求改下作文。。

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Q:
Family or friends?The most important influence on youngadults.


W:
When I was a junior school student, one ofmy classmates named Jerry became my best friend. Since the summer of 13 yearsold, we had almost studied and played for three years. Before I met him, I hadbeen sick about math and never been on the playground for more than 1 hour. Itis Jerry who changed me. He teached me how to play basketball and showed me mathis full of fun.


If you have never had such experiences, youwould never know how much influence a friend could bring you.


During the time of a young adult, thelongest period is that friends accompanied with. Based on that, what friendsare watching, talking about or reading is most visible for young adults. Imageit: all friends of a college student wear jeans and white shirt. On that view,the prevalence of such clothes definitely capture the eye balls of thatstudent. “That is the way!” He or she might whisper. No one can deny that,among young people, their behaviors have crucial influence on each other. Thelonger friendship you have, the more interaction occur.


The reason that why young adults prefer tostay with friends results from identical hobbies and similar characters that,in my opinion, are elementary in many factors. I would love to have a discussionon which team may win the final champion of NBA with my friends of myclassmates who also are crazy over basketball instand of my parents with few knowledgeabout Kobe Bryant. Many students, as my friends and me, share their views onsomething they have interest in with friends. The phenomenon people tend totalk more with friends leads to huge effects from friends on young adults.


By no means can we ignore that the family shapemind of young adults in every aspects of custom, religions and etc. Our parentsmay be our spirit leaders and life teachers through a couple of years.
However, friends, especially during theyoung age, have been exchanged most of thoughts with one to another. Thisspecial period is not only significant, but also has deeply influenced a lot tothe young adults.


In final analysis, young adults prefer tocommunicate more with friends and, almost everyday, study or work together. Asa matter of fact, friends are the most important influence on young adults.

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自己顶。。。。。

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跪求改作文啊 哪怕提点意见。。拜托各位了