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3月14日
It is universally acknowledged that the development of economy relays on quite supports from residents. For instance, a few decades years ago, when Korea try to develop its auto industry, the government established many policies to encourage the Korean buying their cars. Although the auto industry has a quick and amazed improvement in the next couple of decades, I still cannot agree with the opinion that we should buy things made in motherland blindly. My reasons can be listed as follows.

First of all, the basement of an industry or a kind of commodity is the competition and choosing a better as well as cheaper one is the nature of customers. If the majority of us always try to choose the articles made in ourselves country, they will lose the impetus to improve the quality of their commodities. Without satisfying qualities, sustaining development will be troublesome. A fitting illustration to this is Wahaha, a famous logo in China. It used to be the most prevalent commodity throughout the whole country but because of its poor quality, it was eliminated through selection of the market.

Secondly, buying things made in motherland may cost much more than the same thing made in other country and this will lead to a waste. What's worse, the quality cannot be sure because of the lack of high-tech. Lending credence to my position is the example of myself. Last week I went to buy cosmetics and I feel hesitated between a famous commodity and a homegrown commodity  with the same function. At last, I decide to choose the latter to support the national industry. What make me feel depressed are both its poor quality and high price.

Admittedly, buying more homegrown commodity provides more funds for homegrown industry and of course this will lay a solid foundation for the development of economy. Nonetheless, life of common residents is the center of our government and we cannot sacrifice this center to get the development of economy. Accordingly, I really incline to the statement that we don't need to buy  articles made by national industry all the time.

All in all, the reasons why we don't need to buy commodities made in ourselves country blindly are manifest. Not only rules of market but also the requirement of residents reflects the unnecessarily of these laws.

这个。。。。。。很久没有练习了。。。。希望可以改的仔细一些，有些语法的错误，麻烦帮我指出来啦，我要改改自己中式英语的毛病呢。。。。。多谢啦~~~~

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1# Coryan

It is universally acknowledged that the developmentof economy relays on quitelargely relies on supports from local residents. For instance, a few decades years ago, when Korea try tries to develop its auto industry, the governmentestablished many policies to encourage the Korean buying their domestical cars.Although the auto industry has a quick and amazed improvement in the nextcouple of decades, I still cannot agree with the opinion that we should buythings made in motherland blindly. My reasons can be listed as follows.

First of all, the basement of foundation forthe development of an industry or a kind of commodity is the competitionand choosing a better as well as cheaper one is the nature of customers. If themajority of us always try to choose the articles made in ourselves our own country,they(指代不明确, 如更改为the local company/enterprise)will lose the impetus to improve the quality of theircommodities. Without satisfying qualities, sustainingdevelopment will be troublesome(语法错误, 由于without satisfying .., 后面主语必须是satisfy的主语). A fitting illustration to this isWahaha, a famous logo corporation in China. It used to be the most prevalentcommodity throughout the whole country but because of its poor quality, it waseliminated through selection of the market.

) A' W: u, P" s* h4 S2 ^5 S% \3 P#}, dSecondly, buying things made in motherland may cost much more than buying the same thing made in other country countries andthis will lead to a waste. What's worse, the quality cannot be sure assured becauseof the lack of high-tech. Lending credence to my position is the example ofmyself. Last week I went to buy cosmetics and I feel hesitated between a famouscommodity and a homegrown commodity  with the same function. At last,I decide to choose the latter to support the national industry. What make mefeel depressed are both its poor quality and high price. (这里有点突兀, 可以考虑如下unfortunately, I found it was of poor quality whenI used for a short time. 另外,这是不是还需要进一步进行说明不能看产地, 本地生产质量有可能很差, 购买者权益得不到保障)
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: |8 s1 `# u! q) M7 Y6 V: UAdmittedly,buying more homegrown commodity commodities provides more funds for homegrownindustry and of course this will lay a solid foundation for the development ofeconomy. Nonetheless, life of common residents is the center of our governmentand we cannot sacrifice this center to get the development of economy.Accordingly, I really incline to the statement that we don't need tobuy  articles made by national industry all the time. (这段好像论证不够, 只是一个转折而已. 可以将下段删除或并入此段, 或直接采取为结尾段可能比较好, 或加强论证一些)
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/ u: B5 S$ z8 O4 A( z: Z8 HAllin all, the reasons why we don't need to buy commodities made in ourselvescountry blindly are manifest. Not only rules of market but also the requirementof residents reflects the unnecessarily(词性错误) ofthese laws(可改为reveals its irrationality).


