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gambellUID: 122696

10"Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."

Questions about the rural areas and major cities have been going along whole of the national history. In modern society, more and more people are accumulating in cities from various backgrounds of quite different cultural traditions. By the case, some one believes that cultural traditions are primarily in cities and hence need the financial support from government to preserve them. Nevertheless, the truth today is different from what they held before.

I must firstly concede that major cities truly did possess some cultural traditions at former ages like Rome to Italy, Athens to Greece and Paris to France. However, since most modernizations and globalization take place in the major cities especially the economical and industrial centers, many of them have been changed to some homogenized and modern ways of living. Take the wedding for example, though many people in China and Japan do not have the belief of Catholicism, young couples in major citied are prefer to marry at church in the western style. The fact shows that cultural traditions are diminishing in big cities. Though the public has realized that traditions should be saved, the fighting field should not be cities any more.

On the other hand, rural areas still preserve most of the conventions because two reasons below. Firstly, cultural traditions are formed from experiences in working and living, the suspecting and explanations to natural mysterious phenomena, and then brought to cities by immigrates. So majority of them in cities are from the rural areas, such as folklores and religions. Beijing opera, one of the treasures of the world, is just from the rural villages around Beijing. Moreover, due to the less influences put to the suburban places from outside, people there still live in an old form as hundreds years ago, especially, in the developing countries. By the case, to protect the traditions, the financial support should be paid to the rural areas rather than cities.

Besides the analysis above, another factors need to be taken in account over the question of financial support is that in many developing countries, rural areas not only the places of cultural traditions but also always the home of poverty. Since most investments whether from civil firms or over-sea companies often go to the flourish cities, the lack of money has puzzled the countryside for a long time. If the financial support also went to major cities, living conditions of countries would surely go down to a worried level that may harm the whole stability of the society.

Though major cities in country used to accumulate amount of cultural traditions, rural areas now is the center of these conventions. For the preservation of traditions and to avoid breaking the balance of possessions of different places, government's financial support should go to the rural districts.
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blake_wangUID: 9871

1, cases are not so persuasive. require other relevant examples.
2, other factors may not be proper.

gambellUID: 122696

谢你看我的文章

例子这个问题着实费了我一番脑筋，由于在平时列提纲都不写例子，临场发挥的时候估计就看头脑里的第一反映，追求每段能有一个就够了，有时候回在重点段放两个，一个主一个次，而延伸的那一段就没有。

至于other proper factors您能说的详细写吗

blake_wangUID: 9871

1, the view that rurual areas which government should give more financial support are important to social stability seems irrelevant with the main idea of this essay. right? may be you have some reasons.

gambellUID: 122696

我是这么想的，financial support是果，preserve nation's culture是因，先从因来批驳就是我的第二段，再从过来指出在发展中国家，农村本来就要比城市贫困一些，如果在财政资助政策上还偏向城市，会导致贫富差距进一步加大而破坏国家的稳定性。在文章中没有表达清楚。
发现自己在写作文时就是个木瓜脑袋，哎

blake_wangUID: 9871

你的想法对，就是给出他因“农村比城市落后”，否定原结论的果“城市应该得到财政支持”。

但是倒数第二段应该指明：原题中提出了原因“城市保存了大量文化”，我们从“文化”的角度讲即

农村和城市应该得到同样的财政支持，但是，在他因上，也就是“农村比城市落后”的原因上，

农村更应该得到财政支持，也就否定了原结论。这样，这一段就不会与主题无关了。

不知道我的想法正确与否。