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jiangze2008UID: 3079171

12月1号James修改 12.1独立写作王鹏.doc (33.5 KB, 下载次数: 6)

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pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO17的综合+12.2的独立，谢谢啊

翎公子UID: 2893747

32# pwang09 我修改完了，但是不知道怎么上传附件来着，求告知。如果说起来太麻烦，只好让你给个邮箱，我直接发邮件。

闫颜UID: 2788503

不好意思修改的比较晚~~~加油哈！

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO16的综合+12.3的独立，谢谢啊

pwang09UID: 3159708

33# 翎公子
谢谢啊，QQ237754178，加我吧，，，，

海风吹过UID: 3199801

35# pwang09    你好，12.3 综合按照楼主的布置不应该是TPO13吗？ 难道我弄错了？

海风吹过UID: 3199801

写得真好！ 加油！

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO15综合+12.5独立，，，

pwang09UID: 3159708

37# 海风吹过
抱歉，我是第二遍做TPO了，所以我从后面往前做的，不好意思啊，谢谢，加油啊！我18考试，你呢？加我QQ237754178.。。

xiaoniao123UID: 2541605

改好了！

逍遥游步0304UID: 3205202

我改完了，不过我不知道怎么上传附件~还请告知~~或者留个qq邮箱我传给你~~

coxUID: 2730480

抱歉，上传不了WORD 说没有边界。不知道什么意思。

12月5日100508NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to be more financially responsible when we are adults, we should learn how to manage money at young ages.

According to an older saying “Money is the key that open all doors”, therefore, the financially responsible plays significant role in the daily life. The earlier you administrate the money and the better you apply the financial acknowledge to the practical. The earlier you manage the money and the better you available utilize the money. The earlier you govern the money and the better job you maybe get in the future. Apparently, I approve that we should learn how the manage money at young ages in order to be more financially responsible.

First and foremost, we have learned
various kinds of financial acknowledge since (we) entered the primitive school as pupil. If we do not apply those acknowledge to the practical life, they are (would be 这应该是个虚拟语气吧) just some abstract, comprehensive and vague finance noun(s). Thereby, learn(ing how to)
administrate the money at young ages provide an opportunity to better perceive those knowledge.(以前见过的都是Topic sentence+分析+example, 这块分析挺好的，是不是考虑前面加个TS，你这样写效果也发很好，这个都待讨论) Take my little brother Shield for instance,(. L) ast Friday afternoon, when he came home, he was confused what the economy teacher discussed about the financial budget, profit forecast and cost management in the lecture. Then, my parents decided that my little brother (could be) in charge of financial plan for the next month. Shield carefully calculated the expense about which objects ought to buy, attempted to obtain a balance between the cost and the income and saved money as possible. By this method, shield can grasp not only the essential of the knowledge but also bring the interest for the family.

In addition, through the way of letting the children manage the money will make the children enhance the conscious of the money, cherish the money and efficiency (efficiently) utilize the money. To make my point more profound and comprehensive, I will take myself to account for this. As for me, come from countryside and my parents only earn meager income, thus, I deeply felt that money is precious. When I possess amount (large amount of) deposit, I will purchase the textbook instead of the teddy bear. When I manage money, I will buy the pencil rather than the snacks. When I control the money, I will buy the cheap and beautiful present for my mother not luxury jewelry. (这段就是TS 需要加1到2句的分析就更好了。)

Last but not least, manage (managing) money is an advanced technique which requires
(the brilliant person去掉吧) intellect analysis, dispassionate judgment and insight thought. All these abilities need to forage (用 cultivate
develop 更好点吧)since the young children. My best friend Vector who (is intelligent去掉吧)has a good sense to arrange his money and even given
(give) suggestions to other student(s)
on how to manage the money. When he is eleven own 3000 dollars after graduated, he bought the stocks at lower price and sold them in the high level, Not long after, he win(won)
his first million. Recently, a prestige invest company invent he to manage the funds. In a word, children manage the money at young ages not only develop their abilities but also offer a good chance to find a satisfied career.
开篇前后对应, 用词多样，结构不错，每段能多点分析就更好了。
稍微有点语法错误。 加油！

pwang09UID: 3159708

42# 逍遥游步0304 恩，好的，我的QQ237754178

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO1综合+12.6的独立，谢谢啦！