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lxw0616UID: 144787

16.Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary ligeare entirely harmless, in fact, they actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.


Modern technology is seductive: the global networks transparently transiting megabytes of information in fractions of a second; client/server software supporting fabulous real-time multimedia presentations on PC and WAC workstations; effortless visits to the virtual reality world. As a result, people become more and more dependent on the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life brought by modern technology and industry in the meantime  lose the individual strength and independence in terms of physical and psychic energy.


When it comes to physical independence, it seems humanity has undergone a transformation from the ancient time to today. In the man’s early days, physical independence is the crucial factor that leads human being to outgrow its anthropoid long pants. For the sake of walking independently, they strived to exercise their limbs, let alone to depend on other crutches. The vision is the complete contrary when we step to the modern civilization,  when our life is equipped with a variety of technological means. It might not be imagined that what the image will look like without , for instance, automobiles and air-conditioners in modern life. When people have be accustomed to drive cars wherever they go, including commuting, shoping and spending a holiday, they can not bear too much walking now and even a little walk will render them tired. In virtue of this, some prophet predicts that human beings will someday forget how to go on foot and human society will devolve into the primitive one. Likewise, air-conditioner ,as  another means people rely on in excess, nearly cause people to lose the capability of sweat to eliminate heat when they can not live through the summer in the absence of air-conditioners. As a result .people’s independence for survival, and adaptability to the nature is bereaved .


What's more, other than the physical dependence on the luxurious means, people have developed ever-growing lie to the technological media-the internet as the vent of emotion. Every time they feel frustrated or bored, they tend to turn to the internet for escape or comfort instead facing up to the problem and solving it by themselves. In fact , the internet has served as a diversion ,distracting people from the actual methods of eliminating the inner emotion  when they plunge into the negative moods. As they become more and more attaching to the internet,  they feel a lack for something  when they fail to go to the internet  a day. Thereby the spiritual independence  stealthily and slowly fades away.

Meanwhile, when human needs are satiated by modern technology, the newly generated need play the role to stimulate new production of technology. Thus, human’s dependence for technology is further strengthened.

In sum, albeit that modern technology brings us with many conveniences and luxuries is unalterable fact, people trade off the physical and psychical independence. To some extent , people will not know how to live if one day all the technology means disappear and in that case human being would be extinct since unlike our ancients we are short of the  basic surviving skills to fight with other creatures and inclement conditions of nature. It is for this reason that  we must from  now on pay attention to maintain and reconstruct our independence when enjoying convenient and comfortable lives.

dreamflyerUID: 21967

大概一看，你写的太长了，，，
不要苛求多少字，限时写的时候先把脉络写好。
写到倒数第二段，一看时间不够了，赶快下去做个结尾。然后回头来补这一段。
结构完整逻辑合理叙述清楚最重要。字数是次要的。

hehuiUID: 134334

你的文章写的还不错呀：）
时间不够的问题嘛有很多种，看你的问题在哪里：
1.思路：拿到题目觉得没有余地可以展开
办法：思路问题说到底与结构有关，根据题目范畴的不同，建立自己的structures,比如说，科技类，可以按这个思路走：科技无疑给人带来了便利-但也带来新问题-但最终科技是为人服务的，所以关键在于人怎么运用科技。 这个观点在任何科技文章都是可以依题发挥的。这样你起码就有三个支持段了，每段只要写100左右，长度就没问题。

当然我这个例子是临时想的，也许不合你用，但我的意思是你一定要把某个领域的问题汇总，然后通透地想一下，这样固定下自己的路线，就不会拿到题目没任何思路了。

2.词汇：总是追求在句中用复杂的词汇，但又不熟，所以想词用很长时间。
办法：一样是按范畴把题目分类，然后看许多这个领域的文章，把该领域常用到的好词汇总。

坦白讲，如果你是这个问题，那现在已经来不及了，尽量用你熟悉的词把。当然也有写取巧的办法，比如  如何把一个短形容词变复杂呢？取同义加词缀：absurd（荒谬的）-同义 rational-加前缀表反义：irrational(这个看上去就复杂写了）。  

以上为个人意见，说的不对的请包含：P

hehuiUID: 134334

“取同义加词缀：absurd（荒谬的）-同义 rational-加前缀表反义”


大晚上的，自己都绕进去了，应该是取一个简单的反义，再加反义词缀。。。。天那，忘了我说的把，这个我以前用过，但都不是写作文的时候，而是背单词的时候。。。。看来不太好哦......：P

lxw0616UID: 144787

谢谢dreamflyer 和hehui的指点！
hehui， 你说要自己总结某个领域的问题，我觉得教育和科技还好，但是行为类的好像每道题都需要另外想想。这样的话， 考试时构思是不是会耽误很多时间。 在下面写的时候应该跟自己规定多长时间内完成阿？