至今为止写过最纠结的一篇作文。。求批评！23号考，老天保佑好心人！

majiaobfsuUID: 2995583

如题，这篇作文我从开始构思到写完足足花了1小时20分钟，中途纠结无比。。。写成这样实属完成任务，希望有人能提供一些建议或者意见，最好能提出自己的论点，因为楼主在写的过程中可怜地就想到一个reason...

2009年12月04日北美
Do you think people should buy things made in their own country; even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else?

As modern society develops, globalization makes it possible for people to purchase various things made in places both in and out home. Sometimes, the goods made in their own country turn out to be more expensive than those made somewhere else. This is where the controversy arises. Some people believe that people should buy things made in their own country even the price is higher. From my perspective, this assertion commits a mistake of over generalization. I believe that people don’t have to buy something even if it is more expensive simply because it is made in their own country. My view can be greatly substantiated by the following discussions.

First and foremost reason is that the quality of goods that I buy is not necessarily better than those cheaper ones. One may wonder that how could the products of lower quality have a higher price such as products made in their own countries? One alternative answer is because of local government’s protection. Government would definitely protect domestic manufacturing industries by helping them sustain a high price level, thus making higher profit. Under such circumstance, those domestic manufacturers could also price higher than others without consistent higher quality, which is not fair and favorable in the shoes of consumers. We pay different prices for different qualities. There is no doubt that high prices should be consistent with its quality. If a product is more expensive but of the same quality with another, I can hardly imagine there are people who choose it simple because it is made in his own country. Another possible reason is that the original materials may be cheaper in other countries, which results in the comparative low prices. Life abounds with such examples. Rice is very prolific and famous for its high quality in Thailand, thus its price is much cheaper than that in China. Given this situation, I believe that almost every rational person would choose Thailand rice over Chinese rice because the former is obviously more competitive. With these two possible explanations, my conclusion can be easily made that there is no rationale for people to buy things made in their own countries even the price is higher when the quality is not necessarily better than same things made somewhere else.

Another reason that can be presented to support my view is that we can buy things which we are fond of without any limit. In most cases, people buy a certain thing out of their own preferences which vary from person to person, thus there should be no limit on their preferences. To illustrate, a case in point in this respect is that if a person prefers Swedish chocolate, he or she definitely has the right to buy it rather than buy a Chinese-made chocolate instead. He or she doesn’t have to violate his own will to buy things that he actually isn’t very fond of. Anything that fits people’s favors should be open to purchase regardless of its original places.

Admittedly, there is no denying that buying things made in their own country would show a support to their country’s manufacturing industries. By doing this, the sales volume could substantially enhanced, which will in turn benefit their manufacturer. However, as a consumer myself, supporting domestic manufacturing industries is more concerned with government and policy-makers. They can help those manufacturers by offering more subsidies or some tariff deductions, by doing which they would not only achieve the goal of supporting domestic manufacturers, but also benefit consumers in the country.

From what have been discussed above, it can be directly concluded that people don’t have to buy something even if it is more expensive simply because it is made in their own country. In this way, we can pay reasonable money according to goods’ quality, therefore enlarging our consumer surplus. In the meantime, our choices have been considerable expanded, which in all fronts is beneficial to most people.  （654 words)

majiaobfsuUID: 2995583

自己顶一下！！

PigwidgeanUID: 2759931

同23号考还一篇没写的飘过。感觉lz有些句子过于罗嗦了一点。似乎是为了点题几番重复了那句冗长的话。
以下提纲仅供参考：
不完全同意
1.首先，人们确实应该买本国的产品——支持国产是一种爱国行为，可以保证和促进本国经济发展；
2.然而，当本国商品的价格高于进口的同等商品时，不应该要求人们这么做，这是由市场决定的，消费者有选择自由，强制要求人们购买高价国产有可能导致人们生活质量下降；
3.最后，政府应当起到一个调节的作用。强制是不对的，但可以通过补贴使本国商品降价，或者对进口商品收取更高的税额，以保证国内外同等商品的价格相当。

yvonnechen0810UID: 3017521

我也是23号考，也还没咋写，才开始看呢

kkndkkndUID: 2692699

我看og上写，最后不要冗长的句子，这样不会得高分，是为了防止考生提前背作文。我觉得楼主可以修改一下，句子简明达意就好了。没考过托福，个人意见。我改了第一段，仅供参考。

As globalization enables global purchase, prices can be easily compared and may lead to controversies. Some believe that domestic products enjoy the priority of purchase even at a higher price. As for me, I believe that buying domestic products for the sake of just being domestic is really unnecessary. My view is stated as follows.

majiaobfsuUID: 2995583

了解~~
个人觉得你的提纲很清楚诶~~
下去再练练好了！！谢谢！ 3# Pigwidgean

majiaobfsuUID: 2995583

我看og上写，最后不要冗长的句子，这样不会得高分，是为了防止考生提前背作文。我觉得楼主可以修改一下，句子简明达意就好了。没考过托福，个人意见。我改了第一段，仅供参考。

As globalization enables global  ...
kkndkknd 发表于 2011-4-14 00:28

是不是尽量不要重复题目好一点？首段中把原题换个说法呈现出来？

kkndkkndUID: 2692699

要简练一点，有些没必要写的就不写，比如
As modern society develops, globalization makes it possible for people to purchase various things made in places both in and out home.

像As modern society develops 就没必要写了，这个改卷人知道是模板来着。
再比如 globalization makes it possible for people to purchase various things made in places both in and out home. 可以说得更简洁一些，比如globalization enables global purchase

所以og说300字以上就差不多了，实际上高分作文也不一定就要上400字，关键是有效地把问题说清楚。

kkndkkndUID: 2692699

个人意见仅供参考...