【Daily Writing作文特训小组】ZoeX的作业帖

ZoeXUID: 2822447

灰常渣渣……捂脸求指教~
0730作文：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Does advice given by older people more valuable than from people your age?
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Some people may think old people's advices are more valuable in life because of their abundant experience. There even a saying goes that "who does not listen to the old will fail soon." However, I disagree that the advices given by old people are more valuable than those given by younger people for several reasons as follow.
Firstly, in my opinion, the age does not equal to experience. Some younger people who may have abundance experience, that their suggestions are more reliable than those of the older people who do not have ample experience despite their older age.
Secondly, I think, the older people's idea may be, sometimes, out of date. For example many old people think that only by reading books can a person learn knowledge, and internet is just a way of amusement. However, in modern times, on internet we can get all kind of information and learn many new things that may not can be learned from the books. Young people, who are more familiar with the internet, would have more correct advice on how to use internet. In this aspect, the young people's advice may be more valuable than those from older people.
What's more, from my personal perspective, giving advices not only need knowledge and experience, but also need the understanding of people who ask for advice. For example, teenagers may have many troubles, such as study pressure, quarreling with boy friend or girlfriend, at this time maybe talking to elder siblings is a better way than talk to parents. Elder siblings may understand more because they have just experienced this period, and have the similar ideas and values with their younger brothers and sisters. However, parent may not understand these problem because of generation gap, thus they may not give desirable advices to their children.
To sum up, in my view, older people's suggestion may be useful, however we can not only judge the value of advice arbitrarily by the age of the advicer. Some times, younger people's advices can fit the situation better.

lazysheepUID: 2955322

你好！感觉第一个分论点并没有解释 age does not equal to experience的原因，个人感觉再详细解释一下或举个例子会更有说服力一些。感觉第二、三个分论点还是可以的。

我水平不是很高，欢迎互改同题文章
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你好这是我的作业，刚刚传上来，麻烦修改一下。 你的晚上改好给你。

ZoeXUID: 2822447

继续捂脸……
0731作文：Do you agree of disagree with the following statement:
It is impossibleto be completely honest with your friend
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Whether we should always be honest to friends is widely discussed in a long period of time. Some people agree with this idea for they consider the honesty the enssential quality of people, let alone to friends. However others hold the opposite opinion. From my personal perspective, I incline to disagree with the statement that it is important to be completely honest to friends.
Firstly, it is harmful to be totally honest to friends in some situations. For example, when one of my friends said something bad about another because of some mistake, the I should do is to find out what problem do they have and try to solve it rather than tell the one who was blamed the truth that someone has said something bad about him. Another example can be that if I don't like a friend's new dress, I would choose to keep silence. Because I know every one has different taste however compared to harming my friends with such a trivial thing, I would rather be "dishonest". So I think, in some situations, conceal the truth is necessary.
Secondly it is no necessary to tell all the truth to friends for the reason that if they know the truth, they will be worried but cannot help. For instance, when I have fever and cannot go out to play with them, I may only tell them I sick that I cannot join them. I needn't tell them how serious my fever is, otherwise, they will feel worried and cannot have fun in their trip.
What's more I think it is not possible for a person to tell truth all the time. Every one has his or her own privacy, and even between friends there are some things that one would never want the others to know, such as a sad past, an embarrassing experience. Every one will make some excuse on some certain thing.
To some up, I think to be completely honest to friends is unnecessary and impossible, sometimes it is even do harm to the friendship. So in my view, we may conceal some harmful truth and even tell white lie to our friends.

ZoeXUID: 2822447

lazysheep 发表于 2012-7-30 23:34
你好！感觉第一个分论点并没有解释 age does not equal to experience的原因，个人感觉再详细解释一下或举个 ...

唔……非常谢谢……我的作文水平也不高【趴】但是我会尽力的，大家一起努力^_____^

ZoeXUID: 2822447

神探夏洛克 发表于 2012-7-31 14:57
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你好这是我 ...

好的，你的我可能也要晚上才能改好了，但是我作文水平不高，不要嫌弃啊【捂脸……
大家一起努力吧~

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7.30的作业我改好了……也参考一下其他同学的意见吧， 我怕我有点地方改得不对QAQ
论坛帖附件是不是有等级限制？留个邮箱我发给你吧QAQ……

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已经修改好了，加油。

lazysheepUID: 2955322

Whether we should always be honest to friends is widely discussed in a long period of time. Some people agree with this idea for they consider the honesty the enssential quality of people, let alone to friends. However others hold the opposite opinion. From my personal perspective, I incline to disagree with the statement that it is important to be completely honest to friends.
Firstly, it is harmful to be totally honest to friends in some situations. For example, when one of my friends said something bad about another because of some mistake, what I should do is to find out what problem do(去掉) they have and try to solve it rather than tell the one who was blamed the truth that someone has said something bad about him. (此句过于长而且有语法问题)Another example can be that if I don't like a friend's new dress, I would choose to keep silent. Because I know every one has different taste however compared to harming my friends with such a trivial thing, I would rather be "dishonest". So I think, in some situations, to conceal the truth is necessary.
Secondly it is no necessary to tell all the truth to friends for the reason that if they know the truth, they will be worried but cannot help. For instance, when I have fever and cannot go out to play with them, I may only tell them I sick that I cannot join them. I needn't tell them how serious my fever is, otherwise, they will feel worried and cannot have fun in their trip.
What's more I think it is not possible for a person to tell truth all the time. Every one has his or her own privacy, and even between friends there are some things that one would never want the others to know, such as a sad past, an embarrassing experience. Every one will make some excuse on some certain thing.
To some up, I think to be completely honest to friends is unnecessary and impossible, sometimes it is even do harm to the friendship. So in my view, we may conceal some harmful truth and even tell white lie to our friends.(感觉语法错误有点多，感觉前两个分论点阐述的内容差不多，第三个分论点阐述不够详实。一起努力吧！：D)
欢迎互改！--by lazysheep

