daily writing 知心老奶奶的作文

yanyan1228UID: 3051879

以后每天要开始写作文了，加油，二战！

奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

加油啊 楼主 可以参加作文小组 大家互改的

yanyan1228UID: 3051879

9月5号
A独立写作
If you need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, using e-mail or text message is better than using telephone or voice-messaging.

Coupled with the rapid development in the technology, there are numerous communication forms for individuals to choose. When we confront the upsetting or controversial problems, I tend to opt to the telephone and voice-messaging to discuss the matters rather than the e-mail or text message.

To begin with, telephone or voice -messaging is a two-direction form to communicate. As we know, via the real voice, we may find we are in the real condition which provides excellent atmosphere to discuss problems. Undoubtedly, consulting one subject through the telephone is a two-direction communication way in which we can discuss the issues zealously and a get effective feedback in order to solve problems quickly. In other word, we can clearly express the problems and get other's information. It is to make jointed effort to address those upsetting or controversial issues.

Furthermore, on my personal level, the verbal discussion shows kind and active attitudes to solve the disturbing matters when we deal with others in our life and work.  Although the written communication forms like e-mail and text message are another ways, the form is lack of activeness and the determination to make coordinate efforts to address the problems. It is generally recognized that people will feel upsetting when they confront controversial issues or other unhappy things with others, this genuine approach by real discussion would relieve the negative feelings between two sides. If it comes to that, the problems are easily to be resolved.

However, some people would hold the opinion that the verbal communication form will make people feel awkward if there are unhappy things happening between them. On this occasion, the written way is a better choice. Also, they maintain, the communication by telephone or voice -massaging would stimulate the problems; on the contrary, the written approach can deal with the issue reasonably and calmly. In spite of these, the telephone and voice-messaging is a better way to address the problems effectively and actively.

B综合写作TPO９
The lecture maintains that the advantages of hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines couldn't be substantiated, not mention of the replacement of the internal-combustion ones as the source of automobile's power. The views actually contradict the statements made in the reading passage, which suggests that the new source has a lot of excellent characteristics.

To begin with, the speaker in the lectures claims that couldn't be available easily because it is hard to produce and store. The new engines use hydrogen as main source which needs to be purified liquid form, but the purification is a difficult technology. Meanwhile the liquid hydrogen is hard to store because of it requires extreme lower temperature. But in the passage, the author asserts that the new source can be obtained from the natural gas and water which are unrestricted.

Furthermore, the lecture contends that the hydrogen-based fuel-cell could also produce pollution although it is derived from water and other natural gas. The process of the purification of hydrogen needs the burning coal and oil; undoubtedly it may release carbon dioxide which must influence the environment. Therefore, it can not be said that the new power is attractive in the friendly-environment as mentioned in the reading.

Finally, the lecture challenges the final point in the reading, with regard to the cost of the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines.
The professor believes that the new form requires platinum which is a rare and expensive metal. Without this metal, the hydrogen may not be able to produce chemical reaction then create electricity to power the automobiles.

Thus it can be inferred that the speaker challenges the author by giving above reasons as to show why she thinks the advantages of hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines stated in the reading passage should need to be further discussed.

yanyan1228UID: 3051879

:loveliness:谢谢大家批改

永动鸡UID: 3006486

If you need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, using e-mail or text message is better than using telephone or voice-messaging.+ B3 x- v+ |5 X9 c6 u1 Q( l
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Coupled with the rapid development in the technology, there are numerous communication forms for individuals to choose. When we confront the upsetting or controversial problems, I tend to opt to the telephone and voice-messaging to discuss the matters rather than the e-mail or text message.# K- g' Q' ?4 m6 o6 r
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To begin with, telephone or voice -messaging is a two-direction form to communicate. As we know, via the real voice, we may find we are in the real condition which provides excellent atmosphere to discuss problems. Undoubtedly, consulting one subject through the telephone is a two-direction communication way in which we can discuss the issues zealously and a get effective feedback in order to solve problems quickly. In other word（+s）, we can clearly express the problems and get other's information. It is to make jointed effort to address those upsetting or controversial issues." m. {. h5 ^/ Y2 N. ^0 q
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Furthermore, on my personal level, the verbal discussion shows kind and active attitudes to solve the disturbing matters when we deal with others in our life and work. Although the written communication forms like e-mail and text message are another ways(+to solve problems), the form is(these forms are)  lack of activeness and the determination to make coordinate efforts to address the problems. It is generally recognized that people will feel upsetting when they confront controversial issues or other unhappy things with others, this genuine approach by real discussion would relieve the negative feelings between two sides. If it comes to that, the problems are easily to be resolved.

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However, some people would hold the opinion that the verbal communication form will make people feel awkward if there are unhappy things happening between them. On this occasion, the written way is a better choice. Also, they maintain, the communication by telephone or voice -massaging would stimulate the problems; on the contrary, the written approach can deal with the issue reasonably and calmly. In spite of these, the telephone and voice-messaging is a better way to address the problems effectively and actively.+ [; h& s Y: B5 k j- \
最后一段有点问题，虽然你想让步讲text messaging的好处，但是不合适做为结尾段的重点。你文章的中心是突出voice messaging的好处，但一个结尾段你只对voice-messaging亲描淡些了一句，本末倒置了。
其余部分还可以。

yanyan1228UID: 3051879

谢谢楼上帮忙修改！

Sudden2012UID: 2856328

知心老奶奶，今天有事儿，不好意思，明天下午改好了立即贴上来哈！我也是二战，要开始每天写了，互相监督吧~
对了，小组任务分配上你应该帮我修改综合的，可以再看看我的综合吗？我也很久没有写了，多多指教哈！

Sudden2012UID: 2856328

改好了，晚了点，加油哈！

奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

Coupled with the rapid development in the technology, there are numerous communication forms for individuals to choose. 删When we confront the upsetting or controversial problems, I（we or I , 保持一致） tend to opt to the telephone and voice-messaging to discuss the matters rather than the e-mail or text message.

To begin with, telephone or voice -messaging is a two-direction form to删 communicate. As we know, via the real voice, we may find we are in the real condition which provides excellent atmosphere to discuss problems. Undoubtedly, consulting one subject through the telephone is a two-direction communication way in which we can discuss the issues zealously and a get effective feedback in order to solve problems quickly. In other word, we can clearly express the problems and get other's information.(E-mail也可以做到这点，有没有更贴近主题的说法) It is to make jointed effort to address those upsetting or controversial issues.$ Q; o3 D) O: ^" k
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第一个优点是直接，反馈快速
Furthermore, on my personal level, the verbal discussion shows kind and active attitudes to solve the disturbing matters when we deal with others in our life and work.  Although the written communication forms like e-mail and text message are another ways, the form is lack of activeness and the determination to make coordinate efforts to address the problems. It is generally recognized that people will feel upsetting when they confront controversial issues or other unhappy things with others, this genuine approach by real discussion would relieve the negative feelings between two sides. If it comes to that, the problems are easily to be resolved. 谈话怎么减压了  还有很多人说着说着激动就吵起来了呢 支持论点的论据不够有力   
第二个优点是  可以理解成更多的互动可以减少压力？没有支持的例子或者分析。
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However, some people would hold the opinion that the verbal communication form will make people feel awkward（embarrass people） if there are unhappy things happening between them. On this occasion, the written way is a better choice. Also, they maintain, the communication by telephone or voice -massaging would stimulate the problems; on the contrary, the written approach can deal with the issue reasonably and calmly. In spite of these, the telephone and voice-messaging is a better way to address the problems effectively and actively.1 C* R( l% W3 m1 v! {" i  J