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作文一直比较弱，我在30分钟里写不出好文章，这篇花时间比较久，希望帮忙修改一下 谢谢:D

When the first automobile was invented in Germany, people didn't suspect that how much it will change the world. It not only shortened the distance among friends and relatives but also totally changed people's life style. Nowadays, automobile is supposed to be a necessary for every family and it really improved our daily life in many different ways.





First, the presence of automobile make our journey more convenient. In the past, if a person decide to travel or visit his friends, it would cost him lots of time to get the termini. In contrast, People can go on a trip by cars on the weekend and go back to work in time. Let's consider a case from my real life: I memorize my grandfather has told me that it was very difficult to travel from city to city in his generation. But the things are different now, my mother usually drive me to a small town named Deyang, that is where my grandfather live in. In fact, everytime, when I awake from dream and roll down the the car windows, I find that we have already got the termini. Thus I can not imagine what the world would be like without car.





Second, the automobile make our life more colorful. With the development of automotive technology, numerous fantastic cars were invented and produced by some different famous company such as Benz and ferrari.Therefore many fashionable subjects emerged such as car racing, recreational vehicle and car exhibition. In fact, my uncle is a sparetime racing driver. I remember that he has showed me his amazing car tricks once. After that time, my life is not vapidly any more. I began to learn some driving skills, and I take part in my uncle's small club which make my life meaningful.





Indeed, automobile really changed our life, it not only shorten the distance from city to city but also make people's life more colorful and varied. I believe that the impact of automobile will still goes on.

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When the first automobile was invented in Germany, people didn't suspect that how much it will change the world.

1 "much" is not necessary, actually it might cause a grammar error.I'm not sure either.

2. 'will' should be "would"

Nowadays, automobile is supposed to be a necessary for every family and it really improved our daily life in many different ways.!

1,I quite doubt of your conclusion that "automobile is supposed to be a necessary for every family"-what about the one who doesn't have an automobile?!
2"improved" should be"improve"

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First, the presence of automobile make(makes) our journey(journey is not appropriate here,travel) more convenient.

In the past, if a person decide(decided) to travel (to)or visit his friends, it would cost him lots of time to get (to ) the termini(terminal).