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yxy319UID: 3014935

2.13

laozhanguotoeflUID: 3246339

楼主果然细心啊，学习了

紫梦于UID: 3232379

17# laozhanguotoefl 呵呵~一起进步咯~

紫梦于UID: 3232379

2.15独立
第三次掐表了，今天时间要宽裕些，只是每次只够写两个理由会不会太少？
还有我的字数是不是太少了要上400才好些？
大家是肿么写的又快又好的呀？
When it comes to the team work, every team member is likely to have his own opinion. At this time, how to balance between different thoughts to gain success becomes to be a crucial problem. From my point of view, people who cannot accept criticism will not succeed in a team. The reasons are listed as follows.

First of all, it is unavoidable that people sometimes make mistakes, towards which people's attitude makes a large difference. If not accepting the criticism raised by their team fellows, they definitely lose a precious opportunity to review and reform themselves, which leads to gradual progress. What is worse is that they do tend to make a similar mistake once again. For instance, I as well as 3 other classmates do physical experiments together every time. Once one of them adopted an improper approach to process the statistics and we all found out that and told him the right way, but he refused to accept our suggestion. Unfortunately, he got an unsatisfactory score in our coming final exam because of that little mistake.   

In addition, a harmonious relationship is hard to be built if people refuse to accept others' criticism. Colleagues who criticize their team members have a positive motivation at most of the time, because they want their team to have a growth and finally to achieve their common goals. The fellow's ignorance of their criticism may have a negative effect on their enthusiasm to the team work and their emotion with other fellows, which may lead to a hostile atmosphere in the team and results in a total failure.

Nevertheless, some criticism is probably biased and we have an absolute right to stick to our own sentiments, but there is no disadvantage for us to ask for others' ideas. For those who can't hear any opposite opinions, without help from others, only a tragical end is looking forward to them.

yxy319UID: 3014935

已改

楼主写的很不错了~ 结构清楚 观点明确~
有个问题想和楼主讨论：是不是要直接提出观点呢？我看楼主文章很多地方是用的让步，虽然意思大家都清楚，是不是需要明确提出论点呢？

佐左927UID: 3229248

这是我的2.15 独立
不好意思，有点晚。

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1333921&extra=

佐左927UID: 3229248

When it comes to the（这个我也不确定要不要加） team work, every team member is likely to have his own opinion. At this time, how to balance between（不要between）different thoughts to gain success becomes to be a crucial problem. From my point of view, people who cannot accept criticism will not succeed in a team. The reasons are listed as follows.

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First of all, it is unavoidable that people sometimes make mistakes, towards which people's attitude makes a large difference. If not accepting the criticism raised by their team fellows, they would(因为前面用了if，虚拟语气)definitely lose a precious opportunity to review and reform themselves, which leads to gradual progress. What is worse is that they do tend to make a similar mistake once again. For instance, I as well as 3 other classmates do physical experiments together every time. Once one of them adopted an improper approach to process the statistics and we all found out that and told him the right way, but he refused to accept our suggestion. Unfortunately, he got an unsatisfactory score in our coming final exam because of that little mistake.      p) |1 v$ W/ o8 Q% t/ L4 L/ y

In addition, a harmonious relationship is (would be)hard to be built if (同上，虚拟语气)people refuse to accept others' criticism. Colleagues who criticize their team members have a positive motivation at most of the time, because they want their team to have a growth and finally to achieve their common goals. The fellow's ignorance of their criticism may have a negative effect on their enthusiasm to the team work and their emotion(个人觉得应该用affection更贴切一些) with other fellows, which may lead to a hostile atmosphere in the team and results in a total failure. ( h! U" z- d8 m7 k5 E0 w2 a4 X2

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Nevertheless, some criticism is probably biased and we have an absolute right to stick to our own sentiments, but there is no disadvantage for us to ask for others' ideas. For those who can't hear any opposite opinions, without help from others, only a tragical end（ending） is looking forward to them.

紫梦于UID: 3232379

2月18日独立

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下垂眼之兔UID: 3249047

2月18日 100821NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? We should never be impolite to another person.  

It is common sense that being polite to others is a basic moral principle to all human beings.[url=] Thus under no circumstances shall we be impolite to another person or we may end up in living in a severe environment with no friend at all.[/url][LU1]

First of all, Being rude to others may hurt them to the extent that it eventually results in their indifference. It is inevitable that we are able to avoid difficulties for a life time,（楼主你想说的是我们能够有能力去避免difficulty么？） according to which assistance from other people is undoubtedly necessary, especially in emergency. However, if we are impolite to our friends even only once, it is likely to leave a bad impression on them,[url=] resulted from which they tend to be unwilling to do us a favor[/url][LU2] . In the end, it costs us a longer time to overcome difficulties alone, not to mention a failure sometimes. 我觉得改为failures会好一点，而且可以去掉sometimes

In addition, politeness is an irreplaceable premise of a harmonious environment in the society. Can you imagine a world that all smiles are extinct, all warm hugs disappear and there are only rudeness and cold faces instead?（试一下  only left？） What a hell it is! There is a vivid example of my own. Because of transferring to another primary school, I was not familiar with my new classmates. When some of them talked to me friendly, I just ran away due to shyness. Owing to this impolite behavior, they became to consider that I was an awkward girl and nobody had an desire to talk to me, let alone play with me.（这里是想说没有人跟我说话 和我玩么？let alone play with me 还是想说留下寂寞与我作伴。） It was after my great effort to explain myself that I started to be accepted by my class.

Nevertheless, there is always somebody who does not have a proper understanding of the situation and their behavior may make us upset. Under that situation, we can tell him directly which part of his behavior makes me sad instead of being impolite. Let us take action to being polite, which greatly promote to the development of a more friendly society.



请教一下，我总是只想出两个点肿么办。。。？这个字数够吗？囧。。。

例子可以用一些句子给人一些，我还有很多例子可以说但是没说完得感觉。比如：类似这样的例子数不胜数。
字数是332，我们老师说高分作文最好超过400 ，而且基本满分都是会超400的。一起加油吧！多写一定可以的，兔子我写的比紫同学烂多了呢，但是大家一起努力吧！在更改技巧我要向你学习！

[LU1]倒装句式不错呢！上来第一段就表明了自己的观点



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2.18已改完

紫梦于UID: 3232379

2.20 独立

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2.20  已改

紫梦于UID: 3232379

2.21独立+综合

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已改
我的综合哦