【独立写作】CHERRY的作业贴

CHERRY-maoziUID: 3395708

初次发帖，请多指教~~作文求狠批，我也尽力帮你们改，一起加油！

CHERRY-maoziUID: 3395708

1107Which of the following three factors contribute to an enjoyable vacation most? A. Good food; B. Good location; C. Good friends with you. (Life)

SYNCIAUID: 3130718

加油！

CHERRY-maoziUID: 3395708

刚才发了怎么没发上，再发一遍试试

adrian小豆UID: 3395053

姑娘 你的作文写得 真的蛮好的 我看了好几遍 都没挑出什么毛病

adrian小豆UID: 3395053

1107CHERRY独立写作.doc (23.5 KB, 下载次数: 15)

2012-11-8 15:24:08 上传

下载次数: 15

写的真的很棒 几乎挑不出什么问题来

adrian小豆UID: 3395053

亲 由于我的能力有限 所以看完你的作文 跟你简单地说一下 你的词汇和句子都没什么问题 只是你的表达方式会有一点本土化 I myself have a limited thought of foods to eat and places to go for fun in vacation. But it is never a problem with a group of good friends, especially someone who works in a tourism company. For example, after a warm discussion and useful information from professional friends, I finally spent my vacation with my friends in a small island last winter, where we enjoyed the sunshine and had many wonderful local foods there on a very reasonable price.这一段 有点中国式英语 度以来稍微有一点奇怪 其他都很好 向你学习

CHERRY-maoziUID: 3395708

1108独立写作People can learn more from watching television than by reading books. (Leisure)

素黑久UID: 3389790

已改~

CHERRY-maoziUID: 3395708

确实是concentrate on sth.，没有to的用法，谢谢你的修改！

wuxiang0220UID: 3354608

已改

CHERRY-maoziUID: 3395708

求Ro老师狠批，谢谢！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?  People now are more easier to be educated than the past.
The society has been developing at such a high speed out of my imagination since I was born. And education, as an essential part of the society, is dramatically changing as well. From what I concerned, people now are really easier to be educated than the past with its fast development.

First of all, the number of places for education especially private schools fast increased in the past twenty years which provides much more chances to be educated if you want to . I still remember when I was a child the only place to get educated was public schools. Gradually I heard few private schools and nowadays, advertisements of private schools are here and there. In the past, because of the limited educational resources, one had to pass entrance exam to get educated for certain sills. If failed, it was not possible to be educated. For example, when I was four, I failed in an entrance exam for a dancing course in a public school and could not be taught dance then. But now I can choose my favorite one from different dance courses in many private schools.

Besides, since education can be got out of schools, the recent technology improvement offers many other possibilities to be educated which leads education to be get much more easily than in the past. Before the invention of the internet, I can only read books to educate myself. The number of books I had restricted the knowledge I could acquire. However, in the modern internet-based world, I can not only be educated by electronic books all over the world from the Internet, I can also take those online courses from some famous lecturers from universities. Meanwhile, unlike payment for books, many of those resources are free to use. No doubt it is indeed more convenient to be educated today than in the past.

Another important factor I have to mention here is that because people nowadays realize that education is much more important than that in the past, they are more interested to be educated. Why do people have more interests in education now? I think it partially results from the relationship between money and education. The research has shown that generally speaking, more education results in a higher salary. And just like an old saying said, “interest is the best teacher for a student”. And for teachers, nowadays these people who are interested in learning are much easier to educate, too.

In a word, with both the easier means and more passion nowadays, people are easier to be educated.

mpromanusUID: 2565872

CHERRY-maozi 发表于 2012-11-19 08:04
求Ro老师狠批，谢谢！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?  People now are more ea ...

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People now are more easier to be educated (I have to actually correct the wordings in this question so many times that I find the whole thing absolutely absurd..you can say 'people are easy to educate', but this is not the same as 'education is easy for people', or 'it is easy for people to get educated', and you just don't say 'people are easier to be educated'. And 'easier' is in itself a comparative already, so 'more easier' doesn't make sense..it's either 'more/less difficult', since you can't say 'difficult-er', or just 'easier'.) than the past.

The society has been developing at such a high speed that is out of my imagination since I was born. (Without 'that is', you're actually saying that the society is developing out of your imagination.) And education, as an essential part of the society, is dramatically changing as well. From what I concerned, people now are really easier to be educated (See my comments on the question itself. It is absurd that people unanimously copy this blindly because even in Chinese you do say 现在人们更容易受到教育, but it actually still means 受到教育 becomes 更容易, not that 人们 becomes 更容易..which sort of proves that people don't really think about what they actually mean by saying something..) than the past with its fast development.

First of all, the number of places for education especially in private schools fast increased in the past twenty years, which provides you much more chances to be educated if you want to . I still remember when I was a child the only place to get educated was public schools. Gradually I heard about a few private schools and nowadays, advertisements of private schools are here and there. In the past, because of the limited educational resources, one had to pass an entrance exam to get educated for certain sills (?). If failed, it was not possible to be educated. For example, when I was four, I failed in an entrance exam for a dancing course in a public school and could not be taught dancing then. But now I can choose my favorite one from different dance courses in many private schools.

Besides, since education can be got (The proper form would be 'gotten' but I would strongly advise against the use of 'be gotten', because 'begotten' has a very special meaning and people just rarely use the verb 'get' in the passive. You get an education, but you don't usually say 'an education is gotten'. You can say something like 'received' though.) out of schools, the recent technology improvement offers many other possibilities to be educated which leads education to be get (See previous comment.) much more easily than in the past. (If the 'since' after 'besides' means 'because', then you're saying 'the recent technology improvement' is due to the fact that 'education can be gotten out of schools', which obviously doesn't quite make sense. If the 'since' means 'from the time of', it still doesn't make much sense either. Either way, the logical relationship between the clauses in this sentence is confusing.) Before the invention of the internet, I can only read books to educate myself. The number of books I had restricted the knowledge I could acquire. However, in the modern internet-based world, I can not only be educated by electronic books all over the world from the Internet, I can also take those online courses from some famous university lecturers from universities. Meanwhile, unlike payment for books, many of those resources are free to use. No doubt it is indeed more convenient to be educated today than in the past. (Good comparison and good argument.)

Another important factor I have to mention here is that because people nowadays realize that education is much more important than that in the past, they are more interested to be educated. Why do people have more interests in education now? I think it partially results from the relationship between money and education. The research has shown that generally speaking, more education results in a higher salary. And just like an old saying said, “interest is the best teacher for a student”. And for teachers, nowadays these people who are interested in learning are much easier to educate, too.

In a word, with both the easier means and more passion nowadays, people are easier to be educated.

总结：

论述很好~进阶注意句子表意的清晰哈