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TITLE: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Does advice given by older people more valuable than from people your age?

I agree with that statement, which means the advice from older people will actually be more favorable for us than that from contemporary to do something. They guide us to make the right choices without so much pain felt in the process of battles. But the guys with the same age as we are who don’t have so much experience and wise to help us to come over difficult so easily.
In fact, we become puzzle and feel helpless when we come across tough problems and there is nobody could give us a hand. However, we will be confidence and brave to make a choice and act it out if there is an older man standing besides us. Because older people, in our minds, equal wise people and people with abundant experience. Experience is so important that we can find out the right way to solve the problems which we have encountered and that save our time. A week ago, we were stuck by a problem which immediately stopped experiments of our team and felt confuse and anxious. Everyone of our team had tried a lot to solve the problem and keep the experiments running for two days, but no good news could be heard. Then our teacher gave us an advice about the process of experiments, and the problem was disappeared within one hour.
Someone may take an opinion that young guys have many advantages to work with us and improve us such as easily communication, strongly passion, highly innovation. But we can learn that these characteristics are also existed in the older people. My teacher a 50 years old man can set a good example. He is a very kind man, often discuss problems with us, share new ideas, encourage us to try new ways to solve problem, and sometimes argue with us for different opinions. We all love him very much.
To make a conclusion, I think the older people can do more than the young guys to give some advices and help us.

第一次写作文，还请大家多多提建议！谢谢了！

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下一个交作业地出现就我们三人一组老~

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I agree with that statement, which means the advice from older people will actually be more favorable for us than that from contemporary to do something. They guide us to make the right choices without so much pain felt in the process of battles.But the guys with the same age as we are who don’t have so much experience and wise to help us to come over difficult so easily??.$ \% s( @0 A. w8 S
In fact, we become puzzle and feel helpless when we come across tough problems and there is nobody could give us a hand.?? However, we will be confidence and brave to make a choice and act it out if there is an older man standing besides us.?? Because older people, in our minds, equal wise people and people with abundant experience. Experience is so important that we can find out the right way to solve the problems which we have encountered and that save our time. for example,A week ago, we were stuck by a problem which immediately stopped experiments of our team and felt confuse and anxious. Everyone of our team had tried a lot to solve the problem and (keep)kept the experiments running for two days, but no good news could be heard. Then our teacher gave us an advice about the process of experiments, and the problem was disappeared within one hour.: i5 B" E- g" l
Someone may take an opinion that young guys have many advantages to work with us and improve us such as easily communication, strongly passion, highly innovation. But we can learn that these characteristics are also existed in the older people. good point !My teacher a 50 years old man can set a good example. He is a very kind man, often discuss problems with us, share new ideas, encourage us to try new ways to solve problem, and sometimes argue with us for different opinions. We all love him very much.3 d5 sgoo- q9 ^4 A/ }0 I) J1 a3 Y! @* ]
To make a conclusion, I think the older people can do more than the young guys to give some advices and help us.4 U* h4 }* t%

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总结 其实作者的思路还是挺好的。 就是有些句子来的和前后逻辑或者说和总体不是很连接。还有就是论证不太有力，特别是第一个观点。阐述说理的部分需要加强。这是我个人观点。嗯嗯，加油。如果有改的不好的地方请多包涵

FelislynxUID: 3317754

语法我改不了，思路清晰，文章流畅，全文似乎都是观点阐述，结合论证＋例子如果再加分数回更高，加油

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确实，例子部分是我的弱项。
5# Felislynx

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Title: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The world is changing fast, people are less happy. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree with the statement that people become less happiness in spite of the significant changes in the world. Because the fundamental conditions of people to be happy are not changed, even though the ways people use to get their goal and become happy are dissimilar with the old ones.
First of all, the sense of success will take the happiness into people’s heart. But unlike the old days, due to the dramatic pressure and competition it is more difficult to make someone feel success nowadays. We should work hard and race with time to finish our assignment because the information communication and source transforming are so fast and large in the quantity. However, in the past it is easy to complete our work, we just go home and have a rest in the night rather than keeping work with the help of electric lights.
Furthermore, the pressure of our brain is much larger than that in the past. With the high developed technology, we can deal with various kinds of problems in the computer which are exhausted our mind. There are lots of problems occurring in this fast pace world, such as high fat rate, high car accident, lots of psychological diseases. So the changes in the world also bring in plenty of bad things.
Finally and the most important one, there are less chance for people to release their pressure and rest their soul. Today, the intention of major people is to be number one rather than well-being, so even they are tired in both physical and mental they will not stop to have a rest. We also find people who do exercise in gym are so tense to finish their action like an assignment. Thus, the changes in the world make people be unhappy.
Totally speaking, happiness is something people could get by adapting the environment but not falling into the environment thoroughly and miss themselves. And the changes with the development in the world make it more difficult to get.
只写了独立作文，综合作文暂时没写。

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修改意见在附件里

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独立：Colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. Agree or disagree?

Will course exactly give the abilities that students should have to meet the need of job or further study to students? I don’t think the answer is absolutely opposite. Furthermore, according to me, more courses could not really be good for students’ future as somebody has expected. There are several reasons shown as followings.
First of all, we would not doubt the necessary of taking courses for students to get knowledge, but the effective of every course and the depth of each course that students could reach shouldn’t be ignored and needed profound discussion. Take mathematic for example, for a student whose major is mathematic certainly ought to take some relative courses, however there is no need to take some chemistry courses or physic courses. So the point to improve students’ abilities for their future is not the number of courses they have taken but how many the quite right courses they have learned, and what’s the depth they have reached in their major.
In addition, increasing the number of courses will cost more time of students which will actually decrease their time to do other things. As we all know, study is not only a matter of learning but also a matter of practicing. We can learn more lively in an experiment and have a deep impressive, because we can prove the disciplines in the books and our expectations to the result, and we take a measure on the whole process of carrying out the experiment. So it should take the practice part into consideration when assign the courses.
Last but not the least, we should put the course assignment into each individual school rather than ignoring their differences. For instance, a school which has a full course assignment should not arrange more courses due to the limitation of educational sources and practical problems. On the other hand, it might be a good measurement for a school whose course assignment is less to give more courses.
Totally speaking, we couldn’t make a course arrangement as we expect, but take the real conditions into consideration.

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according to me   这个短语看起来有点别扭。。。个人意见。。。

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改好了

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