【独立写作】凯子啊哦作业帖

月明日暗UID: 3400027

啊啊啊。实在不好意思，12.25竟然忘记了！！！！！明天给你吧！！5555.。。

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月明日暗 发表于 2012-12-27 23:04
啊啊啊。实在不好意思，12.25竟然忘记了！！！！！明天给你吧！！5555.。。

ok 没问题

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凯子啊哦1227-revised by alexcui.doc (26.5 KB, 下载次数: 2)

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月明日暗UID: 3400027

怎么说呢，楼主现在已经很少有语法错误了，而且按照自己模板写已经有段时间了，我有点茫然不知道该给你怎么改了，你希望从哪些地方有改动呢？

还有针对你建议的加强细节，我12.28的作文换了一种方式写，正好咱们一组，提点建议吧=3333=

月明日暗UID: 3400027

12.27

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12,25

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楼主。。。同一天考试。。。改别人作文拍改不好，我现在去看看你的。

loveticcoUID: 3402732

第一改了作文，可能不好，请楼主见谅

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loveticco 发表于 2012-12-30 10:22
第一改了作文，可能不好，请楼主见谅

lz very few那句里 我貌似没说明role在哪个方面 应该是这个成分缺了吧 还有这里我有个小错误--
另外 我想问 就是那句信息pop out 怎么邪恶可以又写出伴随的感觉 又不会出现语法错误 如果lz会的话求教

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凯子啊哦1229.doc (21 KB, 下载次数: 4)

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已改~

月明日暗UID: 3400027

12.30

blesslingUID: 3401831

不知为啥我贴被删了。。。难不成写了河蟹词囧
贴这~请指教~

In order to make ourselves happy, we should learn how to make others happy first. (Happiness)

 The magically contagious power of joy has been long attested to by various cultures, in which  bringing happiness to others is not only a virtue but a fountain of mutual happiness. The same situation happens to many of us when we feel equally happy cheering up our family, friends or even strangers. Yet, this does not necessarily mean that the ability to make others happy Is the prerequisite for us to gain happiness.

In many cases, our happiness relies on others' pain. Imagine a cold winter night when you are extremely longing for a hot meal but are stressed out by work. Other than driving to a local restaurant or cooking at home, I bet the instant reaction for most people is to call a food delivery man, because who does not want to stay in a cozy and warm house and enjoy  a total relax. In order to satisfy their customer, a cook have to make a dish , a chore he has been repeated for thousands of times and a delivery man has to fight against the freezing wind to deliver the meal. The costumer feel happy with the order, yet the cook and delivery man may feel otherwise.

Additionally, to some level, happiness is a private thing that is only concerned with ourselves. Consider our various definition of happiness resulted from different educational background, family environments or financial status, we may know what makes others happy, but won't feel exactly the same ourselves. For instance, If my friend was an art dabbler and I were a man of little taste of art, standing in the Sistine chapel and looking up at the beautiful ceiling would be an unprecedented satisfaction for him or her, while, for me, it would be nothing more than a frequent visit of a cultural spot.

Given what I have discussed, although we can make our selves happy by cheering up others first, I believe their is no strong connection between  one's happiness and others. After all, we do sometimes satisfy ourselves by distressing others, Besides, independent individuals have different perception of happiness.

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月明日暗UID: 3400027

1.1木有分组。。咱们互改一下被~【星星眼