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1# ARouND1992
the most important education for students should be conducted in classroom or out of classroom. (This is not even a question, is it? An essay question would be more like ‘Should the most important education for students be conducted in the classroom or out of the classroom?’..But even this is hard to argue. By ‘should’, this question implies that it’s an obligation to conduct this most important education EITHER in or out of the classroom – but not both..rather restricting.)
When it comes to education, some people, who I think may be the majority, believes that the most important education should be conducted in the classroom. But is it really right? From my point of view, the essential (The question is not talking about ‘essential’ education, but rather ‘the most important education’. ‘essential’ education might not be equivalent to ‘the most important’ education..You’ve twisted the question in a very subtle manner.) education should be conducted out of the classroom.
To demonstrate this, we first need to define education. Is it just something you have been instilled in class? Obviously not. Education is a lifelong process. Generally speaking, everything that matters to you, teaches you, is education. Take my life as an example. Every day I talk to various people, and I can get their values, ideals through the conversations, and this is education. What's more, when I am back to home, then turn on the TV or computer, watching programs or playing games, I'm taking in moral values and aesthetic sense in the same time. (This whole sentence is a jumbo of short sentences that really should be properly compacted into one proper sentence – ‘when I am back at home watching programs on the TV or playing games on the computer, I’m…’. Also, ‘aesthetic sense’ is rather Chinese-like – you’d say ‘sense of beauty’ or just ‘aesthetics’.. ) So evidently you can also learn lots of things by practices (Where in your example did you talk about ‘practices’?), talking to people and touching the world, instead of sitting in the classroom, though we are unconscious of this learning (If you just say you’re ‘unconscious’, it really means you’re not feeling anything physically – as in a coma.) most of the time. So it is safe to say that we gain knowledge substantially from being out of the classroom. (Yeah, but the question is not about whether you learn anything outside the classroom. It is about whether it’s the most important learning..and again, the word ‘should’ would induce an entirely different hue into this – meaning that you are expected opt for the learning outside the classroom instead of the education in the class room. It’s about choice rather than factual comparison..so this is what I’m saying: the wording of this question as you’ve cited above is very dubious.)
Furthermore, there have been many people who succeed primarily owing to their self-learning process. Great people like Edison, Carnegie and Rockefeller were educated little in school , (Edison, yes, but Carnegie and Rockefeller? Rockefeller finished high school and attended a short course at a commercial college. Carnegie attended a state college and even got a scholarship – if you think this is ‘little education’, then you should understand that very little education was available in their time, and being able to get this much was already not bad. These two are NOT self-educated, mind you..if you read about Rockefeller you’ll know that he studied bookkeeping – the equivalent of accountancy – in that commercial college and that was what enabled him to get into the world of business. Of course, it was pretty much self-education and motivation afterwards, but you can’t just dump their official education because they are motivational examples. Your examiner would of course care nothing about whether they were truly ‘educated little in school’, but please learn to research your facts properly because your future academic writing depends very much on it.) but they eventually became great persons, the milestones in their fields. What is the secret? Upward mobility??, the spirit of adventure, and creativity. In addition, some schools (especially in Asian countries) tend to kill student's’ originality, sap their enthusiasm, make them passive receptacles. Few schools educate students according to their aptitudes. For those who want to keep their natural quality (But what do you mean by the ‘natural quality’ of a person anyway..), school education can even be rather negative. (Now, how you managed to deviate all the way from ‘the classroom’ to ‘school education’ is beyond me..if you are dumping school education like this, then there’s no need for neither kind of education – in or out of the classroom – because both of them can be part of ‘school education’..Here you’re equating ‘education out of the classroom’ to ‘self-education’, which, again, is rather unwarranted.)
Nevertheless, there are still some who argue that what we learned in classroom is irreplaceable, and they take it as the most important education. Yes, we can't deny a fact that schooling really brings us some important abilities, including logical thinking ability, critical thinking ability (Logic is an essential part of critical thinking, so are we talking about two abilities or one?), etc. But this doesn't means it is the most important education. Granted, those abilities efficiently help us deal with issues. But what about the most important things in our life? Integrity, sense of justice, and relationship between you and the ones you loved. It can never be learned theoretically. Without those vital personalities, well, even if one is the smartest guy in the world, he is useless to the society. I feel so sad to mention it that there are several campus shooting in the U.S.. Does the gunman lack education conducted in the classroom? No, most of them are the top students in school. It has nothing to do with their education background. (You’re again packing sentences together into one large sentence without proper separation..) They did so mainly because they lacked humanity. And that is a field where the schooling education fails. (Well, this entire argument is weak on so many fronts that I have a hard time sorting things out..is ‘lack humanity’ the only reason that they committed such crimes, or is it even the only reason that people commit crimes? How can you be sure that people who have integrity, sense of justice and good sense of relationship would never be criminals? Don’t numerous researches prove that crime rates decrease with increasing level of education? If you say schooling lacks humanity and this turns students into ‘useless’ criminals, then more education should not be able to reduce crime rates because the lack of humanity is all the same. The ideas in this paragraph are simply not logically connected, and I can’t get a coherent argument out of it.)
I will never say that the education conducted in the classroom is not important. But considering the overwhelming advantages out-of-classroom-education (Although this construct of a noun is rather awkward.) does have and some intrinsic weaknesses the former has, I would agree that the most important education for us students should be conducted out of the classroom.
总结:
好吧你的感情很充沛语言很优美但是基本上这篇文没有什么论理可言。。基本是各种跑题。。而且题目本身看起来感觉不像是原题。。所以请你仔细检查自己的说理。。不要写得high了就忘记了自己本来应该说神马。。 |
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