【Daily Writing作文特训小组】Heather的作文贴

Heather890704UID: 3167004

2011.11.1  TPO4

Contradicting to the three evidences of proving the dinosaurs are endotherms mentioned in the passage, the lecturer claims that scientists do not agree with this conclusion with further information.

First, it was warmer in the polar regions than it is now so that the dinosaurs are likely to survive there. In addition, when it turned to be cold, the dinosaurs could migrate to warmer places,like most of the reptiles did. Therefore, the dinosaurs fossils found in the polar regions presented in the passage is not a substantial reason to support the conclusion.

Furthermore, as the lecturer says, the leg position and movement is not necessary to indicate that dinosaurs are endotherms. Another explanation of this connection is that the legs underneath their body could support more weight. A dinosaur always has a large body which is the advantage of its survival. In this way, the same leg position as the endotherms does not strongly suggest that the dinosaurs are endotherms.

Last, it is true that the bones of endotherms usually contain haversian canals,which could guarantee the rapid body growth. However, growth rings, the structure indicates the period of not growing also exist in the dinosaurs' bones. When it becomes cool,the bones will grow slowly or even stop growing. Therefore, the structure shows that the dinosaurs' growth is slower,then stopped,then faster again which is totally different from the endotherms' constant growth speed even though the surroundings is cooler. Hence, the lecturer refutes the passage.

In sum, with further reasoning and evidences, the passage is seriously attacked by the lecturer.

Heather890704UID: 3167004

20090403NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teacher’s salaries.

In order to get the quality of education improved, people are trying lots of different means.In the heated argument, someone claims that the best way is to increase teachers' payment. To this idea,personally, I do not agree with because the reasons accounted for the bad situation in education is various.

First, the salaries could not necessarily guarantee the excellent state of our teachers to do work all the time. It is true that increased salaries is able to trigger the enthusiasm and the obligation of teachers,but it is just comtemporay since the increase is not endless. In addition, some of the teachers do complain about other factors rather than the low salaries.For example,one of my teachers used not to be involved in a harmonious relationship with coworkers,which played a negative role to her work.

Furthermore,salaries obviously does not elevate the sense of responsibility and the professional ability of our teachers. As far as I am concerned, the quality of education has much relationship with the teaching method and the teachers' attitude toward his or her students. Some teachers are not competent enough with the courses,which of course influences the receivers' understanding,others are rude to the teenagers so that the kids' curiosity and motivity are ruined.

Last, the students themselves are the reason of poor education instead of teachers.  It once occurred to me that one of my friends blamed his math teacher for his failure in the recent math exam. Honestly, I could not support him at all since he himself did not make much efforts before, playing the computer games till the midnight and sleeping in the class time. Mostly,it is our students' accountability to the horrible quality of education.After all,receiving knowledge as much as we can is the students' career.The teachers are just the assisters. Therefore, the solution of this problem has nothing to do with the teachers' salaries. The problem will not be dealt with until the students themselves recognize it.

In a nutshell,to increase the teacher's salaries does not seem to be the best way to the improvement of education since there exist other complicated factors of teachers and students. When each part of the factors adjust into a balance and brilliant condition, the education is about to turn better.

Heather890704UID: 3167004

2011.11.2  TPO5

Contradicting to the three theories of the functions of 'great houses',the famous Chaco structure mentioned in the passage,unfortunately,the lecturer refutes them with more convincing evidences as following.

First, it is true that the structures were built for residential,if you observed them from the outside. When you walk inside,as the lecturer explains, the conclusion may not be substantiated since there are few fire places for cooking. If the 'great house' could be accommodated with hundreds of people at the same time, there would have been lots of fire places. However,even in the largest room there, the place where seems to contain ten families, does not exist many fire places. Thus, the primary function of the architecture is was for residence claimed in the passage is weaken by the lecturer.

Furthermore, the explanation that 'great houses' were aimed to store maize is not supported by further evidences,either. The diggers have not found any trace of maize or maize containers. If the building was indeed for the conservation of the food,there should be some food remainders which could indicate this functional purpose for the offsprings.

