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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money in improving internet access than public transportation.

Internet make
people's communication easier and relationship less closer. Although improving internet access can facilitate people to chat with friends, read news and watch video more easily, internet cannot replace the feeling of meeting friends face to face and travel to the place to see the beauty in own eyes. Moreover, although online working is possible now, public transportation is still important for the society function well.

First and foremost, internet elongate inter-person distance while public transportation shorten it（与introduction的观点有点相左）. As study show, internet is causing more than 1million computer addiction in China annually. With the convenient（ce） of using Skype to chat with friends and relatives, YouTube to enjoy video and website to read news, a large amount of citizens chose to stick to computer instead to make friends and exercise outside. However, internet’s chatting(chatting on the internet) make some of them feel shy and embarrassed in(when) having conversation in front of real people. Moreover, computer’s radiation harmed a lot of children’s eyes and lack of exercise decreased(用decrease不恰当) their health(用一般现在时就好，这个观点与这段主题句无关). Additionally(应该是however，转折关系), when people wants to meet their friends and do exercise closer to a nature（al） environment, public transportation is needed. So, switching the money from improving internet to improve（ing对仗） public transportation is to encourage（ing对仗） people to go outside to enjoy the fun of making friends and exercising.
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Secondly, public transportation is more important in residence(是t)s’ life and companies'business. Think about what is happening in New York subway at the end of business hour（after work） every day. Those crowding employees and rushing officers just want to catch the train on time. If they missed the train, they need to wait another half hour after their tired several hours'work. If the government can invest more money to add more train, they do not need to be so nervous about if they can catch the train. Moreover, consider about this condition, if you are a boss, how would you feel if you cannot deliver your commodity on time and need to pay more money for the delay. Even though citizens can order goods and do business online, those goods are still needed to by deliver(be delivered) with transportation in real world. So, better public transportation can make society function more efficiently.0 ], l6 ]' x/ Q" m4 f4 a1 D

Admittedly, internet is also important as a crucial way to commute(transfer) information. Nevertheless, information cannot compare(be compared with) to real people and real goods(他们本来就不能比较，应该是网上交流跟见面比较). Therefore, improving public transportation is more crucial(前面用过，换成significant) than improving internet（+access）.

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