<Daily Writing >---海风吹过的作文贴

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15# 海风吹过
改好了！

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11.17 第一次练综合 谢谢批改啊~

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海风，作文已改。加油！！

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11.18 综合 欢迎批改

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加油！

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海风，谢谢，加油！！

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11.21 独立+综合 欢迎批改啊~

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不好意思哦
我还不够上传附件的级别

只能这样的修改了，
11月10日 20101030NA Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past

As the world information explosion, we are exposed in the various environments. People in this updating society are becoming more educated than ever before. We may even haven’t discover ourselves are using more advanced ways in learning, which help us absorb knowledge effectively. Sometimes we may surprised in our learning ability is improved than before. These evidences prove that people now are easier to be educated than ever.

In modern society, learning is somewhat a science research field. In the past, once a student wanted to recite the vocabulary or a passage. They may recite many times for remembering, however, the effect is not always as well as the increased recite times. But now, on the contrary, there are immense scientific manners about how to learning quickly and effectively. For example, three months ago, I was totally shocked when I first got the TOEFL vocabulary because the amount of words in this book is so large than ever vocabulary book I had met that made me intensively depressed. If I used the normal way to recite the book, I know I cannot insist even a month and have quit the TOEFL now. Fortunately, when I was in deep depressed, I was occurred my English teacher who advised me to recite the vocabulary by his plan. He gave me a scientific agenda and required me to follow it. It is such an amazing plan that it only spent me three weeks to remember all the words. Thanks to the scientific learning agenda, I can insist on such long time.（这一段的例子很好，但是和主题有点偏，只是说了教育现在也是一门科学，但是不能够说明我们更用受到教育）

Furthermore, when it comes to the improving of technical product, we can absorb knowledge in（through） lots of ways such as Internet, television or cell phone. All of these, in other words, mean knowledge is filled with our surroundings（这一句很好）. So if we can take use of them, how a numerous knowledge can we learn. For instance, my grandfather is out of date just because he doesn’t know how to use the computer（这一句和下一句的逻辑关系是？或者合适的位置应该在下一句之后）. Since the information is updating now and then, accordingly, one don’t know how to use the advanced facilities is means loss of learning ability. The way my grandfather acquire information is through TV and newspaper. However, as we all know, information usually first appear at the internet and it is the place where huge information concentrate together compared with TV. That’s why we are more educated than the old generations.

Besides, the ability of learning is improving from one generation to the next. For example, as my generation, cell phone was popular in my teenage. （这一句的逻辑关系有点混乱）As time passed by, we were growing up as the time the cell phone's developing period. Admittedly, we are(你前面的时态是一般过去，这里是不是要保持一致，were) more familiar with the cell phone than my father's generation. It just likes cell evolves to human, our brain is evolving and becoming more and more clever.（呵呵，我也希望是这样的，但是即使是智商的上升，也不能意味着能够更好的受到教育吧） It is human’s common tendency. Predictably, we can imagine the next generation will be more educated than us.

To conclusion, in this modern society, people are easier to become educated than before. As we are more educated than our father’s generation, similarly, we should take use of it and work hard.

  继续加油哦 ！你们的字数写的都很多，看来我要多练习了，字数提不上去。

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11.22  独立+综合 欢迎指教  坚持真是件不容易的事啊~ 大家都加油啊！

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加油！共勉

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海风，独立写得不错哦，加油！！！

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11.23 综合  今天太忙了，就写一篇综合算了

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26# Fenjuan.Hu    vivian 谢谢你的鼓励和指点！

Fenjuan.HuUID: 3104413

海风，作文有进步哦。今天改迟了，不好意思哦，我后天就考了，祝福我吧。哈哈。
加油！！！

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11.24 独立+综合  最近写作感觉起色不是很大，花的时间多，语言还很单调，看来要阶段性总结一下了。 也希望大家多给我指导一下，谢谢！