Last, the passage claims that the houses' use was for the ceremonials with the evidences of myriads of broken pots ,but it is not necessarily founded because there are some other materials found on site. Some building materials,like sands,stones and construction tools show that it is definitely possible that the pots were just regular garbages on the construction sites. Therefore, the conclusion of the ceremonial use is strongly attacked by the lecturer.

With much more information offered by the lecturer, the passage is not sufficiently reasonable.

Heather890704UID: 3167004

2011.11.2     20100813NA Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? More and more people spend too much money on their pet (dogs, cats and others), although there are better uses for these money. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

How to utilize our money is under a heat discussion.Someone prefers spending it on practical stuffs like studying,while others enjoy to do some other things that trigger their interess to enrich their spare time such as caring a cat at home.Honestly,I do not agree with the statement that people spent too much money on caring their pets instead of investing for other better uses.

To begin with, pets are excellent companies with humans in this society where people are increasingly occupied by their own work. Have you ever consider how your old parents feel when they are almost ignored due to your busy work? Have you ever feel lonely when you stay with yourself after a exhausting working? Nowadays,keeping a dog at home will placate your loneness.The elders will not feel boring since they have another life to take care of and share fun and pain with.Obviously,pets have become one of our family members.When my little cat,named Guccio,got sick,I felt so worried that I could not wait to go to the doctor.In this way, spending much money on them is worthy.

Furthermore,making efforts to take care of the pets will contribute to reducing the aloofness in the society. I feel moved when I heard of a piece of news that a benign man has adopted tens of cats within eleven years which were all the ownerless,wandering in the streets in the frigid winters. The reason why the man acted like this is because he loves these poor and little guys who accompany with him and bring him a lot of fun. During this eleven years, the fee to care these animals has cost him around ten thousand yuan. As a matter of fact, I appreciate his performance since I do not expect people to become the ones who walked through modern buildings in the metropolitans without giving a glance at the helpless people or animals.

Last, I could not give an exact definition of 'better uses' since different people have various ideas about it. Is spending the money on wines a better choice? Is spending the fortunes on bribe a better choice? Although I admit that there exist some other uses,for example,dedicating it to the charitable funds,are valuable enough, different people have their own rights and judgments of the money's use.To me,the best function of money is to make life comfortable and harmonious.

In a nutshell, I disagree with the viewpoint that the pets have cost much more money which could be invested into other better uses since the pets are imitate to human beings and the promoter of the warmness in the society.'The better uses' is a conception that ones' understanding differs with that of others.

futureguitarUID: 2235107

11月1日，综合_revised by futureguitar
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改完了！

Heather890704UID: 3167004

35# futureguitar

Thank you very much for your work.
Your advices are always  thinking-provoking to me.
Thank you!

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36# sd1053774

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37# xiaoniao123

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In a nutshell, Idisagree with the viewpoint that the pets have cost much more moneywhich could be invested into other better uses since the pets areimitate to human beings and the promoter of the warmness in thesociety.'The better uses' is a conception that ones' understandingdiffers with that of others.


YourEnglish is so good that it is very hard for me to revise your essay. Ieven tried to memorize every sentence and learn the structure of it. Thanks!

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41# GreanLeaf

Thank you very much for your work~~

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Heather890704UID: 3167004

43# houyulin

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11.4 TOP7

The lecturer refutes with the three reasons for unwillingness of the US wood companies to pursue certifications mentioned in the passage and indicates that there are indeed some other facts to encourage the wood companies to do so as following.

First, the lecturer contends that consumers will not treat different products the same as the passage presented. The products with the eco-certification which refers to the confirmation of a independent and international organization are,of course, favorable for them and they will trust the advertises.

Furthermore, the reason that high cost of the ecocertified wood is the barrier for the consumers to purchase it is not convincing ,because a study shows that people are likely to choose the cheaper one if another is much more expensive,but if the distance is small, like just less than five percents,people will definitely value the ecologically friendly products. This statistics attack the second reason in the passage seriously.

Third, it is true that the certification probably plays a positive role to the products that are marketed abroad rather than the domestic ones.Nonetheless, the foreign companies are what we need to pay attention to. If the American wood companies capture the consumers who trust the certification slowly, the foreign ones will enter into the US market,thus the domestic economy is likely strike in the competition.

With further evidences and reasoning,the passage is strongly weakened by the lecturer.