616考，还不知道作文什么水平，希望前辈给指导一下，很急，谢谢啊

ligongcaofei123UID: 3309636

                                                                           Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
I agree with the author’s claim that many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because laws cannot change what is in people’s hearts or minds. Well-intended as the legal system is with instructions and punishments, it cannot solve some special aspects of our society for it is difficult to define everything that deserves punishment and it may also bring side effects.
From one aspect, legal system cannot solve the disharmony among people. We know the main purpose of laws is to regulate people’s behavior in order for the society to function well. Laws only deal with fierce disputes which bring great loss or harm to people. However, if things do not influence the regular lives of its citizens seriously, laws do not inference with them. For example, if a person has a quarrel with his neighbor, laws do not act for it is both inconvenient and unnecessary to punish someone when there are so many other big issues to settle in the whole country. Imagine you do not like a person for he or she haggles over every ounce and or is fond of making fun of others, can you turn to the laws to punish him?
From another aspect, different regions have different cultures, which makes it difficult for laws to determine right or wrong for people with different beliefs. Once an American president visited Thailand and greeted the queen with a hug, while it was forbidden to hug the queen there although the president intended to show politeness and passion. If we encounter situations like that, can laws appropriately solve the problems?
In addition, there are so many countries around the world and the criterions of crimes are dissimilar. It is likely that someone commits a crime in other countries while that is reasonable in his own country. We do have a universal legal system till now, which blocks the normal functions when there are international disputes.
In summary, present legal system has some deficiencies that make many problems cannot be solved properly and there are some aspects that are unrealistic to deal with such as religion issues. We must combine laws, morality and cultures together to live in a more harmonious society.

loly_heUID: 3242491

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I agree with the author’s claim that many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because laws cannot change what is in people’s hearts or minds. Well-intended as the legal system is with instructions and punishments, it still cannot solve some special aspects of our society, for it is difficult to define everything that deserves punishment and it may also bring side effects.

From one aspect, legal system cannot solve the problem of disharmony among people. We know that the main purpose of laws is to regulate people’s behavior in order for(in oerder for 好像有点奇怪） the society to function well. Laws only deal with fierce disputes which bring great loss or harm to people. However, if things do not influence the regular lives of its citizens seriously, laws do not inference with them. For example, if a person has a quarrel with his neighbor, laws do not act for it is both inconvenient and unnecessary to punish someone, when there are so many other big(serious) issues to settle in the whole country. Imagine you do not like a person for he or she haggles over every ounce and（and去掉） or is fond of making fun of others, can you turn to the laws to punish him? 例子比较弱，讨价还价和开玩笑都不足以涉及社会问题，也不是一定要解决的问题

From another aspect, different regions have different cultures, which makes it difficult for laws to determine right or wrong for people with different beliefs. Once an American president visited Thailand and greeted the queen with a hug, while it was forbidden to hug the queen there although the president intended to show politeness and passion. If we encounter situations like that, can laws appropriately solve the problems? 这个例子也不是一个社会问题，而且没有详述。

In addition, there are so many countries around the world and the criterions of crimes are dissimilar. It is likely that someone commits a crime in other countries while that is reasonable in his own country. We do have a universal legal system till now, which blocks the normal functions when there are international disputes. 这一段的主题跟上一段有重复。

In summary, present legal system has some deficiencies that make many problems cannot be solved properly and there are some aspects that are unrealistic to deal with such as religion issues. We must combine laws, morality and cultures together to live in a more harmonious society.

总的来说，观点，字数和论据描述都不太够，建议多看一下坛子里别人的文章，模仿一下。

ligongcaofei123UID: 3309636

2# loly_he
嗯，确实真没例子可写啊，现在一看倒数二三段也确实重复，谢谢啦，再请问一下我那想些语言水平低吗？

loly_heUID: 3242491

3# ligongcaofei123
语言水平一般吧，不是很地道，但其实没有其他问题重要