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Staying healthy through playing sports and eating well should be an individual’s duty towards society rather than a habit for personal benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?  

The proliferation of sedentary life style in the modern society produces many detrimental effects  on both individuals and the society level. Some people assert that it should be one's duty towards the society to stay healthy, while the others contend that staying healthy through playing sports and eating well is completely for personal benefits, having nothing to do with the community. Personally, I am in favor of the latter opinion.

People would be better motivated by personal interests than by social welfare. The perspective of possible athletic scholarship promotes many teenagers to play sports which they are not interested in. The fame and money is their solitary goal in the beginning, but they finally get the fun and exercise of playing sports as well. Moreover, making friends is also one popular incentive for people to play sports. Sports creates goodwill between the players. "Sportsmanship" means that we play with the most savage competitive instincts while in the arena, but shake hands and wish our opponents good luck when the game is over. Lastly, "I need to keep healthy", is what most people think when they decide to do exercises or to be on a diet. Obviously, we can be sure that personal benefits is the major concern for people to stay healthy.

It is undeniable that society benefits from healthy population. Burgeoning healthcare expenditure is a dead burden on our government budget. A research conducted by the National Academy of Social Science revealed that nearly 75% percent of the healthcare spending of the Chinese citizens happens in the last year of our life. Could any situation be more grimly whimsical than that? It is imperative for us to improve our life style. But there should not be a national legislation forcing people to keep healthy through playing sports and eating well. That is not only impractical but also a violation of the civil rights of our citizens.

There is no doubt that eligible citizens should always keep the social welfare in mind, but staying healthy should be personal concern rather than social obligation.

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bqiana 发表于 2012-6-29 12:09
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