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请查收~欢迎交流

ZoeXUID: 2822447

Do you agree of disagree with the following statement:
Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.



It is known to all that television and movie carry a variety of information, however, some people argue that some TV program or movies may mislead young people and influence their behavior in a negative way. From my personal perspective, television and movies have more positive influence on young people.

Most of all, I think the benefits of television and movie largely outweigh the problems they bring. On television we can watch plenty of meaningful programs including the areas of nature science, social science and different culture, which enlarge our knowledge and broaden our vista. For instance, I like to watch TV programs about archeology. Once when I went to a museum which just exhibited the things I have seen on the TV, I feel so familiar with those exhibits, and if I do not know the knowledge about them, visiting a museum would be much more boring. In the same way, the different types of movies from different countries bring us a culture diversity as well as knowledge in various fields.
What's more, television spread information quickly and lively, which bring people convenience and more enjoyment; and movies exhibition society and express feelings in an artistic way, which give people a more beautiful view to observe the world. For example, there are few people can go to a sports field to watch a foot ball game, however, a great number of people can enjoy the game including the fantastic performance of players as well as the excitement of the spectators on TV. In movies’ world the outer space is so mysterious, the history is so fascinating so that they can inspire young people to study on these fields.

In another aspect, the negative information that the television and movie carry such as violence and pornographic can be reached by young people though other medias such us books and magazines or computer games. So, it is not the television and movie that spread the evil information which have negative influence on the youths, instead, some other reasons such as study pressure, family problems which do harm to the youths’ psychology drive the youths themselves to accept information. If the young people get enough care and positive encouragement, they would not need to blow off steam through violence or pornographic programs.

In a nutshell, the advantages of television and movies play a main role in the influence on the youth, because they open such a colorful world to them, and the negative influences can be wipe out by other means such as proper education and guidance.

lazysheepUID: 2955322

It is known to all that television and movie carry a variety of information, however, some people argue that some TV program or movies may mislead young people and influence their behavior in a negative way. From my personal perspective, television and movies have more positive influence on young people.

Most of all, I think the benefits of television and movie largely outweigh the problems they bring. On television we can watch plenty of meaningful programs including the areas of nature science, social science and different culture, which enlarge our knowledge and broaden our vista. For instance, I like to watch TV programs about archeology. Once when I went to a museum which just exhibited the things I have seen on the TV, I feel so familiar with those exhibits, and if I do not know the knowledge about them, visiting a museum would be much more boring. In the same way, the different types of movies from different countries bring us a culture diversity as well as knowledge in various fields.(例子很好啊~)
What's more, television spread information quickly and lively, which bring people convenience and more enjoyment; and movies exhibition society and express feelings in an artistic way, which give people a more beautiful view to observe the world. For example, there are few people can go to a sports field to watch a foot ball game, however, a great number of people can enjoy the game including the fantastic performance of players as well as the excitement of the spectators on TV. In movies’ world the outer space is so mysterious, the history is so fascinating so(前面有so了，这里这个应该去掉) that they（语义上感觉应该指代movies但语法上看是outerplace 和 history,有些不懂） can inspire young people to study on these fields.

In another aspect, the negative information that the television and movie carry such as violence and pornographic can be reached by young people though other medias such us books and magazines or computer games. So, it is not the television and movie that spread the evil information which have negative influence on the youths, instead, some other reasons such as study pressure, family problems which do harm to the youths’ psychology drive the youths themselves to accept information. If the young people get enough care and positive encouragement, they would not need to blow off steam through violence or pornographic programs.（这段从反面论证也很好~）

In a nutshell, the advantages of television and movies play a main role in the influence on the youth, because they open such a colorful world to them, and the negative influences can be wipe out by other means such as proper education and guidance.
啊，不好意思，看了好几遍也基本没有挑出大问题啊>_<，楼主这篇思路清晰，论证也比较连贯有理~~~

ZoeXUID: 2822447

lazysheep 发表于 2012-8-2 15:17
It is known to all that television and movie carry a variety of information, however, some people ar ...

捂脸……这是自己改过的，打死我也不能在30分钟内写出这么多啊……总是不能迅速破题的熊孩子求指教QAQ
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顺手贴上8.2的作业，终于可以用附件了呼~
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Gyps_rueppellii 发表于 2012-8-3 20:40
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唔，灰常感谢~单词和句式真是我的硬伤啊！论证什么的，如果要在30分钟内写完就想不出好思路，多花点时间想又写不完，挠墙一百遍啊！！

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已改，相互交流~~