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gambellUID: 122696

我发现即使先写过提纲，到摸考的时候也会突然卡壳，险啊！！
还有总写提纲也有一个问题，开头和结尾不会写了，怎么样才能让开头吸引人，结尾也完善，请介绍一下好的思路。
能否打个分，谢了
54"History teaches us only one thing: knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today."

People's present culture is derived from the history, history accumulates nearly all the former knowledge and experiences of all passed ages. These cherish possessions benefit human beings a lot especially when making important decisions today no matter the sources people learn was successful or fail in earlier times.

Though successful precedents make no promise the wise decision at present even they are followed since many factors have turned different from historic ones. Teaching and studying the experiences still shows great value by analyzing those preterit events to make out reasons why they were successful and how they were carried out in the specific right way. By doing this kind of work, people can take the situation they learned in account when facing similar events and increase the possibility what they make is advisable.

Moreover, not only learning successful in past gives people valuable experiences, evaluating the failures in the history also helps them even more greatly through the lessons those used to brought serious harm to human beings living in that times. By knowing how those failures were made out, people would be much more cautious to choose the direction they forge ahead in the future to avoid the same bad result as before. And thus, though a little setback still exists now, people are always more likely improving themselves by keeping meditating and correcting their ancestor's faults. For instance, for the tremendous disasters impacted to whole of the world from the World War II, all countries now are paying much attention on the world-wide arms race and political attitudes of some nations those used to cause wars like Germany and Japan. A world famous newspaper called MIRROR in Germany often points out the present bad trends appeared like discriminations and xenophobia in society and reminds people not to make the same mistake as their earlier ones did. By the case, historic failures do tell present how to avoid mistakes, more or less.         

While I must concede that long time can make so many changes that lead to the condition just copying earlier actions do not necessarily work out the same fruits, studying history serves well to help making decisions as a mirror. By checking themselves in the mirror, people could draw out some rules through researches and measure their own deeds whether those are in a sage way. Many great thinkers' theories of philosophy those lead fellows to brilliance were made out in the very way of retrospect and analysis of history.

In conclusion, through history learning, it shows not what a right decision is but what a right one seems like and what the factors may lead to success or failure. Francis Bacon, British philosopher said, "History makes man wise". I think it means the same attitude as mine

blake_wangUID: 9871

1, it's a good essay within 45 minutes.
2, the rate of examples to reasoning seems slim. Because of that, the whole essay is unconving.
3, the quatation of  Francis Bacon enlights the whole essay in the end.
4,

gambellUID: 122696

谢谢你的热心
还请大家改一改语言与谋篇方面的不足
能不能给个分

再次感谢

gambellUID: 122696

自己再顶

pingfongUID: 135162

你语言不错。

论证注重说理，有点单调，可以多一点举例。

不过历史类是难写一点。

可以交流心得dingdongdong@sina.com

gambellUID: 122696

哈哈哈，居然有人说我语言不错，太幸福了（尽管我心知肚鸣这是安慰）
我感觉自己写文章就像吵架，没文化，所以总是在那里掰理，没什么例子，也因此字数上不去，老在400字左右，得多收一下例子啊
谢谢你的评价
我的email---hunterhq@yeah.net
but 我比较喜欢在bbs上交流，人多力量大