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我知道这篇写得字数比较多，不过今天从早到晚满课，十节课伤不起啊，先不改了~~~明天就闲了，好好研究OG

3月19日 101211 do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People think it is more enjoyable to work three days a week for long time than work five days a week for shorter time.
I do not agree that it is more enjoyalbe to work three days a week for a  long time than work fives days a week for a short time. In my point of view, which pattern is better depends on the type of work and the worker's preference.
If the period of work is long and it is better to do it in a continuous way, the former pattern will be a more effictive way to fulfill the work.In the contrast, if the work can be spiltted into several stages,and they are not closely connected to each other, it's more adviceble to choose the later pattern.Take doctors as an example, a surgeon may find himself more confortable to work threes days a week for a long time. It takes a lot of time from preparation to have the operation. Furthermore, the whole process is inseparable, and it needs a single surgeon to have an eye on the entire procedure. If the hospital asked the surgeon to work five days for short time, not only could not the operation be well-donel, but also the doctor would feel tired, which may cause portentail faults on the next operarions. However, when it comes to dentists, the time period he/she needs for one patient is not very long, the later may be a better choice. If the clinic opened only three days a week, patients would suffer.
In addition to the nature of the work, the workers' appetite also matters.A person who like leisurely way of living and who is adversed to pressure will certainly in favor of working every day with little assignment. Others who is long for a long span of time to focus on one's hobby may simle on the later. But keep in mind that working fewer days a week for a long time for the purpose of more private time for fun relys on your energy. If a person is easily tired, this kind of life will be awesome in that the chances for he/ she  to make mistakes when working are bigger than when he/she works five days for a short time a week.
To sum up, we should take other factors in to account, such as the type of the work and the wokers' preference when deciding which one is better.
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工作周期较长的，连续性较强的工作在第一种情况下会被完成的更好。
相反，工作连续不大，但强度很大的，分多天短期工作更好。
比如，外科手术医生，一周工作三天，每次时间较长比较合适。因为一个手术从准备到操作到最终实施，是个时间很长的过程，并且不可能被分开，需要有一个医生持续完成。
但如果是内科医生的话，看一个病人的时间不会很长，适合第二种。如果让他一天工作很多小时的话，会降低效果，使后面病人得不到很好的诊断。
喜欢悠闲、压力不是很大的生活的人，可能会更倾向于每天有一些活，但工作量不是很大的生活。这样的人更适合第二种。
喜欢有整段自由支配时间，去做一些除工作以外的兴趣爱好的人，会更喜欢第一种。但是，这是在这个人精力充沛的前提下的，否则可能会精力不支，工作的时候效率很低，造成失误。

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3月19日 101211 do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People think it is more enjoyable to work three days a week for long time than work five days a week for shorter time. I do not agree that it is more enjoyalbe （enjoyable）to work three days a week for a  long time than work fives days a week for a short time（建议把问题换一种说法说比较好）. In my point of view, which pattern is better depends on the type of work and the worker's preference.$ m* V3 Y" g" C1 i If the period of work is long and it is better to do it in a continuous way, the former pattern will be a more effictive（effective） way to fulfill the work.In the（去掉） contrast, if the work can be spiltted into several stages,and they are not closely connected to each other, it's more adviceble（advisable） to choose the later pattern.Take doctors as an example, a surgeon may find himself more confortable（comfortable） to work three days a week for a long time. It takes a lot of time from preparation to have the operation. Furthermore, the whole process is inseparable, and it needs a single surgeon to have an eye on the entire procedure. If the hospital asked the surgeon to work five days for short time, not only the operation could not be well-done， but also the doctor would feel tired, which may cause portentail（potential） faults on the next operarions（operation）. However, when it comes to dentists, the time period he/she needs for one patient is not very long, the later may be a better choice. If the clinic opened only three days a week, patients would suffer（说一下suffer什么）. ' U* U/ ?4 k& O- _5 s In addition to the nature of the work, the workers' appetite also matters.A person who like leisurely way of living and who is adversed to pressure will certainly in favor of working every day with little assignment. Others who is（are） long for a long span of time to focus on one's hobby may simle（smile） on the later. But keep in mind that working fewer days a week for a long time for the purpose of more private time for fun relys on your energy. If a person is easily tired, this kind of life will be awesome（terrible） in that the chances for he/ she  to make mistakes when working are bigger than when he/she works（working） five days for a short time a week. To sum up, we should take other factors in to account, such as the type of the work and the wokers' preference when deciding which one is better.: J' |4 `8 T# V# R + ^$ z1 f$ Y( w- F& M7 \) L 恩，作者拼写错误很多啊，建议先用word纠错一下。 整体思路是清晰的，句子的表达有的有些中式，语法问题的话我的水平也没能说的...就是觉得有些句子读上去不顺口，有的还可以换些更准确的表达。

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4# 潇湘锁铃儿 3月22日 110815NA One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork.Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you forhelp or to find a professinal tutor for help. Include reasons and details to inyour response.


No one knows everything and nobody cansolve every problem. So it's nature that we may have some problems with theschoolwork. When this happens, who are（is？觉得是is） better to turnto for help? Your friends or a professional tutor?
Personally, I could recommend my friend todiscuss the problem with me. By discussing the schoolwork, not only myclassmate can have his/her problem solved, but also can I understand the pointbetter. Whether you can explain something clearly and logically or not (这里的or not 可不可以省了呀？留着，挺好的)is an indicator of whether you have mastered the knowledge（有没有什么其他词呀？我就只会knowledge 用得我都烦了 learning or erudition ,不过实在不行就换种表达.）. Take myself as an example, last week I did my homework on realanalysis, by attempting at (应该是什么介词呀？attempt 是及物没介词的)different ways, I finally proved the problem. I thought Iunderstood it, however, when my roommate asked me about it later, it turned outthat I did not understand it totally. I figured out the way to prove theproblem, but I, in fact, do not recognize why we can do it in that way.

Admittedly, while a professional tutor canalways provide you with a 'correct' answer in a certain degree, seeking helpfrom your classmates on schoolwork may sometime resulted result in a wrong one.
However, in my point of view, it is not theanswer that matters, but the process to attain. By trying on my own and thendiscussing with my classmates, I can find out more mistakes and problems. Forinstance, last week my friend stuck with her assignments of physics, so wediscussed the questions and we
have (略去，变成we almost，感觉现在完成时用不必用在这)almost worked it out.However, both of us forgot to multiply the gravitational acceleration thistime. This can be prevented if we have a tutor to guide us. But having thecorrect answer is not the aim of doing school work. Because we were given theright answer straightly, we did not see the importance of the gravitationalacceleration. Then in that case, we may not take it seriously and would makethe same mistake easily next time.
To sum up, I recommend asking a friend forhelp when having problems on schoolwork in that it can give both you and yourfriend an improvement. Moreover, it can reveal potential mistakes ormisunderstandings of the knowledge which may be overlooked if you find aprofessional tutor.

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已改，写得很棒，让人眼亮 10# 潇湘锁铃儿

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3.28独立已改，写的很好啊。没有改多少，见谅啊

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谢谢前面各位大虾的修改，从4月开始，我争取认认真真地修改大家的作文~
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原来昨天我们是一组的...没来改见谅哈..我写完自己的就来改..