求建设性意见，这样的作文在那方面改进能冲击5分？

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"The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."

Art, the practice of using different techniques, like notes, language, colorations, to reflect artists' contemplation on our world or even the ideas come from our humankind as a whole. Unlike the science and technology as a mean for human intellections, the arts plays role in revealing hidden ideas and impulses of a specific society.

Philosophical thinkings about our life, whose achievement finally embodies in a variety of art forms, represent social concept of humanity. This can be drawn from the correlation between several important movements of arts and emancipation of thoughts in history. In 18th century, started from Italy, there is an explosion of art, which we modern people denominate as the Renaissance of Art. Writers, musician, painters, and sculptors, etc. of that time embraced their preference for the old Greece's theory of art, which emphasizes the freedom of intellecture, esteem of humanities and pursuit of personalities. This movement in art, according to research of historians, exactly exemplifies social trends of spirit development at that time . As another example, In 40s' of last century atof United States, literature gradually start to described the enjoyment of sex shows the transfer of public conceptions on sex, from shying it away, then agreeing admitting on it as human necessity, finally accepting it to be discussed publicly. The advance in literature actually is a flow chart parallel map of societal concepts evolution. What we understand from art worksgiants in a specific time  period, thus, can be safely used to draw important conclusions about the social psychology of that time.

Social turmoils, especially those leading to political revolutions, usually piloted bycome up with works or books responsible for significant exemplary function for public. In 1888 , Karl Marx and his colleagues publicized the Announce of Communists, a most brilliant work in politics as well as in art of all times, not only reflects the social rebel/revolt/defiance of the infrastructure of capital government at that time, but also encouraged a myriad of youngsters devoting into the great revolution. The Socialism Revolution firstly boomed in European under the guidance of Karl, soon expand to Russian where Lenin leaded a successful revolution over against corrupt Czar government, and quickly spread into most places corners of the Earth. This social revolution of thoughts even posed important influence on today's organization of global politics since as the representative of Socialism country, China the developing country has a critical position in the table of world politics. As a medium for thoughts, no matter political, economic or cultural, the art work roles in representatingtion of the social scene/scenario at a specific time.

The history a science for revealing society status of the past, takes the advantages of the very tool, that is the historical arts to make significant discoveries of humanities advancements. With the help of mural, artifical decorations and the totem, historians of cavemen make conclusions that reflect prehistorical people's social and spiritual lives. The description for their hunting, gathering as well as cultivation, exhibits that the sense of cooperation had already rooted in human'ss mind thousands of years before. In addition, the delicate decorations made of animal bones, stones and bronze, are a proof that cavemen has the ideas of social hierarchystatus for that those decorations are often used by the chief of the tribe. What is more, the totem reveals their spiritual esteems for specific species, such as snake, sharp or birds, which functions as gods or goddesses in ancestor's religions beliefs. This is a merely tiny example for that historians use the prehistory arts to study the spiritual society of at a seted time range. However, since the arts is exactly a representation of society, it in fact was used in every aspects in history to understand the social impulses and its spirits.

As an exclusive means for reflecting philosophical and political ideas, spirit and impulses of persons, more importantly the society as a whole, the arts play irreplaceable roles over the long river of history. And just because its importance on recording societies, it never stops its steps and will still and will even better shows its power over the representation of a society status in the future.

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我觉得还可以啊

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现在坛子里好像还不热。
这篇文章第一个例子文艺复兴的例子展开不够。
语法可能还有问题