7.11IBT作文求批改和建议

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本人新手上路，最近准备专攻作文，初步小试牛刀，发现写出按时作文是没有问题，但总是和例文有一些差距，虽说个人有个人的风格，但是敝人想提高写作水平的决心是不变滴！:lol希望各位大大给予一些中肯的建议和帮助，以上。

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People think they have the right to know the truth,so they want others not to hide itt from themselves.However,do people always well-prepared to face it indeed?As I thought,telling the truth is harmful to relationship.
First and foremost,truth will not always be good.A happy truth will surely make one feel good at once,but a bad news can also smash one's good mood into pieces,that is why the "beautiful lie" come from.In our life,we do not really need the truth,we just need the feeling that we have everything in control.
Secondly,truth will ruin the privacy of people.As is known to all of us,even the best
friends have some stuff that they do not tell each other.It may sound strange but it is quite reasonable:before they are friends,it is more crucial that they are themselves as individual,thus they have distance between both of them.Because they have differece,privacy,they can attract  each other to maintain their friendship.
In addition,truth can ruin relationship.Always telling the truth means you just through the fact to others,not considering whether they like it or their fellings.This suggest that you don not really know your friend or you do not repect them.
In consequence,we can not ignore the fact ,but we also can not juat throw it to our friend,that is harmful to us all.

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秋雨荆州 发表于 2012-7-11 14:07
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