issue157，请大家指正！

feier521UID: 109747

157 "There is no such thing as purely objective observation. All observation is subjective; it is always guided by the observer's expectations or desires." 4

I concede that all observation to some extent is subjective; and this subjectivity is not only directed by the observer's expectations or desires but also guided by people's nature--subjective individuals. Although observations can not escape this kind of subjectivity, observers must follow rigid, objective and scientific observation rules.

Admittedly, all observations are subjective in some sense in that observers, as carriers and operators of these observations, are subjective beings with subjective feelings, thoughts and ideas. This self-evident truth determines that the whole process of observation is inevitably subjective. For instance, When initiating an item of observation project, the first and foremost job for researchers is to study the objects by using of their sensitive organs such as eyes, ears, hands, etc., the first impression of the objects, therefore, falls into the subjective category. Then they start to do some experiments and collect reasonable and reliable data and filter those useless and even mendacious ones by means of their experience and even subjective judgment. Even those seasoned researchers will gather different data in the same observing process. And the last proceeding is to arrive at the observation results. This process is also involved in people's subjective judgment. The following example can aptly demonstrate this point: when observing a tree, what artists see is its green color and its winding stems and boughs, what botanists see is its powerful vitality, while in the architects’ eyes, whether or not it is fitful for construction is their sole concern. As illustrated above, we can safely draw a conclusion that all observations unavoidably turn out to be subjective.

From the foregoing analysis, we can see this subjectivity is the result of people's subjective consciousness. This subjectivity is somewhat unavoidable, but if observations are guided by the observer's expectations and desires, especially for those selfish ones, the observation will necessarily turn out to be subjective. For instance, some irresponsible scientists and researchers lacks the responsibilities to abide by the scientific rules and regulations when they make observations, they may purposely falsify the experimental data to draw deceitful results for the purpose of their expectations or desires for wealth and popularity. It is true that they may gain what they expected at sight; however, these experimental results can not experience the scrutiny of their peers, and the successes and popularity of these so-called observers are only transient, and ultimately they will suffer from the oblivion of the academia and even the scoff of the public.

Then how to make observations as reliable and convincing as possible? All scientists and observers should realize their responsibilities for scientific inquiry and on no account should scientific researches and observations be recklessly carried out. What they do is to strictly obey scientific and objective observation rules. This is to say, they should collect and record the experimental data as precisely as possible, and draw the results as reasonable as possible. Never can they fake observation data and falsify the results. Besides, after observations, observers should unceasingly test the reliability of these results, and these results should also weather the repetitive examination of other scientists and observers. Only doing this can observations be authentic and effective ones.（上面两段说观察都是主观的，但是这里说观察者遵循科学标准，努力使自己的观察可靠，真实（怎么好像转到客观了）。不知道这里是不是和前面paradox啊？晕了…请大家指点迷津。）

In conclusion, it is inevitable that all observations are subjective to some extent because of observers' subjective nature, and their expectations and desires, especially for those egoistic goals.  However, they should follow the scientific rules to make their observations as reliable as possible.

hehuiUID: 134334

提一个很个人的观点:

我感觉你的这篇主要问题是结构没有安排好

1.首段提出的观点应为全文总领,而观点句中如果有转折出现,那肯定应该是转折后的观点更重要,应占更大篇幅.而你的文章中恰恰前边太仔细,倒数第二段又太潦草.
2.第三段你做了个过度,这个意识很好,但你用了一种很冗长的办法,不如直接用个although把前两句合并,这样段主题就更突出了

以上评论很个人,仅供参考.

bobozeroUID: 130435

最初由 hehui 发布
[B]提一个很个人的观点:

我感觉你的这篇主要问题是结构没有安排好

1.首段提出的观点应为全文总领,而观点句中如果有转折出现,那肯定应该是转折后的观点更重要,应占更大篇..

以下省略...... [/B]

我同意hehui的意见，另外我觉得你的文章段太长了，这样容易引起结构混乱。我觉得象第二段就完全可以再分一下。
不过你的句子写得比我好多了，呵呵，学习学习。

feier521UID: 109747

insightful and incisive eyes!

1.首段提出的观点应为全文总领,而观点句中如果有转折出现,那肯定应该是转折后的观点更重要,应占更大篇幅.而你的文章中恰恰前边太仔细,倒数第二段又太潦草.

说的好！我主次不分！！

2.第三段你做了个过度,这个意识很好,但你用了一种很冗长的办法,不如直接用个although把前两句合并,这样段主题就更突出了

其实没有必要重复第二段的观点的，一笔带过即可，我罗索了。

真诚的谢谢你！！

feier521UID: 109747

我同意hehui的意见，另外我觉得你的文章段太长了，这样容易引起结构混乱。我觉得象第二段就完全可以再分一下。不过你的句子写得比我好多了，呵呵，学习学习。

考试的时候肯定写不那么长的！改的时候，加了不少内容，也润色了一下了句子。谢谢你！

realturtleUID: 69047

感觉你主要说观察事物是主观的，第二段写因为感觉主观，第三段写因为人的意愿使之主观，然后转折说到科学标准的客观性。
那么这个观察包不包括处理观察结果呢？实际上你的第三段论证其实是就处理结果应该以客观科学的态度而言，那么这样推起来，我总感觉第二段写感觉一定是主观的就有点和下面矛盾。
因为主观是不是也包括态度呢？既然人的意愿，想改实验结果是态度，那么科学客观的处理也是态度，那么第二段论证和第三段论证的关系又该如何处理，和第一段论述的关系呢？
不知道我说清楚了没有
我也越说越糊涂了^_^

feier521UID: 109747

谢谢realturtle 的建议！
这篇文章写的不好，自己都把自己论证糊涂了。^_^
可见，清晰的思路是很重要的！