daily writing—Charry

chair020928UID: 2956418

20100619 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, Using e-mail/text messaging is better than using telephone/voice-messaging.

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It is annoying when we confront upsetting and controversial problems, what is more disturbing is that we have to make a discussion with others, especially with ones holding opposite opinions. Thus, choosing effective way to become consent is seemingly promising. It is a common phenomenon that, in daily life, people prefer to using e-mail/text messaging to telephone/voice-messaging to discuss the controversial problems with others. Actually, the former method does have the advantage over the latter and solve the dilemma issue better. From my view, I absolutely stand side with this kind of opinion for the following reasons.
For one thing, the way of using e-mail/text messaging could offer us sufficient time to make a more comprehensive consideration. Controversial problem, in general, may cause a fierce discussion between individuals with different ideas. Thus, it is an essential factor to make fully considerations, as well as organize them in a logical way, in order to convince others or persuade them. However, telephone/voice message is a certain instant communication way that exposes ourselves without careful thinking.
For another thing, it is also an effective way of using e-mail/text messaging to eliminate the aggressiveness or a rough tongue. People are prone to become impulsive somewhat while they are involved in direct verbal expression. It is always hard to control your temper or keep yourself in peace mind, especially when you fail to make consensus with others. In my experience, I sometimes lose my words when using telephone/voice messaging, and thereby, just spring up bad words which is neither polite nor proper that hurt both of us, and be not good to solutions of issues.

As what I mentioned before, using telephone/voice messaging is indeed a convenient way to discuss with others. Therefore, more people abandon using e-mail/text messaging for it cannot guarantee the efficiency of communication. With the rapid development of technology, however, more electronic devices are functional to remind host instantly when they receive either a new text message or an e-mail. Nowadays most telephones possessed this kind of function virtually intensify the advantages of using e-mail/text messaging to solve the controversial problems.
In a nutshell, although telephone or voice messaging holds its own benefits, such as time-saving and convenience, I still prefer choosing using e-mail/text messaging which could help me to concentrate on the problems and be beneficial to solve them frequently.

幕阳素素UID: 3025800

改了，别忘了回改啊

chair020928UID: 2956418

7月25日作业
Agree or disagree? If child want to do well in school, parents should limit the hours of
watching TV programs or movies.

chair020928UID: 2956418

7.25

after90sundaeUID: 3132327

改好

20100312NA

Agree or disagree? If child want to do well in school, parents should limit the hours of

watching TV programs or movies.

There is no doubt that more effort the children have,
better performance they will be.
That is to say that whether or not the child could do well in school is greatly due to their devotion to learning.
However,
I still cannot be side with the argument that the good performance is resulting from parents
limiting the hours of watching TV program or movies.
Major reasons against above point are listed as following.

First of all,
cultivating the interest to school curriculum,
for the children,
is more effective way than time control to make them do well in school.
The rigid limitation may even play a negative role that not being从句语法好像错了吧 expected.
Children are prone to be aggressive or avoid to do well
in purpose.
My own experience given a good explanation.
I have been sometimes fascinating with cartoon film,
while it isn’t an easy way for me to watch them for my parents limited.
Each time I had to do school work under my parents supervision,
the cartoon characters just hanging around in my mind made me not concentrate on learning.

Besides, watching TV programs or movies
may
broaden children’s vision or obtain more knowledge out of textbooks without
overindulges.
Some programs,
which I often watched during the childhood,
are still impressed（语法） me a lot until now.
Discovery,
one of my favorites
occupied spare time,
has transmitted certain geography information,
as well as scientific principal to me.
It inspires me to pursue further learning on science and arouse
my curiosity of unknown field.

Also, TV programs or movies
may relax children from school burden.
Entertainment or comedy is essential for both adults and children,
that may refresh our minds and recover from heavy pressures.
From this point,
a reasonable schedule of watching TV or movies may probably not
lead to bad performance in school,
but enhance the school behavior in some extent.

In a nutshell,
there is no necessary links between bad school behavior and watching TV or movies hours.
The simple way that limits the hours of watching TV programs and movies is apparently not as effective as they are expected.

语句虽然没有treshfish的老练，但是，我喜欢你的说理。不过limit也不是完全不让看嘛，呵呵，这个纯属个人意见，与文章无关。

congcguoke3UID: 3131224

It is annoying that we can't avoid having controversial problems with others; it is even more disturbing that we have to make a discussion with those people to solve the problem.( especially with ones holding opposite opinions.) Thus, choosing an effective way to communicate (become consent) is  very important.(seemingly promising.)  Some people prefer to  discuss the controversial problems over  email/ text message, others prefer to use telephone/voice-messaging. ( to communicate It is a common phenomenon that, in daily life, people prefer to using e-mail/text messaging to telephone/voice-messaging to discuss the controversial problems with others. Actually, the former method does have the advantage over the latter and solve the dilemma issue better. ) In my view, (From my  point of  view, )I absolutely stand side with this kind of opinion for the following reasons.(unclear )

My humble suggestion: Generally,  the writing is good. However, I suggest LZ should pay more attention to the construction of the sentence. There are some common mistakes with "the" and "an"; also, LZ didn't state the opinion clearly. I would suggest LZ  to perfect the writing.Please ignore it if you don't think this is helpful! Good luck!

theflyfishUID: 2101420

改好了。红色的是原文，黑色的我改的。
希望楼主下次传之前先调整一下格式。

超级猴子UID: 3023123

好了