由于没有删除符号, 所以统一用下划线表示删除.
例子可能可以举的更加充实丰富一些. 个别用词可能有待商榷, 只是我也没有更好的建议.


加油.

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2# zhennupt
Thank you very much ~~~~

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3月15日独立写作
People would be happier if they had fewer possessions.

In our contemporary society, the majority of us always tend to move heaven and earth to pursuit money and positions, for the reason that they believe that these two things mean more possessions, such as luxuries, reputation and so on. However, from my prospective, possessions are not equal with happiness and oppositely more possessions will lead to less security as well as worries in a large number.

First of all, possessions may bring about the feeling of insecurity and therefore people would spend more spirits on protecting their possessions. Hence, less time and spirits are left to enjoy the life and sometimes they may lose the chance to relax themselves. This can be aptly exemplified and and illustrated by the case of my brother. He is a famous teacher in our town and as a young teacher, he has got too much respect and glory. But he is unhappy because he has to afraid that someone may teach better than him and someday he will lose the respect from all his students.

What's more, owning more always means you have more things to worry about. As the saying goes, when you are hungry, you have only one problem; but when you are full, you get thousands of problems. A fitting example of this is myself. I used to be the monitor of my class and I always feel worried that my classmates may be unsatisfied with me and also there are various of class planning and activities, such as the sports meeting and the whole planning of next week. All of these make me feel depressed.

Admittedly, owning more money can give us better life and higher positions will bring more respect. And of course, to some extent, they can make us feel satisfied and happy. Nonetheless, the real happiness is a kind of sustaining emotion and doesn't relay on other people's opinion. Accordingly, a wealth of possessions is just a kind of vanity, but not a happiness.

All in all, the reasons why more possessions don't mean more happiness are manifest. On the one hand, people need more spirit to protect their fortune or honor and as a result they will be insecure in their emotion. On the other hand, more possessions will bring more worries for its importance.

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Improving schools is the most crucial factor in successful development of country.

It is universally acknowledged that nowadays education has been one of the most prevalent topic and a wealth of funds fluid to it. However, a group of people maintain that it is not wise to spend so much money on improving schools. And they prefer to get more welfare and public facilities; while other people hold a total opposite opinion that the government should make more policies to accelerate the development of education. From my perspective, as a college student, my viewpoint tend to coincide with the latter for several reasons.

First of all, no one could deny that education is a kind of huge impetus to the economy of a country. Improving the quality of primary schools can lay a solid foundation for children's future as well as serve as a catalyst for the development of their qualities; while improving the quality of colleges will serve more high-tech elites to the society and there is no doubt that they can create expanding economic beneficial. A fitting example to this is the Peking University, one of the most famous university in our country. It has received millions of funds to broad its campus, build new labs and renew some basic facilities. All of these make sure its well-renowned throughout the world and of course there are many elites graduate from this beautiful campus and start their own business successfully.  

What's more, there is no doubt that students are the future and hope of our country. Without well-educated next generation, no one knows what would be happen in the future and no matter how wealth we are nowadays, our country will be decline in the next decades of years, This can be aptly exemplified and illustrated by the example of America. According to the statistics conducted by a famous educational institution, the American government disburses larger amount of funds for education every year than any country in the world and this lead to the quick development of America.

Admittedly, there are other methods to improve our country such as building more public facilities and promoting the level of health-care throughout the whole country. Nonetheless, neither building more basic facilities nor promoting the level of health-care can keep the high speed to be increasingly strong.

All in all, the necessity of improving schools is manifest. On the one hand, we cannot neglect the importance of the education to the next generation. On the other hand, high quality education can bring about a great deal of economic beneficial.

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5# Coryan 写得蛮好！

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3月17日独立写作

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改好了~~我觉得已经很好了，文章清晰流畅

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改好了，写的不错

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3月21日独立写作~~~

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晕 不知道怎么贴附件  我先用邮箱发过来了哈

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3月22日独立写作~~~

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已改，望回改

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3月23日独立写作~麻烦修改啦~