of the painting was sold by William when Jane was older than twenty seven. So she could be the young girl in the portrait.

candis712UID：2824089

3.4 独立
Do you agree with the following statement? For future career success, is relate well to other people more important than studying hard at school?

There is a public debate concerning the issue that which factor contributes most effectively to career success. Many people claim that relate well to other people is the key to career success, while, some support the idea that focusing on professional skill is better. However, I believe that the significance of each element varies when it comes to different area.

First, studying hard at school provides essential preparation for future success in engineering or natural science area. We could see the reason through analyzing the content of an agricultural engineer’s job. In order to eliminate the lack of water in a farm, what an engineer has to do is to find out the water demand of crops and design suitable irrigation system. During this process, there is no need for this engineer to contact other people. Therefore, no matter his relationships with local farmers or his employers are good or not, people would admire him for his excellent job if his design really solves the drought problems.

On the other hand, in business or social science field, relating well to others serves as an indispensable skill, which is far more useful than academic knowledge. In these areas, most time of the job evolves dealing with other people. Take the business for example. Running a business is nothing like the economic text books describes. Besides the basic knowledge, one must possess other advantages to make profits, including persuading people to invest, discussing details of the plan with cooperators, being familiar with potential major customers. Consequently, net work of human relationship dominates the business field. More friends you have, more possible you will win the game.

Furthermore, in some areas, such as art, the importance of the two factors can hardly be evaluated distinctively. For an art student, he or she has to improve both skills together; missing each one will lead the failure in the future. Because art students need to know people, understand their preferences, even predict their minds, in order to create popular work of art. Only when a writer gets along with his family or friends, could he acquire sufficient background information to set up characters in his new novel. In addition, he also has to master the technique of writing to express his thought and make them easy to understand by readers.

In conclusion, I don't agree with the statement that relationship with others always deserve more attention in career success. On the contrary, I strongly recommend that it is wise for people to adjust their career strategies according to different subjects.

xielijuan36UID：2995990

我看了好几遍也没发现问题，虽然有些观点我不太认可，但是言之成理，有理有据，语言流畅地道，真的挺不错的:lol

sEven_zhUID：3007258

3.4独立修改，很棒

sun3mayUID：2574771

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In this reading passage, the writer claims that Jane Austen is the subject in a portrait of a teenage girl owned by Austen family, and cites three evidences to support this idea. However, the professor in the lecture disputes the writer’s statements with sufficient information.1 w0 D4 @2 M- a2 C# ~. L4 {/ }1 Z

To begin with, the professor argues that Austen's family member's （改为members'） recognition is not convincing. Austen had died for over seventy years by 1882, therefore, it is impossible that her family member(加s) who asserted this recognition（这个从句建议去掉吧） had seen her before. Then, even though they endorsed Jane was the girl in the portrait as describes（改为过去式） in the text, their words could not be used as grounded evidences.

Furthermore, the professor mentions that it is unreasonable to link Jane with the girl in the portrait due to the similarity with Cassandra's sketch. Austen had many relatives who were also teenage during that time, perhaps the portrait depicted just one of her cousins who looked like similar with her.

Thirdly, the professor points that this portrait was not painted when Austen was a teenager. The reading suggests that the style of （加上the）portrait looks like the style of Ozias Humphrey, who was capable to draw this picture during（改为when） Jane was a teenager. However, the lecturer uses another factor to refute this statement. The records showed that the canvass of the painting was sold by William when Jane was older than twenty （中间要加上个连字符哦）seven. So she could （加上not）be the young girl in the portrait.

要点基本都涉及到了，只是在叙述的时候语法错误有点多，稍微注意一下哈。有什么改的不对的再交流哈~
一起加油！

candis712UID：2824089

3.5 独立
Do you agree with the following statement? People should work quickly and risk making mistakes or should work slowly and make sure that everything is correct?

Under the pressure of high speed in our modern society, many people tend to finish their assignments as quickly as possible. Lots of people become more aware of the quantity of their work, instead of qualities. However, I prefer to work slowly and make sure the accuracy of my work considering several reasons.

