求大神修改作文

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还有两个星期考试了。作文还是超担心。。求修改。。。THX
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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.



Nowadays, increasing number of children is believed to be lacking of responsibility and selfish in society. Thus, the solution to this stringent problem is of discussion. Some critics point out that parenting need to play important role to teach children how to be good members of society while others think that schooling is the best methodology.

On one hand, advocators of parenting hold the view that parents should pay more attention on how to help their children adjust to the society. Specifically, family is the initial teacher of children, in other words, parents have obligation to build positive sample and make their children to tell the different between black and white. Since children always consider parents are heroes, parenting will affect their social values, which also make influence to the future. Next, there are more time children spend in home rather than school, parents are able to teach children efficiently through different aspects in daily life. For instant, when watching TV show, synthesizing the show and theory of social values can best represent how to be a qualify member of society.

However, others believe the schooling is more reliable in teaching, compared to domestic upbringing. Teachers in the school can set a new lesson for student to learn and to build positive personality. As far as I am concerned, there is limited effect in this purely theories’ methodology. The lesson will become a burden for student to learn such boring theory.

Therefore, I agreed that parents have responsibility to teach children how to earn respect from the society. Meanwhile, schooling should set lesson for both children and parents relatively.

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2# bqiana   谢谢~有什么明显的缺点吗？

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