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ken0405UID: 124994

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老外最反感撒谎的
TELLING A LIE IS THE LAST THING I WOULD DO！
这是老外的信条

ken0405UID: 124994

Issue 3
It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social proble
ms than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations



The statement above is somewhat misleading in that it fails to understand th
e relation between long-term aims and current tasks as a whole system. Seemi
ngly incompatible as they are, existing problems and long-term research supp
lement each other in a sense. What we are supposed to do is to keep a delibe
rate balance between them rather than over-emphasize either side.两个都要。那你怎么说两个的关系？我的理解现在是为了survival，将来是为了flourish。

Existing social problems require urgent solutions since they occur immediate
ly in modern society and have direct influences on people's daily lives, suc
h as unemployment, pollution, social crimes, etc.. Consider, for example, wh
en a river is contaminated by heavy metals discharged from a electroplate fa
ctory nearby, all the habitants downstream are deprived of clean water resou
rce and suffer from the stench. What is important then is to allocate enough
money for wastewater treatment, otherwise not only water resource shortage
will be aggravated, but probably evoke dissatisfication among people and wea
kenness of social stability, on which the long-term projects are based. Ther
efore, successful solutions of current social problems are of great importan
ce to the welfare of the public and also the prerequisite for the accomplish
ment of blue print in the long run.

Nevertheless, over-consideration of the task at present（这个短语是不是有问题？？） causes short sight a
nd failure to take long views about sustainable development of the society a
s a whole .（过度好） Firstly, most immediate problems are usually superficial above t
he substantial mechanism.（什么意思？） Further study of the instance of river pollution a
bove tells us where the essential reason lies in. It is not owe to the heavy
metals, but the underdevelopment of productive process that contributes to
the incidence. Only long-term researches aiming at cleaner production can er
adicate the pollutants. （什么意思？我觉得你的英语写的不规范哟。找主卫兵我都找半天。郁闷ing）Secondly, some tasks that appears urgent may be of i
nsignificance if put into a whole system of view. With the rapid development
of economy in some developing countries, a great deal of luxury hotels and
villas are built to cater the hedonics of the wealthy. 这个例子没说好，怎么现在的需要没有意义呢/什么放到大尺度上看呢？？）These funds will cont
ribute nothing but to extravagant luxury which helps nothing but to hinder f
urther development of social economy and accelerating of the degeneration of
individuals.

Long-term projects play a decisive role in development of human society. It
is owed to painstaking researches in life sciences that we are free of the m
enace of many diseases incurable in the past. Though more time-consuming and
highly-costs than the expediences for the current problems, these studies a
re to find the most effective solutions for them.（怎么后面又出来个新东西？你这段没有鲜明的point不好）It is must be admitted that the two aspects are sometimes in conflict with e
ach other, especially under funds limitation. In some impoverished countries
in African, where people are threatened by famine and malaria, the necessit
ies of long-term projects such as infrastructure, high-tech research, etc.,
are much less than that of soluting the immediate problems. But it does not
mean that long-term researches make no sense in these countries.（你后面只分析了在非洲long term的问题没有意义（当当前需要和长久打算发生冲突时），后面轻轻的又来一句but，long-term researches不是没有意义的。为什么？？？？更本没有说服力！！！我都被你说的longterm没有意义的那点说服了。哥么，你的issue有问题！

Neglection of the existing social problems will lead our lives entangled and
frustrated; neglection of the long-term researches will confuse our aims fo
r the future. Thus, the two aspects must be reconciled soundly so as to keep
sustainable development of the society.
中间3段，1和2有点联系，3就完全脱钩了，这样不好，你的思绪没有连贯性的！！！！！

ken0405UID: 124994

大家不要再贴到这里了，我要歇歇了。
好象是改完了
也不记的了，呵呵，就算是改完了吧（glinish，对不起了，以后估计没机会再帮你看文章了）
改的我还真是头疼。
实话：
有些issue 写的很好
有些确实不成样子
对不住大家了。（gf说了考完了都不陪她是会生气的，我得先做个好bf先）
大家见凉了！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！

ken0405UID: 124994

我有个建议给大家：
大家可以2-3个人组成一个对子，相互修改作文的。
你门看happyman，feier，imong，彩虹，screw不是很好嘛。
什么？不会
不会不会学呀。

paisleyUID: 64183

哈，我看是个好主意啊。