Making things correctly is the most significant principle of a task; no matter how long it costs, people should always focus on the accuracy. If one fails to do this, the problem would be dramatic. For example, when a young man is in his internship, his boss might sign him countless jobs in order to challenge the young man's ability. If the young man only wants to complete all the tasks in a reasonable period of time to show his speed, while fails to do exactly in the right way, it is apparent that he will not get the job, even brings negatively effects on the company.

Furthermore, doing things slowly as well as maintaining the accuracy might save more time than working fast and making some mistakes. This statement may seem to be a little unbelievable at the first sight. But after careful analyzing, I am sure you'll agree with me. I have watched a TV program about two groups of people who were competing with each other. The rule of winning was to find the wrong words in the same passage with shorter time. The first group red the passage in seven minutes, as a result, under the intense atmosphere they neglected many spots. Then this group had to do it all over again, the time they saved before was all waste. On the contrary, the second group act differently, it took them ten minutes to check every detail very slowly. But checking one time was enough for this patient group. Therefore, the lower-speed group accidentally won the game.

Anther advantage of working slowly is also worth to be mentioned. Working slowly is beneficial to foster a careful style of dealing with problems, which is indispensable characteristic of success. Carefulness is the key point in the process of success, especially useful in considering various unpredictable factors. A little mistake is able to destroy all the possibility to recover. For instance, when it comes to determine which market to invest your money in the business field, it undoubtedly requires long time to think, compare, and consider. In the case, hurrying up does not mean one will get the priority than others.

In conclusion, I strongly recommend that it is essential for people to finish their jobs slowly and carefully in order to prevent themselves from making mistakes.

伶女UID：2797207

3.5 revised

candis712UID：2824089

3.7 独立 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits？

There is a public debate concerning the issue that whether it is the advertising that leads us to unhealthy eating habits or not. To answer the question, it is wise for us to define the unhealthy eating habits first. I think three main factors of unhealthy eating habits involve reliance on fast food, unbalance nutrient absorbing and unreasonable diet. We could not blame advertising alone for twisting our eating regulation, as many other factors have more significant negative effects on ordinary meals.

The first element is the development of fast food industry, which serves as the basic imputes for bad eating habits. Admittedly, the popularity of fast food provides people a convenient way to have their meals, which has already became the first choice for busy employees or fashion young people in most occasions. But majority of fast food shares the same undeniable drawbacks including obtaining high calories, extra fat and sugar, all of which are harmful to our body system. Whether there is advertisement broadcasting the advantage of fast food or not, people will keep their pace on pursuing this modern way to eat in order to save time, especially under the pressure of high-speed live.

Another factor that has more importance than advertising is the misunderstanding of nutrient balance. Many people believe that more meat they eat, the healthier they will be. This is an old custom left by last generation because they had experienced a terrible fame. Therefore, lots of families prefer to cook meals consisted mainly of meat, since in their minds the energy of meat is exaggerated while the value of diversity of vegetable and fruit is underestimated. Unfortunately, this style never fit our cases any more. Advertising has nothing to do with this kind of behavior, in fact, some advertisements of vitamins or medicines correctly suggest people to take more fruit and vegetable.

The last contributor of unhealthy eating habits is the changing recognition of beauty. I argue this is an additional reason because bad eating habits take place in so many females who eat only a little to keep an extremely thin figure which is considered to be beautiful nowadays. Apparently it is the culture that dominates the situation, rather than advertising, so not only advertising has been influenced by this main-stream idea, but also other mass media has adopted the theory that the thinnest, the best. As a result, hundreds and thousands of women, who want to possess a so-called demon's body, have to drop their former healthy recipes, and take minor food which is only enough for survive instead. Then, countless stomachs are suffering and women trend to be more vulnerable than before.  

In conclusion, I strongly posit that advertising is not the main factor for bad eating habits. It only supplies and reinforces the three principle contributors I mentioned above.