issue26

sacrabUID: 140880

"Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."


There always exists a heated discussion about whether to preserve those old buildings or to pull them down so as to give way to modern ones. In my point of view, anicient buildings are worth preserving but only to a comparativerly small exntent. It is the modern development that should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that our present society can be more advanced and prosperous

Admittedly, historic buildings and relics are important to a nation. It represents a nation’s glorious history, progresses ever made, and their people’s talent and dilegence. Every person of that nation should have the right to admire these fabulous heritage handed down to them by their ancestors. They are not only helpful in instill patriotism to the people’s mind but also symbolic in representing a nation. With these exquisite achievement in the history, that nation’s international reputation will be greatly reinforced. As is known to all, the UNESCO is selecting ancient ruins and buildings thoroughout the world to name them “the World Cultural Heritage”. If a particular site in a country is fortunate enough to be chosen, all people of the country will be very proud. At the meantime, local tourism will also benefit a lot from foreign tourists flooding in to admire the miracle.

However, not all old buildings should be preserved. It is true that historic ruins and famous buildings, whose number is very limited, should be preserved. But apart from that, there are still many more old buildings which used to be very ordinary in the past and have no more practical value, both morally and economically, at present. These old ones are not worth preserving at all. Just like old toys should be discarded by children, these buildings ought to be pulled down and thus giving way to the more modern and multi-functional buildings. Nowadays, lands are precious because of their limited number. The present situation is that population on the earth is increasing at an unbelievable speed and moreover, our people’s needs and interests are very much diversified, more lands are to be used to restore the natural environment, etc., any of which can make the action of retaining the dilapidated buildings a game not worth the candle.

Some critics, who are againgst replacing old buildings with modern ones, may argue that preserving old buildings can reappear the bygone days. I think their dubbing these dilapidation as historic sites is absurd. We should not bury ourselves deep in the good old days, rather we should look forward. If we stick too much to old things, we will never think of the future. Actually it is tomorrow that will come, not yesterday. As a result, we should build more modern buildings. On one hand, our building actions can boost the economy of society as well as solving the most urgent social problem of the day—population explosion. On the other hand, when we are trying our best to build modern buildings which will certainly outlive the historic sites nowdays, we are, in fact, erecting monuments or landmarks which will also be the precious heritage we leave to our descendancy centuries after to admire us.
(521 words)

blake_wangUID: 9871

1,your ablility of reasoning impresses me most, yet more example than what is illustrated in this essay should be provided for any assertion loses its weight if no cases are found avaible.
2,

sacrabUID: 140880

这方面例子不好想啊，楼上有没有好的例子？

荧荧UID: 134343

你的写长句的skill我要好好学习,但是觉得你这片文章深度不够, 尤其第二段的理由,如果是对我似乎没有什么说服力.我在文中看到下面这句:
On one hand, our building actions can boost the economy of society as well as solving the most urgent social problem of the day—population explosion.
是否可以试着展开点,说明深刻些
还有缺乏结尾
个人意见,仅工参考

sacrabUID: 140880

第二段说服力是不够，所以需要个例子啊
至于结尾，最后一段在列提纲的时候计划是作为一个观点的，但是写到后来发觉这段作为结尾好象也可以。最重要的事，时间到了……

sacrabUID: 140880

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genie05UID: 30358

"Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."

There always exists a heated discussion about whether to preserve those old buildings or to pull them down so as to give way to modern ones. In my point of view, anicient buildings are worth preserving but only to a comparativerly small exntent. It is the modern development that should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that our present society can be more advanced and prosperous

Admittedly, historic buildings and relics are important to a nation. It represents a nation’s glorious history, progresses ever made, and their people’s talent and dilegence. Every （我喜欢ANY呵呵）person of that nation should have the right to admire these fabulous heritage handed down to them （by their ancestors总不是后人吧）. They are not only helpful in instill（ing） patriotism to the people’s mind but also symbolic in representing a nation. With these exquisite achievement in the history, that nation’s international reputation will be greatly reinforced. As is known to all, the UNESCO is selecting ancient ruins and buildings throughout the world to name them “the World Cultural Heritage”(in order to ……………..). If a particular site in a country is fortunate enough to be chosen, all people of the country will be very proud. At the meantime, local tourism will also benefit a lot from foreign tourists flooding in to admire the miracle.

However, not all old buildings should be preserved. It is true that historic ruins and famous buildings, whose number is very limited, should be preserved. But apart from that, there are still many more old buildings which used to be very ordinary（换个词比较好trivial or commonplace） in the past and have no more practical value, both morally and economically, at present（你好现实哦）. These old ones are not worth preserving at all. Just like old toys should be discarded by children, these buildings ought to be pulled down and thus giving way to the more modern and multi-functional buildings. Nowadays, lands are precious because of their limited number. The present situation is that population on the earth is increasing at an unbelievable (unexampled) speed, and moreover, our people’s needs and interests are very much diversified, more lands are to be used to restore the natural environment, etc., any of which can make the action of retaining the dilapidated buildings a game not worth the candle.(其实写的还是不错，就是感情上不太接受)

Some critics, who are againgst replacing old buildings with modern ones, may argue that preserving old buildings can reappear the bygone days. I think their dubbing these dilapidation as historic sites is absurd. We should not bury ourselves deep in the good old days, rather we should look forward. If we stick too much to old things, we will never think of the future.（换换句子吧，这里WE太多了，sticking too much to old things will help noting but prevent us thinking of the future） Actually it is tomorrow that will come, not yesterday. (感觉怪怪的)As a result, we should build more modern buildings. On one hand, our building actions can boost（哦哦，学到一点，谢谢） the economy （of society） as well as solving the most urgent social problem of the day（请教，为什么不用today?会比较好吗？你的这个用法我没有用过，请指教）—population explosion. On the other hand, when we are trying our best to build modern buildings which will certainly outlive the historic sites nowadays, we are, in fact, erecting monuments or landmarks which will also be the precious heritage we leave to our descendancy centuries after to admire us.
(521 words)
有错字，用WORD吧，不过如果是考试直接剪下来的，你的错误比我少多了。
不错，不错，感觉对句子用的很熟练。呵呵，我学到不少，而且观点感觉比较新，如果是我的话，我写的是：1：现在人们尽了很大的努力来保存古迹
                2：价值
                3：如过不保留
                4：但也不是所有的都保留，呵呵，要是中文我们就可以来一个“食之无肉，弃之有味“
各位看呢，是不是太模版了，没深度，指导一下吧，谢谢谢谢谢！


评价仅个人观点，不对的地方还希望包涵！！

sacrabUID: 140880

to kynge还是给个实际例子吧……
to genie05这是我第一次被人逐字逐句的改文章，感动ing ……，我这算模考的，所以错误就一起帖上来了。we在那里好象是多了点，另外of the day可以用的，意思就是当代的……

genie05UID: 30358

多谢赐教！
郁闷中，为什么我的就写的那么菜！！