【Romanus作文修改铺】我也来排个队~

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我的逻辑一直处于很混乱的状态。希望大大下狠手批改，多多指教~~

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这道题用进化论果然好写啊。
虽然我不能用QAQ

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cdelee 发表于 2012-12-23 12:52
这道题用进化论果然好写啊。
虽然我不能用QAQ

为什么不能用呀。

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月明日暗 发表于 2012-12-23 23:20
为什么不能用呀。

因为我相信创造论XDD
Merry Christmas~~

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cdelee 发表于 2012-12-24 11:21
因为我相信创造论XDD
Merry Christmas~~

相信创造论的一般都信教吧

mpromanusUID: 2565872

12.22
Does the study of animals helps us to learn about human nature?

Recently, there has been a controversial topic debated by a lot of people about whether studying of animals is essentially helpful for us to learn human nature. It would appear that the connection between animal behaviors and human nature is itself ridiculous, since we human has been evolved (Either 'has/have evolved' or 'has/have been evolveing'.) completely (I'm not sure why you  specified 'completely'. Evolution is essentially a non-stop process.) since millions of years ago. Nevertheless, I definitely disagree with this statement for the main two reasons I will outline below.

First and foremost, we cannot deny that no matter to what extent we evolve from chimpanzees, we still belong to animals in the essence. The similarities between humans and animals are numerous and conspicuous. For instance, the observation of new born sheep's behavior reveals that they suck mother’s latex (I'm not really sure what you think 'latex' means but it doesn't mean 'milk', at least not animal milk. Latex is a kind of vegetable milk that's used to make a certain kind of rubber, its most common products being surgeon's gloves and condoms.) while kneeling, in order to show their appreciation and respect to mother,(Pardon me for laughing out straight at this. How on earth do you know this is the reason, since sheep can't tell you their feelings and probably nobody ever scanned a sheep's brain to verify this? It could well be that their front legs are not as strong as their back legs so they tend to kneel when trying to reach for something low, like a mother sheep's nipples..羊羔跪乳乌鸦反哺 are essentially educational fables like Little Red Riding Hood and the Big Bad Wolf. Please do not cite them as scientific truth.) which is consistent with the nature of human-the love and thanksgiving to parents. In this way, a study of animals behavior is an effective way to learn human nature since we share plenty similarities with animals.(If your point is that we can learn about human nature through studying animals because we share plenty similarities with animals, then a single example of a single trait is rather unpersuasive. )

Besides, through observation and study of animals, human has invented great works which have great impact on, even totally change our daily lives. To name a few, the fist plane was invented by researching the birds' flying secrets, the submarine was invented by studying the fish's swimming method and the radar was invented by investigating the ways bats determine the obstacles ways (That's a sonar, not a radar. A radar operates with radio waves, but a bat operates with sound waves beyond human hearing, therefore it's a proper sonar, not a radar. There's no conclusive evidence on whether, if at all, any animal can naturally produce radio waves.). Therefore, I do not doubt that we could learn more from animals, especially the aspects of the human nature, since we have abundant similarities with animals. (If your point is that we can learn a lot about human nature from observing animals because we share many similarities with animals, then your examples do not illustrate the 'because' part, since they are examples of similarities between animals and human inventions, not animals and humans. If your point is that if we can invent so many important things by observing animal behavior, we must be able to learn about human nature by observing animal behavior too, it's a non sequitur, 'something that does not follow'. This reasoning is only true when you can establish 'invent important things' equals 'learn about human nature', and this is obviously false.)

Yet my agreement to this statement (By now I have no idea which statement you are agreeing to, since in the first paragraph you said you 'disagree' with a certain statement.) does not suggest that all the studies of animals have a vital function to understanding human nature. Human has evolved for millions of years and thus are more sophisticated than any species of animals in the world from both mental and psychology.(Almost the same thing. The point is I don't see why you must mention these as two separate aspects in this sentence.) During the process of evolution, we gradually command on how to control ourselves and restrain ourselves within the social codes frame ('the frame of social codes'. You tend to form complex noun phrases exactly like how you'd do it in Chinese, that is, to pile all qualifiers to the left of the main noun. That's not the way to go in English.). Such behavior cannot be acquired by whatever animals. (From a purely scientific point of view, many social animals are capable of establishing and conforming to 'social codes': bees, ants, hyenas, wolves, most monkeys. Only that they do not always do it in a way that humans find familiar or comprehendible.) From this angle, learning human nature via studies of animals has its own limitation. But as long as we share the common (The common what?) with animals, studying of animals cannot be an inefficient way to understand the essence of human.

