issue114 科技与人性那篇，提点建议吧！

qhywUID: 136716

114"Humanity has made little real progress over the past century or so. Technological innovations have taken place, but the overall condition of humanity is no better. War, violence, and poverty are still with us. Technology cannot change the condition of humanity."


Technology is beautiful which reveals the harmonious natural laws and explores the abstruse universe. It is undoubted that in past century technology brings people prodigious inventions and the titanic development of the material civilization. But the development of technology do not make war,violence and poverty far away from us but more seriously threaten us.therefore, I fundamentally agree with the above assertion that technology cannot change the condition of humanity.

It is undeniable that the past century witnessed unprecedented technological progress.
Even decades years ago,one letter needed to spend mailman at least several days or even long time to mail. But now it only needs common people’s “one-click”, letter will reach the receiver imdeiately wherever the receiver is in Europe or in America.It is the result of the high develoment of communication technology. In 1900, the expected value of the whole world’s average life-span is only 45,now is over 66. the prolonged life-span depends on the development of medicin field and the improvement of people’s life conditions. And from 20 century, the human firstly walk out of the earth and ramble the outspace. The experts predict that the next goal of exploring the mars will be realized in the near future. All these brilliant achievement show the great beneficial side of technology.

However the other side that is negative side the technology brings to us can not be ingored. In fact, from one of the Chinese great invention---gun-power--- was used in war to Einstein’s modern theory---E=mc*c----was applied to invent the atom-bomb. The human at some extent have begun to destory himself step by step. The tech of clone is not so much an great feat as a absolute disaster. If there is a little improper usage, all the world is bound to fall into edge of ending. Today, almost all the country give the priority of the technological development to arm race. Some countries even put the mojority of their money on making weapons, warships or the research of military technology regardless of the the people’s suffering of poverty. Several  unavoiding results are following as(1)the hasty decreased living conditions of the native people(2) the stagnation of the economy and culture(3) the frequent occurrence of turbulence. From this point, technology destroys the human beings and the relationship between them instead of brings them happiness and united like a whole family.

During the past century, people not only enjoyed the immense benefits from the development of the technology, at the same time,unfortunately also experienced the unprecedented hi-tech warfares and desasters. Especially the “911” affair reveals apparently that technology deviates the huminality once more.A famous chemistry ever said that the technology can either be used to do good for people or do harm. Once it occurs, it is difficult to control(paraphrased). Therefore, it is significantly crucial to pursue the balance between the technology and the morality to do more good for the whole human being.

Sum up, technology is a two-edged sword, which helps people realize their dreams at the same time destroys them,which brings people happiness at the same time disaster. Only under the guidence of rational thought and the tolerance can the condition of humanity be improved greatly.

qhywUID: 136716

顶一下，555555，每人理阿！

ken0405UID: 124994

No19好象是
114"Humanity has made little real progress over the past century or so. Technological innovations have taken place, but the overall condition of humanity is no better. War, violence, and poverty are still with us. Technology cannot change the condition of humanity."


Technology is beautiful which reveals the harmonious natural laws and explores the abstruse universe. It is undoubted that in past century technology brings people prodigious inventions and the titanic development of the material civilization. But the development of technology do（es） not make war, violence and poverty far away from us but more seriously threaten us. therefore, I fundamentally agree with the above assertion that technology cannot change the condition of humanity.

It is undeniable that the past century witnessed unprecedented technological progress. Even decades years ago, one（注意你的标点符号的写法，要空阁的） letter needed to spend mailman at least several days or even long time to mail. But now it only needs common people’s “one-click”, letter will reach the receiver imdeiately wherever the receiver is in Europe or in America.It is the result of the high develoment of communication technology. 这个好In 1900, the expected value of the whole world’s average life-span（life-expectancy吧） is only 45,now is over 66. the prolonged life-span depends on the development of medicin field and the improvement of people’s life conditions.（具体比路天花，和大一的aids还有sars） And from 20 century, the human firstly walk out of the earth and ramble the outspace.（具体说一下登月和mars好点） The experts predict that the next goal of exploring the mars will be realized in the near future. All these brilliant achievement show the great beneficial side of technology.好，这段。

However the other side that is negative side the technology brings to us can not be ingored. In fact, from one of the Chinese great invention---gun-power--- was used in war to Einstein’s modern theory---E=mc*c----was applied to invent the atom-bomb. The human at some extent have begun to destory himself step by step.（有点逻辑问题！！） The tech of clone is not so much an great feat as a absolute disaster. If there is a little improper usage, all the world is bound to fall into edge of ending. Today, almost all the country give the priority of the technological development to arm race. Some countries even put the mojority of their money on making weapons, warships or the research of military technology regardless of the the people’s suffering of poverty. Several unavoiding results are following as(1)the hasty decreased living conditions of the native people(2) the stagnation of the economy and culture(3) the frequent occurrence of turbulence. From this point, technology destroys the human beings and the relationship between them instead of brings them happiness and united like a whole family.好分析呀，怎么没信心呢。再多说一些，会好一些，比如现实存在性咯，现在存在的poverty，hungry和war，再有racial和sexual discriminations说明人们的人性没进步。

During the past century, people not only enjoyed the immense benefits from the development of the technology, at the same time,unfortunately also experienced the unprecedented hi-tech warfares and desasters. Especially the “911” affair reveals apparently that technology deviates the huminality once more.（这个怎么说，具体联系，科技导致terrorism？）A famous chemistry ever said that the technology can either be used to do good for people or do harm. Once it occurs, it is difficult to control(paraphrased). Therefore, it is significantly crucial to pursue the balance between the technology and the morality to do more good for the whole human being.（可以用环境的例子，人们变的越来月自私了，竭尽全力消耗自然。

Sum up, technology is a two-edged sword, which helps people realize their dreams at the same time destroys them,which brings people happiness at the same time disaster. Only under the guidence of rational thought and the tolerance can the condition of humanity be improved greatly.
继续加油，会更好的。
坚持ing

qhywUID: 136716

谢谢ken的鼓励和诸多思路的提示，我会再好好考虑的。
我最欠缺的是逻辑思维，其次就是无话可说，好致命的两点哦。这篇文章我是用google搜索了一下，才觉得能说得多写。离考试不远了，不知会不会有提高。
不过无论如何，坚持！！

shaohaoMTUID: 137980

建议看看乾坤强的。有点启发。

qhywUID: 136716

乾坤强是。。。？恕我孤陋寡闻，还忘指教
另外可否说说你得到的启发呢？：）谢谢

feier521UID: 109747

钱坤强的就是这个咯
阅读地址：
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=51342
NO.10

qhywUID: 136716

谢谢feier521!不知你看过了没?有些什么收获呢？

对了，你的寄托形象好好玩，每次我都不自觉地痴痴的看好久，同时也在想，feier521是那个大胆的GG呢，还是那个害羞的小MM?呵呵