pwang09的作文

pwang09UID: 3159708

15# liang0603
我们一组啊？我没有看到分组，实在抱歉啊，马上弄，请问你改好的我的呢？加我QQ237754178，，，不好意思啊，，，

pwang09UID: 3159708

15# liang0603
弱弱的问一句，怎么上传word版本的附件啊？？

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO22综合In the lecture, the professor is disagree with the points that the author hold in the reading passage and give some evidence to support his views.

First of all, the professor admit that ethanol fuel true release carbon dioxide, but, the increase need of the ethanol fuel will require more and more plant which absorb the carbon dioxide in the atmosphere, finally, cool the environment. However, the author thought that the release of the carbon dioxide will cause the global warming more seriously.

In addition to, the professor said that the ethanol fuel can produce from other plants which not eat by the livestock, like the mallant(没有听出来具体的树名，蒙的，嘿嘿) plant. Thus, the food for the cows and chicken will not reduce. Instead of, the author believed that the consumer of the ethanol fuel will influence the plant which is the food of the animals lead to disappear.

Lastly, the professor maintained if the user of the ethanol will increase 3 times and the cost will decrease 40%, eventually, the price of the ethanol will be competitive with the gasoline and do not need any government subsidies. On contrast, the author insisted that due to the subsidies from the government make the price at the same with the gasoline, once the America government stop the funding support to the producers, the price will be greatly higher than before.

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO22综合，25的独立写作稍后上传，谢谢了啊！

pwang09UID: 3159708

补上昨天26号的独立写作，抱歉，晚了，，，

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO21的综合加28的独立写作，谢谢了啊！

闫颜UID: 2788503

我的也已经写完了，我本来写的TPO7，但是看到你写的是TPO21，我自己也写了一遍~~那你就随便挑一篇帮我改下吧！！谢谢了！！！这里是地址https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1278705&page=1&extra=

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO20综合+29的独立写作，谢谢啊！

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO19综合+30独立写作，谢谢啊

麦子kevinUID: 2517029

也是个人意见，共同进步，加油！

elevatorUID: 3111052

不好意思 改迟了。。。29号的作文

29独立写作 by elevator.doc (31.5 KB, 下载次数: 5)

2011-12-1 16:16:46 上传

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jiangze2008UID: 3079171

30号修改的，因为我不能上传，所以只好贴在这里了。不好意思。Itis apparently that perseverance play a significant role than other factors likepersonalities, characters and communication skills for the successful people. Itis apparently that intelligence play a vital role than other factors for thesuccessful people. It is apparently that positive attitude from the life playan important role than other factors for the successful people. 排比很有气势，但是有一个小问题，你用比较than，前面应该是more important。。。
Therefore,I cannot completely approve the statement that the personalities, charactersand communication skills are the most important factors for the successfulpeople. 清晰表达观点很直接，很好。

Tobegin with, obviously, during the process that we attempt to achieve thetarget, we语气有些不对，我们不一定会遇到困难的，在confront之前+may 比较好。
confrontenormous difficulties and failures, 这边用分号或者句号比较好。

if we are frail, we will never arrivethe success. Thus, the firm perseverance is the pivotal factor to success. Forinstance, if M. Faraday give up investigate the relation between electronic andthe magnetic after suffer thousand times failures, he will never found out thelaw of electromagnetic. 如果改成与后面一样，我们会生活在没有发电机的时代等什么就更好了。 If T. A. Edison abandon the effort to invent theincandescent lamp after countless lose experiment, we will still enduring theendless dark in the night. If M. Curie does not insist to explore theradioactivity element radium after encounter myriad refine from the coal, wewill never the electronic power from the nuclear station. In a word, theperseverance is more important than other factors for success.

Morethan that, considering, 这个是介词或者连词，可以做插入语吗？我不是很确定。if one personal cannot distinguish the atom with the molecular, hardlyimagine that he/she can share a pleasant conversation with physicist evenhe/she possess communication skills. Hence, intelligence is moreimportant than other factors such as interpersonal skills. As we all know thatC. F. Gauss have discovered a proper method to solve a mathematic problem whichis about continue sum from one to hundred when he in eight years old. As we allknow that the I.Q. of B. Gates who established the Microsoft Company is higherthan average about 160 scores. As we all know that Newton is so wisely thatobtain Doctor Certificate of physical when he was 22 older.

Last butnot the least, the optimistic and positive attitude toward the life is resemblethe knot in the fabric structure, which play a crucial affect in every person,in particular, the success people. There is a well-know legend about H. Kellerwho is the celebrated female writer in the 19 century in the United States. Despite/inspite of Keller lost her eye sight when she suffered tough headache as welllistening,没有看懂？ she realize that she still can learnadvanced knowledge, sing splendid musicand maintain optimistic manner ratherthan lose hopeless. Through her effort, she learned five foreign languages,published several books, and appealed theAmerican government to the感觉应该去掉 pay attention to thehandicapped.

全文的结构是非常好的，前后对应。但是后面论证的部分没有突出你的3个因素比题目中3个因素更重要的more，或者你直接写你说的这3个要素是最重要的，但是你没有，你只是说你的3个因素也很重要；虽然你这样写有一定的效果，但是并不是很充分的。这些也是我的个人观点，你还可以请教一些大神的。

jiangze2008UID: 3079171

30号独立写作王鹏.doc (29.5 KB, 下载次数: 1)

2011-12-1 19:08:39 上传

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真的不好意思，我现在才能传附件。

jiangze2008UID: 3079171

我直接在里面改了，文件名字没有换。

pwang09UID: 3159708

TPO18的综合加12.1的独立，谢谢啊