All in all, although we could not understand human nature totally dependening on doing research on animals, I firmly believe that studying animals is one fundamental way to get to know our nature, as no matter how fast the world changes, we are still the members of animals and we share a lot of similarities with them.

总结：
于是词用词性搭配语法还有第二个论点基本不靠题目神马的我都不说了。。看到第一个论点段的论据是羊羔跪乳我直接给跪了啊。。你不如说伊索寓言里吃不到葡萄说葡萄酸的那只狐狸让我们知道狐狸和人一样喜欢吃甜葡萄不喜欢吃酸葡萄 = = 羊羔跪乳神马的属于俗语故事，和小红帽大坏狼之类的童话一样，你可以说它们隐喻了社会价值神马神马但你不能拿它们当科学事实引用好吧。。

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mpromanus 发表于 2012-12-26 11:23
12.22
Does the study of animals helps us to learn about human nature?

T_T 我一直把它当成真事的。作文盲目疮痍啊掩面。辛苦大大啦~~=333=

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月明日暗 发表于 2012-12-27 15:12
T_T 我一直把它当成真事的。作文盲目疮痍啊掩面。辛苦大大啦~~=333=

羊羔跪乳这个事情据说是真有，我没查证过，这个事情本身没有问题。问题是它到底是因为什么才跪着吃奶的这个原因，没有定论，你说这是因为它表现感恩神马的，说‘羊羔跪乳是因为表现感恩’这句话，这不仅没被证明过是真的，也顶多只有前一半是事实，所以这句话只是一个猜想，一种没有被证实过的可能性，这样的东西你不能直接当作事实来引用为论据。你要引，也只能说，有人认为是这样的，我同意。。

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mpromanus 发表于 2012-12-28 01:51
羊羔跪乳这个事情据说是真有，我没查证过，这个事情本身没有问题。问题是它到底是因为什么才跪着吃奶的这 ...

其实写的时候我也想到了。。不过为了顺畅一些就写上了。大大 我不服气，虽然被你毒舌的一通批我自己也很尴尬的笑了嘛。。1.12就考试了，想让你在看一篇好不好嘛T-T

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mpromanus 发表于 2012-12-28 01:51
羊羔跪乳这个事情据说是真有，我没查证过，这个事情本身没有问题。问题是它到底是因为什么才跪着吃奶的这 ...

还有我真是衷心佩服逻辑思维超强的人，因为我本身一点逻辑都没有。不知道能不能培养出来

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月明日暗 发表于 2012-12-28 14:46
其实写的时候我也想到了。。不过为了顺畅一些就写上了。大大 我不服气，虽然被你毒舌的一通批我自己也很尴 ...

你不服气是正常的。。我说话超狠的我自己也知道 = = 而且说实话对付托福你这么写也就过得去了，托福考官才不会管你的论据是真是假是编的还是吹的，他们没有时间去琢磨这个。。但是不要说你以后读书写paper要这么写你的老师铁定会跪，光GRE的AW就够你喝一壶的。。

逻辑思维是可以训练的。这是我主帖里的内容：

逻辑入门，建议读一读这本基础教程，好处是每课都有练习题可以做来玩。。

或者可以读一读Max Shulman关于爱情是谬论的短篇小说。。这部作品是我大学预科英文课讲到逻辑时的读物。。

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mpromanus 发表于 2012-12-28 23:24
你不服气是正常的。。我说话超狠的我自己也知道 = = 而且说实话对付托福你这么写也就过得去了，托福考官才 ...

嗯嗯。过完这段，下学期有时间一定会读书的，把逻辑思维好好训练下。话说当年当GRE逃兵了。所以米国就木有去，最后报的香港。 大大你也在香港是吧？？

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月明日暗 发表于 2012-12-29 15:20
嗯嗯。过完这段，下学期有时间一定会读书的，把逻辑思维好好训练下。话说当年当GRE逃兵了。所以米国就木有 ...

啊~话说其实欧洲大陆本身就有哲学思辨的传统，我也是在英式教育下练出来的。。我现在在英国，我先生在香港。我自己1.11学校考试估计加上时差1.12你可能赶不上再看一篇了。。= =

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mpromanus 发表于 2012-12-30 00:21
啊~话说其实欧洲大陆本身就有哲学思辨的传统，我也是在英式教育下练出来的。。我现在在英国，我先生在香港 ...

哇。姐姐你已经结婚了？好羡慕~~新年快乐哦~哈哈。马上就2013了，住诸事顺利，心想事成~=333333=