关于OG上的一篇6分Issue作文

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OG page 355 关于：
“The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones”
的那篇6分作文，我怎么觉得写到“I do, however, greatly support the idea that the central focus of teaching should beto build on and encourage positive actions. However, the author’s all-encompasing
statement leaves too many negative possibilities for the classroom.” 就可以算是结束了，至于后面“Thus...”那一段我怎么觉得挺多余的。
而且后面ETS点评其实也只针对“I do..”之前段，“Thus..”段就没提到。
希望高手能对这篇满分作文发表些意见，大家来参详参详。
本人水平低，希望勿喷:lol